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HELLL YAH, my favorite clop pony
Love your work man!
We need more Mayor Mare stories
*sees anthro story*
*squee*
*reads said story and its actually good.......clicks like and fav*
Like I said, you never fail to impress
Mayor Mare isn't that old, she's at least in her 30's or 40's. And grey might not be her natural colour, remember Ponyville Confidential?.
1394583 40 can still count as mature :P but that's another story!
1394142 Oh you!
um...mayor mare has a kinky side?
1394671 As they always say, expect the unexpected!
1394689 i see
1394619
Oooh, I wonder what'll it be?. I love your clopfics, who's next Cloudchaser and Flitter maybe?.
Dat Pic!!!
I used to think I had a problem with rushed stories.
But after reading this, I feel like my stories go at a perfctly normal pace. No offense, I loved this story, but it just sort of jumped right into it. 
People keep telling me my stories are rushed. Awesome job, please make more, but now I'm just confused at people's opinion of my own work.
Okay first not reading a clop fic.
Second, "antro" is short for anthropomorphic, which means humanlike.It refers to the literary practice where you bestow humanlike properties into nonhuman entities.
The show that Lauren Faust created is about anthropomorphic ponies. Anthropomorphic does not refer to the shape or the body of the being, it refers to the mind.
1394762 Maybe...
1395222 Yeah, I'm not much of a romantic writer, more erotic and wanting to get into the good parts!
1395270 So humanised then? But if I say that, then people will think they're human characters which they aren't.
1395733
Use "furry" that seems to be what you are going after, otherwise, I don't know, use more words to explain what you mean. It just irritates me when people misuse the word anthropomorphic. Since the oldest myths and legends from Arilds time to the most resent of fiction, anthropomorphism have been used for almost everything.
Anthropomorphism is almost the epitome of cartoons, so much so that cartoons that do not use it, is often found to be weird and out of place.
I just don't want you to use anthropomorphism to describe stuff like this, less there starts to become doubt as it is meaning. The word encompass everything about the show, and in no way means anything "dirty". "Care Bears" for instance is also anthropomorphic.
Let me ask you a question. Do you know what "alicorn" means?
1396086 I'm guessing it's not the term for a hybrid unicorn/pegasus
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That and:
Its the name of the horn of any unicorn, or the stuff the horn is made off.
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1396096
Correct it has three meanings, it was part of the plot in this highly unknown story that I wrote story
at first i was like
then i was like 
then i was like
and at the end i was like 
. nice job, hope to read more of your work.
1396609 why thank you very much!
I like it,very good.WE NEED MORE MAYOR MARE CLOP STORIES
that.
That was hawt.
1395270 you get beat up a lot at school dont you?
1401892
No, we don't have much violence in my country, when people meet someone they don't like (like me) they just pretend that they don't exist.
1402992 Thanks very much, I appreciate it!
1401943 it was actually a reference to a very funny joke from a game no offence and where are you from?
(heres the full joke)
Kreese: "You know what I don't get? I don't get why they call him Little Eddie when he's so fucking big."
Howard: " I think its supposed to be ironic."
Kreese: " ...What?"
Howard: " You know, the use of words to express something other than and especially the opposite of the literal meaning, usually a humourous or sardonic literary style or form."
Kreese: "...You got beat up in school a lot, didnt you?"
Howard "...Yes."
...I hear about people saying that their favorite clop pony is the Mayor. ... Now I know why. Impressive once again. ...I still can't get over my guilt for loving these so much though...
1406476
That's awesome.
1395270 If you read more fanfics then you would realize that EVERYONE uses the word anthro to describe stories like this.
1411189
"A million flies can't be wrong, shit is good"
1411116 Thanks man, heh there's nothing to be guilty of! If anything I'm the guilty one! And yeah Mayor mare is quite hot!
1411116 thank you
now that was awesome
1446968 why thank you!
By Celestia this is awesome!
ooooooohh my :3
older mares...bueno (licks lips)
hmm spike what do you have to say about this?
Well, coming off of your story “Hot Seed”, I realized your image looked familiar. Then I remembered “Spike Want!” being featured previously, though I never commented on it. While I seek to change that, I must admit that “Mayor Mare” seems to be one of the least-used characters, or at least one of the least featured.
A clop-fic involving a character rarely utilized? My interest: You have it… Time to dive in! Same style as before: I’ll point out errors foremost, but expect a review of the work at the end.
Also, side-note: I have no idea what her name is. If it’s “Mayor mare”, “Madame Mayor”, “Mayor Mare”, etc. If it’s the last of those three, then there are several errors, seen through the act of the stallion calling her “Miss Mare”, yet her name in the third-person being “Mayor mare”. I won’t address these errors, since I am too unsure of them to commit to them as “errors”.
… “sorting out ponyville’s productivity” – ‘ponyville’ should be capitalized.
… “She had already ‘releived’“ – Coincidentally, “releived”, the implied word, is the incorrectly typed one, as it should be “relieved”.
… “the nagging feelings continued to interrupt her thoughts stopping her from working” – I don’t usually question punctuation, but consider a comma between “thoughts” and “stopping”.
… “Here was this old mare suddenly getting intimate with him, why is this grey haired mare suddenly stroking my crotch?” – Okay, I think this was just badly formatted, but there are no errors… maybe if the two sections were seperated, or something to that effect, like the latter half was in quotations with italics to represent a thought. Otherwise, it seems like it just swaps between third and first person perspective.
… “know what cunninlingus was” – C… C-“Cunnilingus”… Feels weird to correct that particular error…… MEH! Just remove the third “n” and you’re golden.
… “She grinned at him undoing his belt as he watched in amazement at her eagerness” – Again, not technically an error, but consider a comma between ‘him’ and ‘undoing’: It sounds more like he was undoing his own belt, but then the rest of the sentence fails to make much sense.
… “still be fulfilled. She sat” – You forgot to put an “end-quotation marker” after ‘fulfilled.’, considering how it was the end of her line.
… “over her,and her” – “her,and” needs to have a space between the comma and ‘and’.
… “left her to clear up” – Did you, perhaps, mean to use ‘clean’ instead of ‘clear’?
And that’s all! For a formal review, I must say: The perspective is what interested me the most with regards to the writing. It seemed as though the act of her being a mature mare was often the focal point of the perspective, with several words being used to describe the Starbound's viewpoint of having sex with his boss. ‘Mature Mare’, ‘slimy’, ‘loose folds’, and ‘old lady’ all sounded somewhat demeaning, but it’s not due to the views of the author: It’s well-made for the perspective as he progressively accepts that what he’s doing is something he’s enjoying, yet it’s also something he takes time to accept, even question.
In terms of Mayor mare, she seems unusually commanding, but I suppose her character has a lot of leeway in terms of the views and directions fans can take it upon using it. I’m not sure if I liked it much, but I liked the way it was used for this fic; it fit better than a more ‘professional’ tone that a mayor may take upon themselves with regards to how they might carry themselves as an individual.
So, the question that remains is, ‘do I like it?’… Well… I can’t say that I do, in good faith. I don’t dislike it, but the usage of so much negatively-viewed terminology turned me away for the most part. Is this for everyone? No, and I’m in that pile, but I certainly think you should receive more views for this fic. Unlike ‘Hot Seed’, it also ends on a satisfying note, without seeming like it should delve further into a history or plot of some kind.
If this was a fic that you had seemed dedicated at in terms of what I could see, I would be more critical in my opinion, maybe even outright negative, but in the very fic description, you mentioned that it was done for a friend.
Believe it or not, that affects more than you’d think: It tells me why you don’t take requests on a regular basis, at the very least!
OK i just have one complaint I read the word (slimy) 7 times I mean come on...good story tho 4/5
Just for the record, Mayor mare is actually younger than she looks. Remember in the episode "Ponyville Confidential", it turns out her grey mane is only grey cause she dyed it. Her natural mane color is light pink similar to Pinkie Pie's coat.
2417368 I realise this after I wrote it. Oh well, I was going for the more mature approach anyway!
2420764 And I like it. Besides, not everyone whose old has grey hair. She can be a foxy cougar who lucked out in the mane department.
I'm still waiting for a story where she isn't the one in charge, just for a change.