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Austere


Amateur writer with little to lose.

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*Hears 'reform Cozy Glow'*

*Looks at Tags*

Yes, this going to end quite well.

What the heck, I didn't notice that pic in the show because it was a brief one.

Cover: edited screenshot,

So Cozy doesn’t actually appear in that stained glass window? Well then who was in it instead?

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It was the Crystal Heart, if I recall correctly.

Why do I get the feeling Cozy Glow will be the Flowey to Flurry Heart's Frisk.

Yeah, Cozy is gonna go full on manipulative Flowey mode after this. Cozy isn’t stupid or niave. She will figure out what Flurry has been doing to herself, and Cozy is going to milk that information for all it's worth.

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Depends on how much Twilight's "reformation" of Cozy messed her up. Four years of solitary confinement not everypony can endure keeping their sanity intact and Cozy already not a model of stable person and a teenager to boot.

i feel bad for flurry.

doesnt feel worthy of being an alicorn at all.

that is really sad.

i hope ponies figure out about the cutting soon.

i predict a downward spiral that will only get worse until she explodes

She couldn't refuse to attend it, could I? Not even being an adult mare already. She depended on her parents after all. I guess being a princess means I'll just leech from the Empire's wealth till the day I die, she thought as she followed the purple carpet's trail.

I'd suggest recording this paragraph. It's a bit hard to follow with the inconsistent perspective, mixing narration and inner thoughts

It also didn't help what she was holding with her wing, tightly against her chest: her Whammy ; her foalhood stuffed snail toy; which she had brought in false hope that it would pacify her as it used to do a long time ago. She could only manage her breathing—slow and deep—while leaning to the side on her seat, and resting her head against the window. She closed her eyes and hoped to never reach her destination. Can alicorns die in a train-wreck? was a loose thought, perhaps the last she had before falling asleep.

Thank you for including this little detail. So many adult flury heart stories just ignore her foal years.

You useless, naive, antisocial, piece of...

I am FEELING these self depreciating thoughts. Way to make her a lot more relatable.

C ... R ...E... A ... K ...

That's a really clever visual gag

"Oh, well"—Spike raised a clawed-hand to scratch the scales on the back of his head—"Long ago when I was just twel—no actually eleven, I kinda saved the Crystal Empire... twice. "

I love that last minute correction. Like "actually, I'm a lot more impressive than I thought I was."

I am really looking forward to what you have planned for the future.

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