• Published 2nd Oct 2012
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Not Exactly a Shining Moment - Darkentrophy



Being a big brother is a challenge. Being a "little" brother is embarrassing.

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Big Brother, Little Problem

“Sorry, Twilee, but only big ponies get the top bunk.”

“But I am a big pony, Shiny!”

Shining Armor patted his sister on the head as if he was petting a particularly attention-deprived dog. “Listen, sis, even if you were, I’d still be the bigger one, so I get it.” He began to climb the steps up to the bed, only to feel a lead weight affix itself to his tail. “Twilight…”

“Sath ihth!” Twilight Sparkle mumbled through the hair.

Rolling his eyes, Shining said, “Okay, you win. Twilight, you’re a big pony.”

“Yay!” she exclaimed, only to fall down to the floor with a plop and the telltale crinkle of her diaper.

Grinning good-naturedly, Shining added, “A big pony that still wets the bed.” He climbed up onto his bed. “Goodnight, Twilee. Don’t let the bed parasprites bite.” With a brief flare of horn, he covered the firefly lamp hanging from a hook in the roof with a cloth and prepared himself for a good night’s sleep.

Unless, of course, his sister kept making bubbling noises. “Twilight, it’s time to go to sleep. Could you please stop that?” The cover came off of the lamp to reveal a distraught Twilight, her lip quavering and nose running.

Wahhhhhhhh!” she wailed with the kind of wineglass-shattering pitch that most opera singers could only dream of.

Panicking, Shining Armor stumbled down the steps. “He-hey, Twilee, don’t be like that, I was only joking!”

WAHHHHHHHHHHH!

Before Shining could calm the filly, the door slammed open and their mom galloped into the room. “What’s wrong Twilight, are you okay?” she called out, although her words were largely swallowed by the din. She looked at Shining. “What’s wrong, did she hurt herself?”

He retreated, his mouth moving, but no words came out.

Twilight answered for him. “Sh-Sh-Shining wouldn’t let me have the top bunk and said I wasn’t a big pony and then he said I was but then he said I was a big pony that wet the bed!”

His mother's expression hardened. “Is this true, Shining?”

Unable to meet his mother’s stern gaze, he replied, “Yes…”

“And what do you have to say for yourself, young stallion?”

“But I was just fooling around! I didn’t mean to make her cry!” he protested.

She shook her head. “You know how sensitive Twilight is about her little accidents, or do I have to remind you about the time you teased her about wearing a diaper last month?”

He stared at the ground, his face hot. “No. I remember.”

“Good.” By now, Twilight had stopped crying, and was instead only sniffling into her mother’s mane. “Now, if I remember correctly, you had problems with accidents until you were about her age, too.”

“Mom…” he whispered, his blush doubling in intensity.

Twilight sent him a sideways glance. “He did?”

“Yes, your big brother also had some problems during the night, and I think he needs to be reminded about just how embarrassing it can be.”

Shining hissed, “What.

“What?” Twilight asked, cocking her head.

His mother turned to leave. “Stay right there, Shining Armor.” He shrunk back, ears flattening against his head; Shining knew that when his mom used his full name, he was in deep trouble. Diamond Dog-mine deep.

She returned a few minutes later, horn glowing as it levitated a basket. “Lay down on your back, Shining Armor,” she said sternly.

The colt obliged, knowing that events were well and truly out of his own hooves now. He felt his rear being lifted by a levitation spell, then brought back down. He couldn’t help but notice how much softer and puffy the floor suddenly seemed. A few seconds of light rustling followed and Shining felt something wrap about his waist and up between his legs before being pulled snug.

“You may get up now, Shining Armor.” He followed the order; the words might have been a privilege, but the tone told him otherwise.

Twilight giggled.

Shining felt his heart drop into the deepest pit of his stomach, a sad plunk marking its swan dive into the stomach juices. A light-pink diaper, like Twilight’s, was snugly hugging his bottom and, if the color by itself wasn’t bad enough, it also had a yellow flower print on the outside.

“You will wear a diaper for the next week whenever you go to sleep, Shining Armor,” his mother explained before smirking and adding, “Whether you use it is entirely up to you.” She turned to Twilight. “Seeing as how Shining is no longer a ‘big’ pony, I think you can have the top bunk.”

The filly jumped in circles around her mom. “Yes yes yes yes!”

“But first you have to put on your pajamas.”

Twilight moaned. “Aww, but they’re itchy.”

“I know you don’t like them, dear, but if you don’t then you’ll get cold again, and what happens when you get cold?”

“I have an accident…”

Her mom nodded. “Yes, and you want to be a big pony. So, leg up.” Twilight did so, and in a few moments she was wearing a purple sleeper.

Her work done, their mother left the room, leaving Twilight to enjoy the victory and Shining to mull over how he was going last the next week.

Twilight snickered. “Bed time, little pony, don’t let the pawaspites bite!” Her rear swaying back and forth, she tried to clamber up the steps to the top bunk, only to fall onto her rump. Looking sheepish, she said, “Umm, big bwo, could you help me up?”

Shining half-smiled, his sister’s clumsy attempt at scaling Mount Bunk helping to take the edge off the night’s developments. “Sure, why not?” He knelt down. “Hop on, Twilee.” She latched her hooves around his neck, then the two ascended to the top bed. Twilight slid off and wrapped herself in the blankets. His job as big brother complete, Shining was about to climb back down when felt Twilight poke him. “What is it, Twilee?”

She tapped her hooves. “Well, uhh, I was thinking maybe you could, umm, sleep up here with me?” She blushed. “It’s a little scawy in the dark sometimes…” she said before puffing out her chest and adding, “But only just a little!”

Shining nuzzled her. “What kind of big brother would I be if I didn’t protect my sister from the big, bad monsters that hide in the dark?”

“Umm, a bad one, Shiny?”

He laughed. “It wasn’t the kind of question that’s supposed to be answered, but don’t you worry about that.” He laid down beside her. “Is it okay if I cover the lamp now?”

“Yep.”

The light went out and he closed his eyes, only to be stopped from sleeping again by a small hoof prodding him. “Yes, Twily?”

“Umm, you aren’t mad at me, are you, Shiny?”

“…No, I’m not, Twily. It was my fault. I shouldn’t have made fun of you.”

He felt a Twilight give him a dainty kiss in the snout. “Thanks, Shiny. I love you.”

He smiled and pulled her closer. “I love you too, but do you think we could go to sleep now?”

“Hehe, yes.”

A little later he could feel his sister’s breath on his chest, the steady rhythm that told him she was fast asleep. Scratching his covered bottom, he thought, Well, could be worse.

Comments ( 87 )

I smiled. It's a silly little story of cute things and not much else. Raw brain candy but decently written. Here's a like.

-Chessie

I love this story. It's short, sweet, and innocent. huzzah!

EDIT: Actually, I think this may be a new top favourite story of mine.

Dude, I was reading this in school, and I nearly got caught. Laughed too hard.

I love these little heart-warming one-shots, they make me smile :ajsmug:.
I'm so used to things like this being creepy and thrown out of proportion, but you've managed to make something innocent, so I'm going to watch you and see if you make any more of this stuff.

It made me smile so I guess you've earned yourself a like.

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I am planning a sequel to this, but I feel it prudent to inform you that most other work I'll be uploading is fetishy-stuff. I do try to make sure my work always has that "Daa'w" angle, though. Also, chances are there'll be two versions--full-flavour and less-squick--so that I don't unduly alienate my watchers (such as yourself). All of the stories will have a suitable disclaimer, just in case.

Regardless, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for the compliment and I hope to meet your expectation with any new work I post :twilightsmile:

Lesson learned, never tease your little sister about wetting the bed! :rainbowlaugh:

1374033
Indeed. Normally, I like to inject some more intelligent concepts into a story but this was just a quick hack-job for teh cutez. I'm glad you liked it anyways ^_^.

1374040
Why, thank you! That's high honours, although I do think there are many stories more worthy of being your favourite than this simple little short. Judging by your "Huzzah" I take it you're a fan of Luna? You should keep you eyes peeled for when I post my Royal Sisters-centric story, The Night is Young, wherein Celestia decides it's time for her "little" sister Luna to take an enforced vacation...

1374110
Blast! I shall have to redouble my efforts to have you caught reading about technicolour ponies whilst in a public area.

1374478
Your avatar and name made me smile, but I can't "Like" that, so here's a moustache for you instead. :moustache:

1374546
Especially when she grows up to be the greatest unicorn magician since Starswirl the Bearded.

1374587 Maybe so, but your story is so cute, and a perfect example of a Slice-of-Life story. I cannot think of a better example from my own experience as a reader.

As for the huzzah... I may be a fan of Luna, but I've been using 'huzzah' since I was young. Just a personal writing quip. It basically means "congrats, the moment is glorious!" Nonetheless, I will still read it since the premise is good. As a matter of fact... +watch.

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I can only hope to match my own work from here-on out, in that case.

Mucho gracias!

1374587 I don't care about reading ponies in public, it's just that I'm supposed to be paying attention in school.:pinkiehappy:

Well, could be worse

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NO. STUPID STUPID STUPID. D: SHINING YOU -KNOW BETTER-. You NEVER say that. You're invoking Murphy's law, man! NOT COOL! NOT COOL!! :rainbowderp:

1374940
It's going to get worse :trollestia:

I'm not sure if they have "Murphy's Law" there. What's a suitable pony-pun for "Murphy"?

1374964
Discord's Law would fit the bill better, methinks.

1374984 Works for me. Discord's law it is. :P

Poor shining. :ajsleepy:

I feel like fanfics about Shining and Twi are necessary for bronies, considering there isn't much cannon of their relationship, and practically none about their childhood.

1375204
I think he'll survive, unless death by embarrassment is a thing in Equestria. Trust me, though; things are only going to get worse (and a little better, but mostly worse) for our favourite bug-lover.

Yeah, the show kinda dropped the ball on that count. "O, FYI, Twilight has a bestest bro. KTHXBAI."

Adorable and funny. Good job. :twilightsmile:

You know you're fucked when the mother comes in with a diaper

1374940
Na he didn't kick in Murphy.
Murphy would only go into effect if he said "it could not be worse". The Not is kinda important. :pinkiehappy:

Still ... Shining took things pretty gracefully. When his mom left he had to know that she was going after a diaper. He did not complain. He did not whine. He let her put the diaper on him and took his butt chewing like a man. Good for you Shining. :heart:

1376012
Thank you!
Remember to watch me if you want to see the sequel first!

1376596
Better than Fluttershy with a chainsaw, if you ask me.

1376979
Murphy's Law cares not for such trivial matters like "wording"!

Truly, he is a colt stallion amongst stallions.

Best slice of life? Best slice of life... maybe. I don't read enough of these Kind of stories to know, but it's among the best SoL of what I've read!

1378917
Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Remember to watch me to see when I post the sequel!

1378956
A sequel? Happy days! Or nights, as it may be, given the time...

Not bad. Not anything stellar, but not bad.

D'AAAAAAAAAAWWWW! :rainbowkiss:

This is random and nonsensical. I approve of it.

1381172
Like your comment. Not dumb, but not particularly insightful either.
But hey, I'll take what I can get. I wasn't exactly aiming for "greatness" with this, just a fun little chunk'o'story.

1381533
RAWWWWWW!

1382233
How so, if I might ask?

It's a heart warmer, thanks for referring me :rainbowkiss:

1426224
You're welcome ^_^
Don't forget to watch me to see when I upload the sequel!

I think I giggled for about five minutes straight when Shining Armour was diapered like that. Damn, that's cruel and unusual punishment for you...

Still, the story was very enjoyable despite it's short length. Liked, faved, followed and all that good stuff. I don't know why I didn't read it when it was added to the group, but I'm glad that I did.

Also, I didn't realize that you were thebackup (different name I guess).

1449679
>I think I giggled for about five minutes straight when Shining Armour was diapered like that.
I try.

Mucho gracias.

Yes. Don't go advertising the fact, though. It's not a big deal, but I still prefer to keep them separate.

1450912 Right, I'll keep that in mind. Still, welcome to FIMFiction.:twilightsmile:

1450924
Thanks. Hopefully I'll finish up the next chapters sooner than later.

1524335
Thanks!
Don't forget to favorite it to know when I upload the second chapter and to watch me so that you can see any new stories I post!

Dear Princess Celestia
Tonight i learned never to make fun of other ponies
Signed Shining Armor

1578086
Dear Shining Armor:
Serves you right.
Signed: Princess Celestia

Nice...short but cute

Draken, I read this on furaffinity. This, is really funny. Where is chapter 2? :pinkiehappy:

1616796
Somehow, I missed your comment. Thanks for the compliment!

1761436
It's here:

Cute vignette. Short, but that's not really a problem - I'm not entirely sure how it could be expanded, so I'm curious what your plans are for a subsequent chapter.

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My current sequel idea is one with Cadance coming over to foalsit Twilight. Twilight decides they should play house, and Shining gets to be the baby, much to his dismay. The promise of a kiss from Cadance when they're done makes him more receptive to the idea, though.

This is just too funny... Can't wait for chapter 2!!!

3020984
Heh, pester me to write more if you really want it :P

3021048
Haha, Maybe so... But, I'm just the reader. Do whatever the hoof you want!

3021068
>Do whatever the hoof you want!

nice simple quick story, well finished and doesnt leave you hanging.

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