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Ahuizotl145 stories ·117 members

The Valley of Nameless Things

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The Valley, a place only rumoured to exist, as the only surviving hoofful of documents were written by explorers, who uttered not more than a couple of words, lest the horrors returned to their mind.

When Daring Do first heard about it, she went to ask the only one who knew more than her about such things, the Guardian Ahuizotl, who merely warned her not to venture there under any circumstance...

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Starswirl the Beardless

Starswirl the Beardless #1 · Jun 12th, 2023 · · ·

I'm not sure what to say about this so far. I like your premise as stated in the description, but the story itself doesn't really hook me. Granted, this is just the prologue, so that can be forgiven somewhat. My biggest complaint would be about the odd sentence structure you were using throughout this. I'm assuming this was intentional, but I have no idea why you wrote this way. It doesn't add anything to the story, and it's not even grammatically correct most of the time. I would seriously recommend you write more normally in future chapters and not try to be flashy like this.

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JDeck306 #2 · Jun 12th, 2023 · · ·

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Thank you for your comment and your input. [genuine]
I do have a particular and peculiar style of writing, where my sentences end up incredibly long.
I will try to avoid this in the future.
Thank you again!