Flim and Flam come prepared to the Ponyville Schoolhouse with what they thought was a foolproof plan to solicit from their easiest victims yet - unknowing foals. But when Cheerilee bars them entry due to their names appearing on a newly-circulated list of ponies of a certain nature, they realize their problems may run deeper than a day of lost profits.
...oh dear
Flim and flam WHAT DID YOU DO!?
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Why, they conned foals, of course! Read the story :P
Totally not related to some list that showed up around this site, eh?
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no idea what youre talking about
Lightning: HEY! Im getting better!
Well then
Hey Lightning?
Go take out tirek
This is just what Equestria needs.
*Slow clap* Well played
Hah. Nice play on things.
One stumbling block by the way:
This sentence has a few errors: "inhaled them" should be "inhaled it" (unless Tirek is actually voring ponies), "cacophany" should be "cacophony", and either the jaw drop should be noted as audible, or "of" should be "as" before it. It's also awkwardly structured, so I would recommend restructuring the start of it to something like "As Tirek drained and inhaled the magic out ponies, their screams played as a cacophony..."
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Will fix this, thank you!!!
I'm glad you enjoyed it
I don't know if this is intentional, but I feel like this bit might be a specific nod to the fact that this "subject" of fanfic is one of the few where writers cover less-popular characters, like how almost no one writes about the Barrel twins unless it has a fetish tag. It's as if the only way for an obscure character to get noticed if your from outside the main show is by starting your career in the fimfic version of the porn business.
Dammit, that would make a really clever meta-commentary fic:
"So umm.. we are kinda knew to this, how exactly do we get a writer to notice us"
"well, did you feature in a popular episode or have anyone make memes about a minor joke?"
"no, our special wasn't particularly exiting, and almost no-one in the fandom talks about it"
"oh, well then there isn't much in the way of conventional help I can provide"
"Please! we'll do anything!"
"... anything? absolutely anything? even something that only a handful of readers would want to see, and the rest will avoid at all costs?"
"Anything to not be forgotten like those three fillies from G5!"
".. there is ONE option, but it's rather.. mature, though it is still legal if tagged properly"
"Thankyouthankouthankyou-"
"think nothing of it, I've had to dip my hooves into similar avenues every so often just to be noticed, so you have my sympathy"
"But seriously, this is a huge help, Thank's Ms... uh..."
"Mane-iac, just mane-iac"