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Darth Brony

I am a United States Sailor, putting Warheads on Foreheads.


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I don't think you have enough story tags, there. It needs six or seven more, maybe... just start making some up if you have to.

1435385 i wish, but unfortunatley they will only allow me to have six :raritycry: but what tags would you add to my story?

Romance is a good start, but it also needs the Pregnancy tag. And pregnancy is a thing that happens in real life that involves real-life problems, so you should add Slice-of-Life. Also, Dark is good but you also need Grimdark since there's subtle differences between them.

Definitely needs more Crossover. Maybe Sonic or Mega Man? Not sure. Might want to add a separate Crossover tag for each thing being crossed over.

Comedy definitely. Even though it already has Tragedy and Sad, there's no law that says it can't also have some comedy in it. Ever hear of black humor?

The story includes characters that have appeared in official episodes, so it needs Episodic. In fact, you should have a separate tag for every official character that appears in the story. I've noticed they only give you a tiny number of "featured characters" to list in each story, so it's a good idea to list secondary characters as tags. They'll probably fix this eventually, but for now it's a real pain.

I don't think the Humans tag is specific enough: you should add both Humans in Equestria as well as Ponies on Earth, and possibly Humans Turned Into Ponies and/or Ponies Turned Into Humans. I don't know if your story actually contains those, but it definitely should.

There are Alicorns in your story, so you should list the Alicorn tag, in addition to any of the following that apply: Earth Pony, Pegasus, Unicorn, Griffon, Baby Dragon and Adult Dragon, Sea Pony and Hippocampus, Changeling and Flutterpony, and possibly Nightmare which is a kind of Alicorn.

Alternate Reality is obviously a given. EVERY reality is just an alternate reality from somepony else's point of view.

Sex and Gore, obviously. It already displays these on the main page, but not in the individual chapter index page for some reason... is this a bug with Fimfiction? anyways, you might want to add more specific tags for sex (like M/M, M/F, or F/F, and Interracial for anything that happens between Anthony and Scarlet) and gore (Decapitation, Dismemberment, Impaling, separate tags for Drawn and Quartered), and all that sort of thing. This is mostly so people who don't like these subjects can avoid your story: otherwise, they'd read halfway through and then freak out. Also, add a tag for every cuss word you use, for people who are easily offended by profanity: ****, ****, ****, *******, and especially *****.

Basically, you're looking at thirty-nine extra tags. And that doesn't include the tags for every canon character that makes an appearance, so the final number might vary anywhere from five to fifteen. The more tags you include, the more people will want to read your story. It's fundamental probability science.

1435887 holy shit fuck! how the hell am i supposed to do that?

I'll read this soon. :pinkiehappy:


I really have no idea, honestly. From the way you phrased your question, I just assumed it was more of a "what if" scenario.

1438661 okay, thanks for the clarification. i wish i could change the tags though to add more.

I'm curious: If you could only pick one tag, what would it be? What is the most important theme that runs throughout the entire story? What was the strongest single thought or idea that drove you to write it?

1439022 that is actually quite difficult, but i would have to pick Romance. i started this story with a premise that no matter what, Luna and i would be together no matter the obstacle. the rest of the story are the obstacles that keep them apart and test their relationship to the max. thank you for taking an interest in this and for reading my story. i'm glad there are people out there who actually care why the author wrote what he/she did.

Ah Shiiiiit. Luna's gon be pissed!

1448964 you have no idea what's coming up next. :trollestia:

when will the next chapters be uploaded?

1500405 when I have the time to edit it on my computer I can only do so much on a phone. But it will be up for your enjoyment when it is ready, and it is currently 9500 words long so there is a plus side.

Saw last line...laughed my flank off. :rainbowlaugh:

1523464 thanks, this might just push me to finish the next chapter. Maybe :trollestia:

Agreed we want MOARRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!

1630398 i'm already working on chapter 5, so it will be good. i promise.

The main twist is how will scarlet lead the hive.. if she is the only 1 who feeds of the negative.... will she teach the others to adapt????
AAARGHHH!!!! CLIFHANGER!!!:twilightoops:

hey, i am haveing a major case of internet issues. i am only able to do this on my phone, so dont expect any updates for a while. that is all.

Dude at the end of every chapter there is a cliffhanger i want the next chapter NOW!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

1863272 sorry, i had just finished this one tonight, so a new one won't be out until next year. :derpytongue2:

no i hope he dont betray luna im going to cross my fingers as i hit the next button

NEXT YEAR oh wait almost new years cant wait all my fave stories update SOOOOOO SLOWLY WHY GOD

yea i guess so i was half asleep at the time of that comment so yea sorry about that

1875884 np, i love all my readers. even the ones who dont like my story.:twilightsheepish:

yea but i dislike the people who hate on a story because its HIE or has a human turned pony or even a human turned alicorn i happen to like human turned alicorn story's adds a lot of confusion to the story for the characters (on a 2nd note luna is best pony FOREVEEEER)

Small chapter .... but was epic :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

You sir, are a fucking asshole. I have a very vivid imagination and regret it very much.

just wondering is this Tyrant celestia or is she just gone crazy stupid with power while pist at are little super solder for getting her sister prego and or jelly because he picked her sister instead of her??:duck:

I forgot about this story and I just read the update and now I cant wait for more. :pinkiehappy:

2439241 crazy celest who is pist. She is not going to like the out come

MY only complaint is that the next chapter better arrive soon!!! :raritydespair:

2620798 depends on how fast i can write it, i do get lazy some times :pinkiecrazy:

I thought you had died. Keep making these chapters story's great and make another sequel cause Anthony's master chief so halo could come to equestrian...

3697526 I do have other projects I am working on, so this story is taking a slight hit, but I haven't forgotten about it. thanks for not forgetting about it either.-

WHY NO BUCKING CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

4004877 I am still writing three stories, and going to school.


Make a 3rd part to the series where celestial breaks out of her prison with discord and corrupts Luna and Anthony's baby after 9 years into the future

Your new home away from home hmmmmmmmmm wher have I heard that


Please, please, PUH-LEASE, have someone SMACK that out. This story needs assassins.

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