• Published 2nd Oct 2012
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Laughing Stock is a Cheater - Rabuiods

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“Twilight! I can explain!”

Laughing Stock chased his infuriated wife through the front door of the home they shared. With tears in her eyes, she turned to her husband, who was the reason behind her frustrations.

“Explain?! You think I need you to explain?! I have eyes Laughing Stock, there is no reason to explain…I know what I saw…”

“But honey, it wasn’t what it looked like!”

“Do you honestly believe I'm that stupid?”

Twilight looked away from her very special somepony. She had never been betrayed like this, she didn’t know what to do.

“Please Laughing Stock, tell me why you did it...”

“You really want to know?”

The jilted mare nodded.

“I did what did because I'm WEAK! You have no idea how hard I’ve tried to stay faithful, but it’s impossible! Have you even seen this place? It’s FULL of them!”The comedian reminded his wife it was her fault he strayed from the path.

“How do you figure that? I wasn’t the one cheating!”

“You cut me off!” Laughing Stock smashed his hoof on the kitchen table, hanging his head in disgust. “Damn it Twilight, stallions have NEEDS! We have primal urges and when our primary source for those urges has been disrupted, we are forced to look elsewhere.”

“My brother was right about you! He warned me that you would do this to me eventually!”

Laughing Stock chuckled.

“I’m not surprised…he does it too.”

Twilight jaw dropped.

“How dare you! HOW DARE YOU SLANDER MY BROTHER! He would never cheat!“

“You think your brother is so perfect. Such an angel…well newsflash, sweetheart! Where do you think I got the idea?”

“You mean…”

Laughing Stock nodded, which made the unicorn slump down onto the couch. Her world was falling apart around her.

“So where do we go from here, Laughing Stock? What do we do now?”

“I vote we go back to normal. Go back to the way things were before they got out of hoof.”

Sitting up, Twilight glared at her husband.

“So you expect me to forget this whole thing ever happened, just like that?” She rolled her eyes, falling back onto a pillow. “I…I don’t think I can. You hurt me too much.”

“Come on, nopony else knows! It's a secret between you, me and Pinkie."

“Don’t even get me started on her! That…that…homewrecker!”

The angry mare threw a pillow across the room as she rolled off the couch. In her rage, she toppled over a cart with books waiting to be stacked on their shelves. Laughing Stock cautiously walked over to his very special somepony.

“Now Twilight, it’s not her fault. I…I asked her to do it.”

“She should have known better! She knew what we were doing, but she went behind my back anyway.” Twilight pushed her husband away, walking toward the bay window, she thought about what her evening would be like if the tragic events from earlier didn’t happen.

“She's my best friend…did you honestly think I would never find out?”

“Yes…I thought if Pinkie and I were careful, we could get away with it. I was doing something bad, but it felt so good...then the thrill of the chase was gone.”

He grabbed his wife’s shoulders, gently spinning her around.

“Before to long, the guilt started to set in. The more I saw Pinkie, the guiltier I began to feel.” Laughing Stock placed his hoof under his wife’s chin, carefully tilting her head back so he could gaze into her teary eyes. “Whenever I was with her Twilight, I wanted to be with you.”

“I…I don’t know if I can trust you anymore. How do I know you aren’t just telling me what I want to hear? How do I know you just aren’t going to cheat again?”

The stallion dropped to the floor, holding Twilight’s hooves in his.

“Twilight, I swear on Celestia’s name I will never cheat again! I realize know…I truly understand what it means be with you. If I have to sacrifice certain things, then so be it.”

“Oh Laughing Stock!”

Both ponies began to cry as they embraced each other.

“You were right! This whole situation was my fault! I never should have put you in a situation like that, I am the one who should be sorry.”

“No Twiley, I cheated because I was weak. You did what you did because your love for me is so strong. If only I had realized that sooner, this sticky situation could have been avoided.”

“Well, I suppose we are both at fault.” Twilight broke the hug and wandered to the middle of the living room. “I don’t know what to do now…how will we ever show our faces in town?”

Laughing Stock crept up behind his mare, easily sliding his forehooves around her.

“I don’t care what they think, and to be honest, I never have. I will walk to the center of town, I will shout from the roof tops, I AM A CHEATER! I’m sure they will understand. I guarantee you, many of them cheat as well. I mean, look at Mrs. Cake! I bet she cheats all the time!”

“Well, I suppose you’re right…maybe it’s best to bring this situation out into the world, instead of hiding it.”

“Look Twiley…I may not be proud of what I did…but I am willing to admit I screwed up. There comes a time in every stallion’s life, when he must look himself in a mirror and admit he made a mistake.”

He turned to his bride. Wiping the tears from her face, he asked if there was anyway she could forgive him.

“Yes, Laughing Stock. For better or for worse, remember? Many wives wouldn’t trust their husbands after this, but I have a feeling you are going to fly straight from now on, especially since I’m going to be watching you like a hawk.”

“If that’s what it takes, then so be it. Thank you honey…thank you.”

The married couple silently sat on the couch, still trying to wrap their heads around what just happened. Finally, Laughing Stock broke the ice.

“You know, I must admit…you have made this situation a bigger deal than it really is.”

“You cheated Laughing Stock, it is a big deal!”

The comedian rolled his eyes.

“It’s not like I slept with another mare, Twilight…I just cheated on my diet. Everypony does it.

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Comments ( 45 )

Best story EVER

1368178
Eh...don't patronize me. :rainbowlaugh:

I was all like ah :pinkiesmile: AH :pinkiehappy: AH! :pinkiecrazy: oh AHA :rainbowlaugh:

ohh god yes. this was good.

oh. IDEEEEEA! maybe you can do a sequel series where Twilight get's pregnant and Laughing Stock is FREAKING OUT.

1375487
Perhaps...perhaps...:raritywink:

One hour challenge. No way this will be good. But because I'm bored and the title interested me I shall look anyway.
Shallow world development.
Little description and detail.
Evidence of circlejerk.
Twilight out of character.
The punchline...
OOOOOHHHHHH I see. That makes sense then.
Congratulations on your redemption :yay: But next time, cut back on dialogue and use more description. This was good but it would have been even better if I had developed an actual emotional connection to the story and then got hit with the punch line. Which is very possible in an hour and less than two thousand words if you know what you're doing. Good luck.

So THAT'S what he was cheating on, Laughing Stock is probably right Shining Armor and Mrs. Cake probably cheat on their diets too. :rainbowlaugh:

So THAT'S what he was cheating on, Laughing Stock is probably right Shining Armor and Mrs. Cake probably cheat on their diets too. :rainbowlaugh:

1375633
Thanks for the advice!:pinkiesmile:

Honestly, this was really intended for the people who have read my other Laughing Stock related stories, but you have a good point.:twilightsmile:

I think the best part of the story is the 1111 words.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png

Reading synopsis: Chess
Pinkie mentioned: Diet

Conclusion: Diet

Really, this story would have actually been good about a year ago, but at this point these kinds of one-shots are predictable to the point of banality. It would have actually been more surprising if you had played it straight.

1375717
Now it's circlejerk. I had a feeling Laughing Stock was an original character that you had worked with before.
You can get away with circlejerk if you remember that your story is going to end up on the latest story feed on the homepage. Keeping that in mind, always introduce the audience to an original character as if it's everyone's first time seeing them. Make sure they're always established. That way when it appears on the latest story feed, new readers like myself won't be confused or pushed away.
An example of this would be Journey of Graves. I don't know if you're familiar with this series. If not, I highly recommend it. But I actually came in at the (current) end of it. Though it's a fan fiction series with an original character and multiple stories, the author always reintroduces Graves at the beginning of every story. So I was still able to treat it as a stand-alone piece and enjoy it on my first read. Then I was encouraged to go back and read it from the beginning. Just like that, that author (GentlemanJ, if I remember correctly) has a new reader.
You could do the same thing to a lot of people if you handle your original characters and continuities properly. Now go forth and engage your readers old and new alike, my apprentice.
:moustache:

1376523
Alright, I will do that from now on, thanks again for the help.:twilightsmile:

Mwahahahahahaa. Glorious. Loved it! Have my upthumb and fave, Author! C:<

oh the trolling.......oh the trolling:trollestia:

The fake out, a classic standup routine. This seemingly simple gag is actually one of the more difficult laughs to achieve, as two comics must work together with presise timing and believable acting to pull it off. It has been used by entertainers for centuries and has been overdone in fanfiction.

The point is, you tried way too hard and gave it away from the start. However, lenience is given as you had only an hour to write. Also, having a non-OC primary would have helped immensely.

1379049
Thanks for the advice!:twilightsmile:

But clearly this isn't my thing, so I'm just going to go back to long stories.:rainbowlaugh:

well... this happened:twilightsmile:

DAT ENDINGGG! I was laughing so much, great fic!

I'm not going to read this yet; I feel obligated to read the others first.
But, tell me, by 'Days of Our Lives', do you mean the Friends show that Joey stars on, or is there something else I don't know about?

1397084
Yeah, just inspired by your generic soap opera.:pinkiesmile:

This was hilarious! :pinkiehappy:

Silver out!

heh, you actually got me. I was thinking he cheated in some sort of game, like Hide-and-Go-Seek, or go fish like when he was in the cabin playing with Cadance and Luna.

Great job, love your series with Laughing Stock, and (hopefully) we can have a sequel with him married. XD

1401136
I'm secretly working on one...don't tell anyone.:raritywink:

Oh no, what have I done!:pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:

1401232 Don't worry, Your secret is safe with me. Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye. :twilightsmile:

And you don't break a Pinkie Promise, because it is the quickest way to lose a freind...
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LOL, I was expecting that ending I really was, but it was still funny.

Oh man, you got me good man!

1375487 I second this idea.:pinkiehappy:

1610379
NO! It will NEVER HAPPEN!:pinkiecrazy:

I've already written the first chapter...

1610518 Wait I'm not 100% sure what you're saying.:rainbowhuh:

1610718
:rainbowlaugh: I've started on the sequel to Her Big Brother, His Big Problem (this will be the third story in the series). It will be called First Comes Love, Then Comes Marriage...

I'm assuming you can figure out what happens in the upcoming story just by the title.:raritywink:

In case you aren't familiar with the rhyme, Twilight gets knocked up.:twilightsheepish:

1610809 Okay I will now wait for that story.:twilightsmile:

Ahhh, classic. Brava good author, brava!

Saw the ending coming about halfway through. Still funny.:pinkiehappy:

MAN!!!! Don't scare me like that!!!! :pinkiegasp:

In all honesty though, that ending was perfect!! :raritywink:

Me until the last line :raritycry: :pinkiegasp:

last line: :rainbowlaugh:
10/10 :moustache:

Wait a minute, cheated on his diet? He ate a fucking cupcake? :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

Are you fucking kidding me??!! This whole time I thought he cheated on Twilight with Pinkie, then it turns out all he did was eat some fucking sweets??!! What the hell??!!:facehoof:

Favorite line ever,
"Look at Mrs. Cake! I'll bet she cheats all the time!"

:rainbowlaugh:

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