Happy Death Day, Rainbow Dash!

TThe Dashpoint Paradox
MLP: FiM
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Tragedy
Rainbow Dash takes a trip through time to undue the tragedies of her past.
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Rainbow Dash
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ArcadePonyFubuki · 7.6k words · 265 views

Rainbow Dash wakes up on her birthday expecting an average day, and that’s what she gets until she’s unexpectedly murdered. She then wakes up on her birthday, with a sudden sense of deja vu. Can Rainbow Dash figure out why the day’s repeating before she loses all hope?

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Wake Up · 27th May 2023 · 2,309 words
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Break Down · 28th May 2023 · 3,097 words
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Freak Out · 29th May 2023 · 2,364 words
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What’s Left · 31st May 2023 · 3,028 words
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All’s Right · 2nd Jun 2023 · 1,444 words
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Rubae

Rubae #1 · Jun 4th, 2023 · 2 · · All’s Right ·

It's always the timid ones

AvoidingFever17

AvoidingFever17 #2 · Jun 5th, 2023 · · · All’s Right ·

anomaly alert!
God damnit
IS IT A POISONED CUPCAKE?
YEP!
damnit
GO TELL THE KIDS TO TURN OFF THAT LITTLE LOOP MACHINE

AvoidingFever17

AvoidingFever17 #3 · Jun 6th, 2023 · · · Freak Out ·

“Hope you enjoy today, because there’s not gonna be a tomorrow..” Rainbow read aloud. Dropping the card, Rainbow immediately checked her surroundings. As Rainbow Dash scanned the library, she spotted an open window on the ceiling.

THERE IT IS!

Coltamane

Coltamane #4 · Jul 22nd, 2023 · 1 · · All’s Right ·

Does this even count as an Alt Universe? I've read through all of it but the only thing that's different is the fact that it mentioned Rainbow Dash has a sister but nothing's really done with that so I don't really know why it has that tag.

Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #5 · Aug 14th, 2023 · · · All’s Right ·

What are you going to do about the sequel to Happy Death Day?

RushingWind-01

RushingWind-01 #6 · Oct 8th, 2023 · 1 · · All’s Right ·

Very similar to Happy Deathday. I actually watched that movie, and it was really good. The sequel breaks the immersion though, which is why I don't watch it.

Nevertheless, you did great, and it's nice to see that Rainbow Dash survived.

Hyper Star

Hyper Star #7 · Oct 9th, 2023 · · · Wake Up ·

Rainbow stepped forward and awed at the confection. An angle food cupcake with strawberry icing.

Do you mean angel?

As the girls looked at Fluttershy with baffled puzzlement, Rainbow Dash finally arrived at Sugarcube Corner.

Baffled and puzzlement mean the same thing

“Oh sweet, naive, Dashie, I always have enough balloons.” Pinkie responded with a smirk.

This is hilariously in character

Rainbow Dash raised her head and quickly checked her surrounding, finding nopony around her. She was going to release a sigh of relief when she suddenly felt her mane be jerked back. Looking up, she met the gaze of the colt mask and a knife being raised above her.

Colt... mask? I think it should be "the colt's mask" or "the colts' mask" (or "the colts mask", basically, just add an "s")

Good so far, I'll keep reading.

Hyper Star

Hyper Star #8 · Oct 9th, 2023 · · · Break Down ·

“I uh.. I guess I was..” Rainbow conceded. “Sorry about that.”

Ellipses have 3 dots, not any more nor any less (hence the informal name "dot, dot, dot.)

’crazy rabbit, now I gotta fix all the stuff he made me knock over.’

Whyyyy?! There's this weird this fanfic writers do where they use single quotes for thoughts, it's confusing, just italics would do.

Even Fluttershys house isn't safe! (It's a cottage, not a cabin, by the way.)

Hyper Star

Hyper Star #9 · Oct 9th, 2023 · · · Freak Out ·

“Hey, hey, calm down. Tell me what’s going on.” Twilight consoled her friend.

No need to say "Twilight consoled her friend", we can tell by the dialogue.

“AAAAAAAAAAWHATS HAPPENING WHY ARE WE SCREAMING!?” A suddenly appearing Pinkie Pie yelled alongside.

I can see this Pinkie doing this, good job 👏 😏

“SHUT UP! JUST SHUT THE-[...]"

Fuck

’That asshole rain cloud pouring on the stupid couple across the street, that goddamn oven going off, that fucking guy behind the shitty diner of all places.’

There it is! I was expecting a fuck 👍