Applejack remembers the happiest day of her life
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First comment, http://www.youtube.com/user/AUnionOfGamers?feature=mhee me and my friends have a youtube chanel!
"No advertising in fimfiction comments" said Twilight. 
Well there were a few issues with spelling and such, but all in all it was a pretty good story.
Yeah, I liked this story! I thought it was really... cute and heartwarming. If I were you though, I would invest in an editor for grammar/format stuff. They would go through your work for you, so you don't have to worry about it.
Otherwise, I think this is nice! It was just an all-around good story.
i couldn't help but to finish it like that
1392242 Stop advertising then
Editing needed, otherwise fine.
*headdesks over and over and over* ....Just .... just take my upthumb and fave. >_>;
the leaves were returning to its natural green color.
their natural green color
Also, all the letter Is should be capitalized, if it's a character talking about themself.
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Cousincest?
1392296 Admittedly, that ending was kind of a mood killer. I'm not complaining, it was an entertaining ending. It just completely changed the mood of the story.
But overall, the story was...okay. It wasn't great, but it wasn't bad either. And other than some grammar errors (a couple misspellings, I's that are not capitalized, missing words, etc.), it was a good story with a different feel to it than most other stories.
Can I ask if I can make a riffing of this story for Mystery Pinkie Pie Theater 3000? I also want to make sure that I'm not asking this because I want to make fun of your story (even though that is technically what I'll be doing), I'm just doing it to have fun. In fact, I only will riff stories that I like. I will not riff your story if you don't want me to. And it will be a while before I get to it, since I'm only 8 chapters into a 21 chapter story that I'm currently working on the riff of.
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go for it!
i know i suck as a writer but it gives me peace of mind to put my story ideas in a concerte form and to have at least 1 person like it. i wanna improve but as i look back i see mistakes i've made, screw ups that i could've avoided.. stuff like that... it kinda demoralizes me and stops me from writing from time to time . In the end, i think i suck as a writer and many would say the same and its seems like with every story or chapter i write, the worse i get. 
but i can only go up from here right.........
right?
damn im being depressing. its fine bro you can use the story and i wont take anything you say to heart. i'm a pretty forgiving person
... I can easily proofread this...
I must've yelled "Oh my GOD!" about six times when I finished that! It's good! I thought it was Big Mac - I tend to skim - and I thought "Okay, little weird, but it's a decent story" and then I realised it was Braeburn and Oh my GOD!