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NotHereAnymoreProbably


I'm not here. You can't see me. No one can see me.

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It all begins with a night spent above the clouds�
Overnight, everything changes for Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash as they at last begin to realise that they�ve always been a little more than just friends. As they unravel their newfound feelings, discovering more about each other and themselves, they can't help but wonder if they both feel the same way � and after Rainbow Dash makes a mistake that could take a lifetime to mend, she fears that she may lose her closest friend forever.

Cover Art: Mornin' Sleepy Head, by Kiyoshiii at DeviantArt

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 382 )

Very cute, I am totally tracking this. Looking forward to what you have in store for the future! :pinkiehappy:

...Where is the BEEF? :facehoof:
I will be back for BEEF, Tomorrow?

dude awesome you posted this up will track

lol dude imagine how people would react to see how long this actually is.

Cute. Doing my favorite ship as well. Tracking, so hurry up and finish! (if you want to)

Prepare - MOAR cannon is being fired. Next chapter will be up within 24 hours. (But don't expect that to be regular.)

P.S - Thanks for commenting - even just the small comments make me squee inside :derpytongue2:

Daw... I'm so tracking this. Bro-hoof for the Jambo reference :pinkiehappy:

I laugh at myself. I said within 24 hours, not one and a half :twilightblush:
But seriously, you guys don't care. You love it.
Hopefully you'll love the chapter just as much as the quick update...

Woot! Yet another fic I'm tracking updates within an hour! the joy has been doubled! three times even! :rainbowlaugh:

"But she wasn’t sure whether or not to tell Rainbow the truth; she had only gotten over one of those problems, "

RAINBOW DASH CAN'T HANDLE THE TRUTH!

:yay: Awesome again! Please don't make this a sad fic like that epiphany one I read :fluttercry:

>>McChicken116 Nah, not doing that. It might be sad at times, but it has a happy ending eventually.

I agree with the person above. It's a really cute story, if not a little too predictable. The Sonic Rainboom incident should've been the first thing that happened in the story.

"Anyways" is not a word. :facehoof:

I have been reading books for quite a while, and fanfics for (not) nearly as long. I can safely assume that you know what your doing and where you are going with this story, I hope to see more from you in the future.

Great start, it was a fun read.

Minor issue in chapter 2, you had two characters speaking in the same paragraph. (Fluttershy and Rarity)

So far this is a great story in both plot and in grammer gotta love both dashie and shy but together CUTENESS OVERLOAD

100001
This is your first fic? Damn dude, talk about natural talent. Nice work here.
I don't rate until I read chapter 3 or 4 of a fic, but right now, I'm leaning towards a 5 :twilightsmile:

100545 You do not know how much that means to me.
You sir, get all the YAY
:yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

The above comment does none of you any justice. You all get all the yay!
:yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

Sadfacing so hard right now...

as you say, it's probably the lowest point in the story, still: the way you portray rainbow here makes sense to me, awesome job keep it up :twilightsmile:

Aww yeah! Just passed 2,500 views!
Feelin' so boss right now...

OMFG i love you, this is an amazing surprise for my Saturday night, dude i love your story it's so good, i mean amazing this chapter makes me cry although i might have to read it like 5 times to figure it out but that's good, i get to read it more, as always good work,

alright i read some of it again and it makes a lot more sense, which makes me even more sad. I cant wait till chapter 5!

114573 If you'd be so kind - what, specifically, didn't make sense? The bit at the end with the flashbacks?

114577 it just jumps around a lot, i kinda got lost but a quick re-read sorted it out

114578 Wow, you're right. I can't believe I didn't pick up on that when I proofread it - that's crazy, right there :facehoof:
Still, I don't think it needs changing - It's fine as is - I just hope all of my readers care enough to read it twice if they have to. Thanks for the help :rainbowkiss:

Wow, good job man. This is probably my favorite chapter yet. When I think about it, this is EXACTLY how RD would probably react. Nice work.

114583 i don't think it needs changing either it's really good, don't think for 1 second it's needs changing, it's amazing, it's one of the best fics I've ever read.

I cried so much when I read this chapter. :rainbowkiss::heart::yay:

:fluttercry: That was pretty dark man. Really good, but really dark

dude this is an epic win love the story :)

115054 I hope it wasn't too offputting. Like I said in the author's note, it won't be that way for much longer.
114921 I'm glad - I was hoping someone would :twilightsmile:

Personally, while I quite like the dark and sad stuff, I'd rather not write it - I really like happy endings. My stories always seem to end up heading that way though, so I try to skip over it without detracting from the quality of writing or plot. You guys will have to tell me if I start to fail at that.
Though, for all intents and purposes, tell me if I go too far as well. Evidently this chapter was pretty powerful, judging by the comments.
(Hint, hint - See? This is why I like comments :rainbowkiss:)

Take this fav, these 5 starts and write with them. Write until there is nothing to write.

I want more , NAO!

I cant wait for the sweet part oh my gosh when Fluttershy wakes up im gonna cry like a little schoolgirl °_°

115332 That I shall. I cannot be rushed, however - my genius takes time, my muse a lot of lube :trollestia:

Considering how quickly the updates appear to be coming, you're not likely to have to wait long - and there I was last week, thinking one chapter a week was good - then I go and hit up nearly 15,000 words over two stories in just four days.

Confound my readers - they drive me to write like lightning!

I love it - I love you guys. Have a :moustache: on me! Keep me writing!
(Psst - Your comments help - I love reading them :twilightsmile:)

am i the only one that thinks it is weird that pinke pie knows about seppuku? anyways... awesome story. i present to you... THE MUFFIN OF :moustache:

115371 It's Pinkie. Deal with it. I'm kidding - it's more about the whole honour thing, cuz she broke Rarity's trust an all of that.
And it seemed like a decent Pinkie alternative. Just something random.

Fluttershy DIED?

I do believe I will have new head on my mantle. *takes out hunting rifle and grins maliciously at author*

This part, mixed with the beginning of "Up" going on in the background was almost too much for me. *Ahem* Must not shed tears.:applecry:

115753 *Begs for his life* NOOOO! NO! That ain't it! Coma! Coma!

She isn't dead - I'm really gonna have to fix something if that's what you got! She's in the hospital on life support... Did I actually write coma anywhere? :twilightoops:

Phew... Sweet Luna, man, I wouldn't write a romance and then kill off one of the... romancees?... before it even got anywhere!
Do you think I'm Michael Bay or something? :trixieshiftleft: George R.R. Martin?:trixieshiftright:

............... Stephen King? :applejackunsure:

You took a turn with this I definitely wasn't expecting--and that's fantastic. The way you expand RD's character is very buyable, and watching her deteriorate into destroying her home, blindly injuring Pinkie Pie, and stoically taking Applejack's hits really captures her emotions in a powerful way. I'm not sure if you intended it, but I like to think the fact that she chose Sugarcube Corner to smash herself into was sort of her way of crying for help, too. Can't wait to see where this goes next!

116590 Thanks for the analysis! I love hearing when I'm doing things right :rainbowkiss:

Have a spike :moustache:

Sweet Celestia, I'm eatting this up like a bundle of Zapapples. (What, too soon?)

The writing? Superb. The grammar? Flawless as far as I can tell. The edge? Perhaps a bit too dark for my tastes, but enjoyable nonetheless. And besides, it's mostly up hill from now on. The characterization? Fantastic. The shipping pair? My absolute favorite. I really can't ask for a better fic to be reading. THANK. YOU. I'll take you up on that offer to try your other on-going fic just for the sake of your writing.

AppleJack really has no idea what Rainbow is going through right now. I know what it feels like to have accidentally hurt a friend, and I felt so horrible about it. Yes, friends tried helping me, but it just didn't help.:fluttershysad:

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