Prince Blueblood. What`s his day is made from?
Snarking and sniping, mostly. With a bit of longing thrown in for good measure
What happens when he gets an opportunity to act out on his longing?.
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Cytotoxin
I`m Russian, I`m female, I`m blunter then a bag of hammers and I write pony staff occassionally. That`s about it.
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A different take on Blueblood. I like it.
Your structure is odd, but it is entertaining to read.
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Not so different. I`ve tried my best to hammer down the point that he is genuinely crass, cynical and bitter towards most everypony. The only difference is that this attitude is less due to self-importance and more due to blatant sociopathy.
I wonder how many people wonder if they ever thought that Prince Blueblood was stuck in a job without almost zero chance of promotion (as the only way he'll actually be a ruler is if the two immortal powerful alicorns up and die), and how that would make an ambitious, if not very smart pony feel - trapped.
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No, in this story, Blueblood has genuine respect for Celestia - it`s the only reason why he even bothers with palace. He`s there to keep at least a part of workload off Celestia. That does not preclude him from having a genuine loathing for most of Canterlot "elite".
Also, let`s not forget that prince is not necessarily a "heir to throne" kind of job. If he were explicitly named crownprince, that would have some grounds, but simply prince? In a lot of countries, prince was not just for sons of kings, but also for dukes who could claim the throne if the ruling dynasty failed to produce heir apparent.
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Never said he disrespected Celestia, just that he craves the freedom outside the castle.
As for the prince situation, considering the fact that the defacto leaders are two immortal alicorns, I don't think there's much a difference if he was crown prince or not. I guess it depends on how ambitious he'd be portrayed.
Still, like I said, watching this.
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The difference is that being called a crownprince with full understanding that he is likely to die a crownprince as well would be an elaborate act of mockery.
Now, being prince? It`s just a title. It does not presume Blueblood is just a figurehead - in fact, in my story he is most decisively not, and de-facto, he is the one ruling Equestria. Celestia would call the shots if something grand went on, like war or end of the world as they know it or whatever, but the rest of time? Blueblood is the pony to go to. In this interpretation, prince is not interpreted as the heir of king, but as princips, as in, "the first". Which, among the mortal ponies, he ostensibly is - the only ones who outrank him are physical deities.
P.S. Disowned usually means rejected from family. Given he`s presented as Celestia`s nephew, the first thing that comes to mind is that Blueblood wants to be rid of Celestia.
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I can see some difference between our Bluebloods. I'm not gonna shamelessly plug mine, but now I can understand him more. I guess the difference is the universe settings.
Now I am really really really looking forward to the update. 
Any reasonable guess when? lol.
I guess it comes down to interpretation and why the reason one wants to be disowned. But just to clarify, I don't think our Bluebloods hate Celestia. God knows I've read a few of those stories. . . kinda made Prince Blueblood a jerk in the worst possible ways (betrayal and etc).
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Please do. Free exchange of ideas is what moves humanity forward, after all. If there`s anything I find distasteful it`s people who want to hoard the ideas. So yeah, feel free to pluck anything that seems interesting. Just don`t forget to mention where you got it from, if you`re lifting a straight carbon copy.
As for update... Uh, there`s a good reason why I marked this story as complete, y`know. If I`ll get a hit of inspiration to continue, I`ll amend that, but for now, I don`t know where to go with this.
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...It`s all your fault, you know.
Now I have a grand plot on my mind... Bah. Oh well, have a second chapter.
Nice story you have here, a different take on Blueblood surely. I'm most interested on what you'll do on the story.
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*bows*
I fully accept the responsibility of taking this story out from complete, and I shall gracefully accept the 'punishment' of enjoyably reading the second chapter.
Alright, let's see:
"Prince let out a soft sigh."
Unless his name is actually Prince, you're missing the determiner. Is it?
"pondering the merits of declaring it`s sentience"
Its.
"icebox then bother with decontamination of this one"
The decontamination, or decontaminating.
"letting fillies crash into the icebox he just dumped out"
The fillies.
"Yellow filly came to the rescue"
I take it he dubbed her that? If so, that's fine.
"'Why so I feel so nervous?'"
Do, I think.
"Dragon`s face went through"
The dragon?
"prince still felt his breath seizing"
If it's his name, you should capitalise it. If not, it's 'the prince'.
"wants me because I`m prince."
A prince... Though because "I'm prince" has a ring to it! At least if he were the only pony with a title like that. I think Shining Armor became one after marrying Cadence...
Perhaps you should think about using ' instead of `, just because people are used to seeing the former!
Also, after pointing to all that, I kind of feel like a jerk. Ugh. Anyway, I wonder how BB is going to explain things to Twilight once Rarity tells her it was Blueblood who ultimately approached her, not the other way round! After all, as much as I like the character, he was the one who initiated contact!^^
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I`m well aware of missing articles... The problem is that I lack the comprehension of them. Russian has nothing like articles, and... Suffice to say, correcting the current mistakes will do nothing to prevent future ones.
As for Blueblood initiating contact - he has simple explanation of it. Misunderstanding. He was there on entirely unrelated reason and what he was doing had nothing to do with Rarity at all - she merely elected to view it as attempt at approach.
(Thanks for two mechanical mistakes, by the way. Those, I edited already.)
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I also noticed that you don't separate dialogues into paragraphs. As of now, I can still follow, but there'll be a time when people would get confused, wondering who was talking.
Ah, the gala. With that just one episode, a few choice fanfic writers began to theorize the personality of Prince Blueblood. Most made him into utter bastard of the worse type.
We are just making him into a uncouth stallion with a heart.
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That much is debatable. I`m not sure who`s he`s going to be yet. Maybe what you just said. Or maybe he`s utter monster with blue and orange morality who clings to this silly bit of affection just to maintain some modicum of social disguise.
I`m just... not sure.
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If you are going for the latter, make it a bit different from the others.
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Oh, I can`t help but be different by now, seeing as I`ve dared to make Blueblood competent.
Okay, my interest is piqued. I will be following this. I wonder how Twilight and her friends (especially Rarity) will react to him in Ponyville?
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Well, Twilight`s reaction is already described in chapter three. As for Rarity... wait and see, as trite as it sounds. ^_^
I would have been surprised if Twilight did not know he was wearing an illusion. I am interested to see how Blueblood interacts with her friends, as well as the rest of Ponyville, and who will know his real identity. I am also interested to see what the CMC is going to do with an icebox (I just hope none of them get locked inside it.)
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Blueblood wants to maintain his incognito, so you can count on him revealing himself as Blueblood only when it`s convenient for him.
As for CMCs, I can answer that right now. They just want an icebox for their clubhouse.
I really like your take on Blueblood. It seems a fad recently to have Blueblood have an infatuation with Twilight. Some have different reasons, some more leecherous than others, but it's popped up many times.
That said, I still like this fic. The formatting needs a bit of work, it can be slightly difficult to read, but the plot is good.
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It makes sense that Blueblood would harbor some kind of feeling for Twilight. During her time in Canterlot, they HAD to come in contact often enough - that much is practically mandated by the fact both of them are close to Celestia.
In this particular case, it makes sense that Blueblood would find Twilight adorable. Though, the exact nature of attraction is up for grabs - it`s entirely possible for competent Blueblood to develop a begrudging respect for Twilight`s knowledge/prowess in the arcane arts or even a feeling akin to that of an elder brother. (In fact, I`ve been toying with this idea - concept of which being that Blueblood essentially replaces Shining Armor in the role of big brother once Shining joins the guard and Twilight moves to castle. That precipitates the events of Canterlot Wedding later, with Blueblood playing a big role in the offense against changelings.)
On the flip side, if we are to assume Blueblood to be a vain and self-centered jerk, as he is presented during Gala, he may be lusting after Twilight (Being the only mortal mare in the castle he didn`t sleep with.), may be resentful towards Twilight for real or perceived crime of monopolizing Celestia`s favor or even be openly hostile to Twilight for daring to assume the role of Celestia`s protege (Which should obviously be reserved only for highest nobility, i.e. himself.).
And then the three of them got drunk and had a three-way.
Just kidding. That's a different fanfic.
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I wouldn`t put it past Blueblood. Rarity might be a viable participant as well - after all, if it`s an exotic booze, it`s fashionable thing to do. Twilight? Well, she`d probably have an aneurism, if anything like that had happened. (Or, alternatively, proved to be so kinky as to make both Blueblood and Rarity vaguely uncomfortable.)
Seriously enough, no. While after the conversation, Rarity does realize that her misadventure with Blueblood was reasonably innocent and probably saved her from much worse alternatives, he`s by no means out of "hot water" with her, as it were.
Blueblood, on his part, is not entirely persuaded about Rarity`s innocent motives - a part of him still considers Rarity as nothing but goddigging vapid socialite, and that does color his attitude towards her.
Finally, Twilight is fully cognizant of the fact that neither Rarity nor Blueblood have any intention to be anything more then tolerant towards each other. And she`s not so fine with the idea as she appears to be.
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Would make sense for Blueblood to have romantic feelings for Twilight Sparkle since they have have meet up alot of times during her time as Celestia personal protege at her castle. Let look at one example, how else would Cadence and Twilight Sparkle friendship would have bloomed as Cadence can be the "royal" foal sitter as she watch Twilight Sparkle during her stay at the castle. Seems logical for that kind scenario to be applied between Bluebood/TwilightSparkle as good friends, if not have romantic interest. Anyhow reading the last two chapter, I was confused with the Civil Act until i realized it was Bluebood alter-ego (lawl to me indeed /derp)
nice chapters man, I shall be looking forward to more work. Best regards
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I thought I explained about Civil Act in chapter three, when Blueblood`s disguise was explained.... Huh.
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Oh I did, just got me confused for a second. Had me thought of it as a law, but then i realized it was an actual name for a alter-ego. Anyhow, nice name anyways
Umm, I'm not sure whether the last two sentences at the end of chapter two are copy-paste errors or intentional. Otherwise, good work, I'm enjoying this fic very much.
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Yes. Fixeded. Strange nopony noticed it until now.
I love where this story could go. Anywhere.
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It might.
Beautiful chapter. I like these Blueblood and Twilight characters. They seem so haunting real.
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Heh. Flatterer.
I like how this series is going. I really liked Twilight and Blueblood's conversation. I just have to wonder,
Did he just jinx himself?
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In a way? Yes.
1582976 Aww, don't tell me something bad is going to happen later.
I hate it when that kind of stuff happens.
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Alright. I`m not telling you. You`ll just have to read about it yourself.
Format needs work. New paragraphs every time someone else speaks. I think there should be some break lines as well. Nice to see you updated.
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Not gonna happen. I already explained new paragraph for every spoken line is an eyesore for me.
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Oh well, I'll adjust.
You could really benefit from a pre-reader. Other then that, good story do far.
1586610 finally! I'm not the only one who hates it! It's just an excuse to put extra filler in between conversations, so far as I can tell. That or lots of floating dialogue, or lots of "he said, she saids". I've always hated it in any form.
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Russian notation. We might segregate pure dialog sequence into a separate structure, but other then that, spoken lines do not get the separate line treatment.
1652424 Celestia bless Mother Russia. No wonder they made all the best literature in the 19th century.
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Oh, don`t lay it on so thick. English-speaking writers picked up the slack in twelfth century quite fine. Though, amusingly enough, in my copy of Alice In Wonderland, the same notation as I use is in effect.
Makes me wonder if carriage return for each spoken line is not a recent internet fad. Would make sense, I suppose - language on the net tends to veer towards simplification... In times, overbearingly so. Nothing wrong with sesquipedalian loquaciousness every now and then, ne?
1652504 Ye. A qualified verbosity does well by any writer, methinks. But tis' a bit much for a My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic reimagining, is it not? Did you mean twentieth century as opposed to twelfth? As yes, there are many fine writers in the English language at that stage. In the 19th, however, we had to make do with Dickens, notable for never creating any characters truly beyond two dimensions, and Conrad, who was...erratic.
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And here`s the proof in pudding.
Yes, Twentieth, not twelfth.
Are you going to add another chapter anytime soon?