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This was a lot of fun to write. It may not be my best work, but usually stories take me a long time to finish so it was nice to see I could finish a whole story and write so many words in an hour!
Edit: Thanks for all the faves comments and likes! You people rock!
I lost...
This is gonna be weird.
I was very correct. But it was well written.
how dare you make Rarity the one where she's going for and not Rainbow Dash
nice idea though
I would absolutely not let someone magic away my senses, no matter how temporary.
I won
Great story. That's exactly the kind of game Rarity would suggest
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God damn it.
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¯\_(ツ)_/¯
As fun as this little story was, it felt far too easy for AJ, especially after "She figured it would be easy, after all her friends were so quirky and distinguishable there was no way she could be wrong." You might consider adding a character or two, such as Cheerilee. Add an element of tension.
No wonder Rarity would choose AJ to be the kisspony
FUCKING PRONOUNS, HOW DO THEY WORK?
This was fun. Tender and Innocent with a dash of humor and zest. Though I was expecting a twist from the description... perhaps that was the twist, hehe.
Spectre- TWE's Marksman of Metaphors
Dammit, I was getting my AppleDash hopes on when RD came along.
Oh well. It still was a good story, nice to read.
Good-natured fun, couldn't have been better!
Awsome, this was hella fun!
Your Reward!
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Now replace the chicken with this story. I somehow knew It would be Rarity.
Wow, very nice. I really was expecting a twist ending, but it seems we got an untwist instead, which was enough of a surprise on its own. Very well-written; the descriptions were amazingly vivid.
I spotted just one stray apostrophe: "The next set of lips to come against her's"
What!
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Holy jebeebus. Your profile pic is sooooooo cute.
What is this I don't even...
It was well written, at least. I'm not a big fan of shipping, but this was done very well, especially for the 60 minute challenge.
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Well, buck. Excuse me while I fix that. Edit: Actually, I think that's right. 'Her's' as in the lips belonging to her. I could also be way off base. I'll figure it out, but I don't have the time right now.
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I know how they work, I simply chose to not use them so that way it wouldn't be immediately obvious who it was.
Anypony else lose the game other than me?
I mean, no one plays it any more, but I still think about it whenever it comes up.
1366802 Possessive pronouns don't have apostrophes. Ever.
"Mine". "Yours". "His". "Hers". "Its". "Theirs". "Ours". And if you're writing Luna, "Thine". The more you know.
This speedfic is pretty awesome.
I just lost the game.
What? did you expect otherwise?
1365945 You cannot believe how hard I laughed at this comment.
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I understand your intent, but when you have two characters interacting, chaining ambiguous pronouns together like you did has the (in this case unintentional) side-effect of causing confusion between the actions of the two characters involved. In this case, it is done clumsily and disrupts the flow of the story as well as confusing the reader.
Wonderful little story! That was short, sweet and.... fun?
Well either way the fun has been doubled!!!!
I am surprised that Rainbow Dash wasn't the one that was you know
at the end. 
; no wait all three should have been in on it Yea
!!!
...she should have been
Also I do love how this idea came from Rarity
. Twilight and Rarity have always been the kinkiest 
.
Random Fact of the day: Other than Princess Luna, Pinkie Pie has been the only other pony to step hoof on the moon.
accomplished this 528 years before she was born, or without magic, science, a spacecraft, food, water, the ability to fly much less break through the atmosphere. The Scientific Community had this to say: Its Pinkie Pie case closed. (Scientific Community currently consist of Twilight
Sparkle, due to Celestia banishing all other community members 
(something about Bananas))!
... man I suck at writing these.
This was recorded by Princess Luna. Princess Luna still doesn't understand how Pinkie Pie
Suck on that fact of the day. Phew I need to lay down
Anyways... great story it was double (I said double twice I'm so proud of myself
) the fun of other fanfics!!!
I was hoping she'd get surprised by three feet of forked tongue.
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Ah, thanks. I wasn't aware of that! I learned something new today!
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You have a point, I may go back and edit this, but not at the moment! (I'm at camp and don't have time.) This was more a challenge to myself, I didn't expect it to get this much attention.
Do not change anything about this story! It was awesome! And I know most people prefer AppleDash to Rarijack, but I am a firm believer that both relationships make sense. My explanation for Rarijack: opposites attract.
I laughed at the book and twilight part
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DAT NAME!
...dafuq is wrong with me. don't worry, you still get a like
1365691 ...but check out his mad bowl-cut! -Dopefish
Of course rarity is the best kisser
I mean come on, she is the one that reads romance novels.
Nice! That Applejack pony sure likes Rarity, huh?
Awww! RariJack is one of my favorite ships! I wish this was a full-fledged story, I have no doubts that you would pull it off well.
makEs me wonDer what Twight doeS when she Is all aLOne in thAt libRary...
Dude epicness i love the discription ... makes it feel like they were kissing me damnit now i taste vanilla yummy love the whole tongue action bro keep writing!
This story was the jew's shoes.
I had to read this after reading the description. Part of me didn't want to, but in the end, I got pulled in. And I'm glad I did. Very lolzy, and I'm in a lolzy mood tonite.
So I stumbled upon this story. I have to admit, I was little reluctant at first ('A story about kissing? Probably lot of descriptions and stuff instead of dialogues and action; Applejack's sensory deprivation? Probably very limited descriptions...').
Descriptions are well-conducted, vivid, strongly personalized for each pony and just felt... alive. Good job!
Yet I am really glad that I have read it!
And yes, I was counting on a twist in the end, but that would require more time than a challenge of one hour, right?
Thanks for that. And yeah, a twist would've very difficult with the one hour limit. I glad you took the time to give it a chance.
This is great
especially since you only had one hour
2220256 Thanks!
Fuck yea. just, yes. That was amazing. And you did it in an hour? Geez. You should totally make it a full fledged story, though I don't know how.
1380470 Rarijack is the greatest ship in the fleet. And oldest. Watch Gen 1s Rescue from Midnight Castle; Applejack licks "Rarity's" face in the first two minuets. This ship will sink when Ash and Misty split apart. ie Never. Rarijack for life.
Very sweet piece.
The missing comma in the first sentence threw me off, but I'm glad that I read on. The description was great and the tongues and kissing methods were very in character and fun to read about. This is a very nice little thing, and I only wish that it was longer.
I just lost the game. And so did you.