Music.
It's great, right? Gets your hooves movin', your heart pumpin', really makes you feel alive. I'd always heard, felt, lived, breathed music every day, every second of my life, and I'd never even thought about it.
At least, not until I agreed to save another dimension while blackout drunk, traveled there with my best friends, almost died (many times), fought horrible monsters, met an actual living god...
And, well, there's more than that, but I'm getting ahead of myself already. For now, perk your ears, listen up, and you'll hear a story that I'll never forget. The story of the Eternal Song.
Cover art by the amazing Turbosolid.
Chapters (10)
very much yay for your awesomeness!
This looks like a good read. Bookmarked. About 300 stories to read now, and I have to read all of 'em in a few days later on.
Hmm, I like where you're going, and what's up is very well written, but you're 17k words in and we seem to only now be starting the story proper. Are you planning for this to be an epic-length adventure? That would be awesome.
Also, in chapter 2, I'm pretty sure 'desert wizard' should be 'dessert wizard', unless Bon is some ancient spawn of Anubis or something.
1379626 Yeah, that's the plan. And thanks for the catch. Hilarious as Bon-Bon, Ancient Mistress of the Shifting Sands would've been, it wasn't what I was going for.
Wow, this is really under-rated. Looking forward to more!
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Will do!
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Well, that's good. I think.
More. I demand more. MORE MUSIC WIZARDS! MORE ARC LIGHTNING! MORE VYNIL X TAVI!
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AND SO DECLARED THE SUB:
"THERE SHALL BE MORE. SOON. ISH."
First things first, this is pretty good so far. The characters are written well and the banter is amusing, plus I'm intrigued enough by the plot and what happens next. That said, those are sort of the bare minimum for a decent adventure story. It's still too early for me to make a judgment call on how good this is.
At the most I can comment on some of the ideas here, and so far most of the ideas are pretty cool. Vinyl, Octavia and friends on an inter-dimensional adventure? Sure, sign me up as interested. Vinyl as musical mage thing? Also cool. Living amulet thing that snarks in Vinyl's head? Nice. Very amusing so far. Russian Octavia? That is so cool, I wish I'd thought of that. Seriously, did you come up with Russian Octavia, or borrow it from elsewhere? Because that's so damn cool, Russian Octavia is now my head cannon.
Anyway, in the end it's pretty good so far, the ideas here are cool and it has got the potential to be pretty great. Liked and faved, and I look forward to more.
Oh, and cliffhangers suck, and they're a bad habit for a writer to get into. Just saying. I'm already predicting that what Vinyl's seeing is going to be Octavia doing something cool/unexpected. Maybe sword fighting or something.
Oh! and just maybe something worth mentioning, but I have been known to write unreasonably long reviews from time to time and dropping them on unsuspecting authors. If you'd prefer I don't do that then let me know.
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I love how you show that the background ponies are in relationships already. That way it's shipping, but it isn't a shipping story. If that makes any sense.
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Thanks. I wanted the romance to be there for banter and drama purposes, but I didn't want to make it a focus of the story. That should stay (mostly) on adventuring.
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I don't mind at all. I love reviews. Praise is great too, but things that actually help me improve as an author are things to be treasured.
For now my feeling on the cliff hanger...
now that is out. I picked this up cus it was a Vinal stroy an well i have enjoyed it so far. The humor is great, to me. An the off switch line... funnny! Keep up the good work an i can;t , tho will have to, wait for more.
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png THIS MAKES ME HAPPY!
Alright, I would like to thank you for a rather interesting hour and a half of reading with a easily sauntered into spot in my favorites list. It may not be coveted, but its all I got.
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia.png Well, maybe I might have a bit more... rawr~
Music is the fabric of the Universe? It's like Background Pony... but now there's FOUR OF THEM
I D'AAAAAAAAAAAW at your Vinyl x Octavia shipping.
This story is getting really good. I absolutely love this story so far. It is amazing.
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btw *dessert
This definitely needs more readers! The ideas you've got in this story are brilliant. I really love how you detail the characters, especially with how Vinyl's immaturity shows through even during a state of inter-dimensional peril. Also on the topic of characterization, I like how you portray both couples as being so different, yet so compatible. I know this is seen with ships already, but I like how you make a point of it while keeping the main focus on the adventure.
This story has had great potential from the start. Don't let that go!
NEED MOAR STORY!!!
PLS!!
I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!
I'M ON EDGE!!
MAKE NORE NOW!!
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Not sure if you read my blog post or not, but the next chapter should be up some time tomorrow.
Hopefully.
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WOOT!
soooooooooooo awesome! can't wait for more although it starts a little slow
Holy crap this was a long one. Hope it was worth the wait.
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... Slightly cheery for someone that just lost a valuable artifact.
Very nice, please keep going. You've gotten a lot better at action scenes, too.
Also: ex-special ops Redheart? I see that cross-promotion.
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Heh.
1502158 hmmm let me think on that YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! no thought needed!!!!!
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You know, I think you're right. I went back and edited that scene a bit just now, let me know if it's better.
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Yeah, it feels better. He seems polite and nice, but less "Hey! You kicked my ass, good job!" then he did last time.
YES. YES THIS WILL DO. HMMMMNNNNN :D
I hate it when stories are under appreciated, I mean, this story, at least, what I've seen so far, I kinda awesome and I can't wait for more
More please!
I've been checking every day to see if this updates, take your time though, quality is of much importance! This is my favorite fanfiction that I've read so far.
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Thank you, that really means a lot. Work on chapter six has been a little slow so far, but I'll try to double down and get something out soon just for you.
*peeps in* Hmm, eternal song in everypony? Crazed gods? Freaky monsters? Music powers? And Vinyl Scratch with a piece of sarcastic possessed jewelry?
Is this like a non-emo version of "Background Pony"? Which is a great story and all, but just overflows with misery and torment. SS&E is a hyper-sadist to his main characters.
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You know, I haven't actually read BP yet, but since a couple people have made the comparison now I suppose I'll adress it.
I would honestly say TES as I've planned it now is less Background Pony and more FO:E or It's a Dangerous Business (NOT in terms of quality, but overall scope). That is, I'm going to try to make the main focus on adventuring, discovery, and exploration rather than deep introspection about the nature of life and stuff. Mostly because I'm not very good at writing that, and because depressed characters are no fun. I can't say the story won't ever stray into darker territory, and there's actually quite a good chance it will at some point, but I do plan, at least right now, for there to be a happy ending.
(Also the Lyra in this story is nowhere close to the Lyra in BP, if that's what you're worried about.)
1618670 Actually, what I was thinking was that Vinyl would be like Lyra in BP, only with Vinyl's in-your-face rockin' attitude and a whole bunch of crazy adventure stuff instead of 'should I slit my wrists now from the pain of knowing the universe will fade to blackness and cold and everything will be dark and dead forever?' mental anguish.
1618753 In that case, you're pretty much spot on. I hope you enjoy it if you do decide to read.
1618805 I'm sure I will. As interesting as some of those deeper stories may be, I am getting a bit annoyed at the propensity for them to conclude that the universe is pointless and will end in a black void of eternal nothingness. Given that our universe does seem to have burst out of nothing, I find it silly to assume that another one, or many, would not simply pop up again. The very existence of our universe means that something can arise from nothing.
Ack, I'm thinking again! Stop that brain! Happy pony time! No thinkey!
Good reading, but there were a few places that prove you could use an editor.
Replace a normally with wouldn't.
I recommend didn't start.
That's all I can remember, now get to work on the next chapter.
1641105 Thanks. I do actually have an editor, but he/she is currently busy. I decided to push this one out early because I felt bad about leaving you guys hanging so long, but the rest of the errors should be corrected soon.
1641126 Good to know, and thank you!
“Be my guest. Between that thing and Aura, I’ve probably learned more in the past two days than I did in most of school school.” and "Things that hat want to kill all of us." were the only mistakes I saw. Keep up the great work!
1641596 Augh. The things I miss without an editor... Thanks.
(Where are you, Skipper? I need you!)
So, I was considering doing a reflection-type blogpost about why the events in this chapter happened the way they did, and my personal thoughts on each party member's developing character, but the question is, would you guys read it? My last few posts have gotten literally zero attention (although admittedly, they weren't too interesting), so I'm just trying to gauge interest here.
1641802 Hmm, I dunno. I'm really enjoying watching their emerging characterization, and I'm not sure I want to have that experience influenced by outside forces. It's in the same vein as avoiding spoilers.
I really like the world you're building up here. The forest was especially interesting. It reminded me a lot of the forest from Princess Mononoke, and I found myself wishing you had gone into more depth about it just so I could get more of it. And the Stalkers are just plain cool. I would attempt to draw some fanart of that scene where they're fighting the group, but I can't draw worth a damn.
I get the feeling there may be a tabletop RPG world you may be making on the side of this, I don't suppose you have character sheets or anything like that?
Don't take this as a request, last thing we need is for the author to get distracted with sheets instead of writing the story. I want to see more.
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Ha, funny you should mention that actually. I don't tabletop game much myself, but I actually do have a Google Doc that has sheets for pretty much every semi-original character I've ever written, attributes, alignments, and all. They're not very serious, but I've just found them a good method to organize the essence of each character in an easily referable way.
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I suppose that's fair. And don't worry, I'm planning on expanding on the Wildwood a bit in Chapter Seven. That's all I'll say for now.
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I do the same actually, I also reference any overarching tropes my characters fill. TVTropes is such a good resource if you're willing to loose the time you'll waste clicking every link. Its always good to know where you're going and how characters react otherwise the strangest things happen...