After a massive stormfront runs through Ponyville, Applejack realizes she'll have to get the apples that fell off the trees by herself, as Big Mac isn't available. She enlists Twilight to give her the endurance to do this without falling asleep again, but the unicorn's spell goes awry, and causes Applejack to grow to massive size. Twilight must find a spell to get her back to normal, before she does any real damage.
It's a more lighthearted sequel to my darker story, The Storm, though written in a way that it shouldn't require having read that story to get this one..
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I freely admit that dramatic stories come to me more easily than lighthearted ones, so this one may not be up to snuff. You be the judge. I just needed to get it out of my head.
First Appletini and now THIS man Applejack sure has a bad track record with staying at a normal size.
That was fast. I felt like I was watching a movie in fast forward.
This was... nice.
It was a good story, just a little fast. It could be expanded.
Feels rather rushed and sparse. You could probably have described things more and have done more with the premise
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Get it out of your head by writing it down as an outline to expand later. That's all this is. No description, just *bam!* She's huge. Nothing happens. *Bam!* Random shipping mentioned in passing. *Bam!* Solution is reached peacefully. Three words: Insert. Shenanigans. Here. This doesn't qualify for a dislike, and the concept is interesting, but you didn't do anything, man! Zyr, I am disappoint.
very mustache worthy
Choppy writing is commonly a problem writers face. I would recommend an editor, or friend that would not mind reading over the chapters. Especially for grammar and a flowing story line.
I'd say this story was something of an anticlimax, except that the anticlimax started at the beginning.
Of all the things this fic needs fixed I really had an issue with two:
AJ's comment on Twi's magic, getting really tired of " Twilight fails a spell" trope, just the comment, the fic justified it.
You said this could be read without reading the storm, however the shipping comes out of nowhere, unless you read the storm.
"So, Fluttershy, I hear you an' Rainbow Dash are together?"
......*facepalm* Fic completely ruined.
3590714 Why does shipping wind up in the most unrelated stories?
WHY???
6414240 I ask myself that question on a daily basis.