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20 years old. Loves mlp fanfiction of all types(mostly shipping).

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I regret nothing.

I regret nothing either! This was actually well wrote and fun to not see something depressing right at the end!

That was some very passionate stuff.


Neither do I. This was a beautiful piece.

I also have no regrets.

WRITE A SEQUEL:flutterrage: please for the love of faust :pinkiehappy: anyway bye!:rainbowdetermined2:

Comment posted by Lyall deleted Mar 17th, 2015

The regrets, I have none about reading this. :twilightoops: :facehoof: :trollestia:

Seems there are no regrets...

this is going into the group i made

I regret! But not this. Not this at all. My only complaint is that you used "sister" a little too frequently. Try mixing it up a bit more with other identifying descriptors. This was extremely well-written, especially the way you handled their emotions and the sensuality of the experience. It wasn't just sex, they made love.

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

this is a really rare ship.... and I don't regret finding it at all!

A little speedy in the beginning, but not rushy in feeling, and I think how they want foals make up for it, somehow. Very sweet- in my opinion.
Would definitely not mind a continuation, maybe with some shocked input from the M6, though, I have no idea what that continuation would be about. Good stuff!

It was so wrong, but it was soooo good.
Serious potential for a sequel about their foals. :twilightsmile:

SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL!....Please? :fluttercry:

I do have to say.... BRAVO! This was really well done, and it didn't feel like the normal clop here, but more of a wonderful beginning to a story about deep love. I say this should be continued.

Hell, normallly I don't care for futa, but as I said, this was different. This is art at its best.

I wouldnt mind a sequel, this story deserves it!

Freaking hate one shots because you can't say MOAR PLZ!!!, but a sequel would be nice. Just saying :twilightsmile:


*gives thumb up*
I'm just gonna leave this right here and be on my way...

I got some regret for you... but I ate it:applecry:
Anyway, great fic:pinkiehappy:

Day + Night = Sunrise/Sunset AKA Twilight:twilightoops:

I came.

Also, I don't know why, but this has been the first time I liked futa. Like, ever.

It was it beautiful . . .
the ending actually makes sense . . .
And I have no regrets!
Dawn and Dusk makes sense, but it raises the question: Where did Cadence come from? :rainbowhuh: :facehoof:
What's futa?
*Starts chanting:* SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL!
[Very general] Description (Assuming "Eternally Loved" takes place right after "Friendship is Magic, part 2"): Dawn and Dusk have been hiding in the castle for the past 5 years. Celestia and Luna have not shown them to the rest of the world, afraid of the reactions they will receive - and the questions that come with it.
So what will happen when the Mane 6 discover them?
IDK //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Scootaloo_lolface.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Applebloom_lolface.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Sweetie_Belle_lolface.png


Futa is short for futanari, which means double-form or hermaphrodite. Essentially, say, Celestia with a stallionhood.

"She finished, closed the last of the space between them and captured her sister's lips with her own in a light kiss.

Luna's body went rigid as her sister pressed her lips against hers. She was so shocked by the sudden kiss that she panicked and pushed her sister away from her, breaking their lips apart.


Part of her was disgusted and instantly repulsed by the action, knowing that it was wrong on a fundamental level."

Such a pity, this could have been a very tender moment and set a different mood for the whole piece altogether, but instead we get the short and awkward version again, and ofcourse Celestia would just leave her sister alone seconds after she's said that she wouldn't :facehoof:

I think you should take a look at a thesaurus and talk to somebody about characterization (Celestia would never say "I'll just leave" especially in that context)

hmmm. I guess you do have a point. I'll see about changing and making a small edit to that part and fix it up a bit. To be honest I didn't really work as hard on the plot of the story as I could have. This was mostly just a quick and dirty reason to have hot sex. Then again, most oneshot clop fics are like that.

But I do like to try and make as many readers as I can happy and this is a oneshot, so I think I'll go back and do an edit over it later as thanks for those of you that did enjoy it. :twilightsmile:


I see, well if that's the case I think it served it's purpose... I still like to see good story telling in any story though.


So many people want a sequel.... :twilightoops:
I guess I'll think about it. :duck:

It was suppose to be just another oneshot clopfic though. I'm glad it caught your attention enough to make you want more but I really don't know where I could take the story from here. I wouldn't do anything with the mane6, it would more likely just be an epilogue chapter set in the future with Celestia, Luna, Dawn and Dusk.

That's better than no sequel, but sequel still sounds good. It's your choice *crosses fingers for sequel*

Refer to general summary on 1405915.
If you did make a sequel, it probably wouldn't be a one-shot.
Then again, it could be. Depends on where you go with it.

I know I will be going to hell for reading this:pinkiecrazy:
And I couldn't care less:trollestia: It was way to funny to miss.:pinkiehappy:

Good job:moustache::moustache::moustache:

The sex was well done. The incest was... regrettable, but acceptable to a point. Conceiving foals entirely passed that point.

In addition, there is no chance a 30 year old mare would have an intact hymen, much less a millenia old one.
Also the idiotic scene with the cervix. It's possible with enough pressure and a seal to force fluid to squirt through the cervix, but otherwise, the cervix does not react to pressure like that. And that would be agonizingly painful if it did.


You're bringing science and reasoning into a mlp clopfic? :trixieshiftright:


Any fic that disregards science and reason should have the random tag. Clop or not.

Well all you have to do now is find pretty much every story on fimfiction that doesn't have a random tag already on it and tell them that too because they all break the laws of physics and logical reason at one point or another.

The show too.

Personally, I blame it on this pony ----> :pinkiehappy:

You know something? I've been breaking my "No reading incest" rule more and more often these days. And you know something else? I don't have a problem with that.

Bleh! A penis. I don't know why, but I hate it when there's penises in clopfics. The non-penal (I know that's not the right word, but it...just fits) part was good though.

Sequel! :flutterrage:
Maybe not a one-shot but rather a short story about her pregnancy and the foal? :fluttercry:

Are you male? Then you're straight! Congratulations! :-D
If you're a girl, then maybe you're gay? Congratulations! :-D
If neither, then Umm.. I have NO idea. ;-D
In any case.. :pinkiehappy:

I liked it, even if pony hell awaits... I eagerly anticipate a sequel

please please please please please please:fluttercry: is alw i wants:fluttercry:

god, this was good :D

i really should stop to read these during work, though....

Me and my body regret not a damn thing.

I thought it was getting a might cramped down here in pony hell... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_hmph.png

1411294 Mostly, well, Yeah, used to hate futa. Then I became more of a depraved wish-I-wasn't-sexual. Alright, blame honesty, but more of a depraved bisexual.


My Mind is telling me nOOOooo!!!!! but my body my body is telling me YEEEEESSSS!!!! :trollestia:

Sequel <3

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