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Twilight loves playing chess, a new game that is rising popularity in Equestria. After playing several times with other ponies and Spike, she is confident in her ability as a chess player to play in the tournament in Canterlot after Rarity suggests it to her.

Before Twilight even embarks on this adventure, she says in her mind... Chess is only a game and it should never be taken literally.

Well, what would happen if she changes her mind after some "persuasion" from the game?

Oh, you may need to look at a layout of a chess board to know how this story works. :)

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 13 )

.... I have no strong feelings one way or the other.

It's looking good though.

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This is strange.

Pardon my criticism, but I am only trying to help.

Why did Twilight follow Saxon? She just met him, and he never invited her or anything. Second, why did she follow him into a mysterious building with no doors or windows that had an arcane lock of some sort on it? She's not stupid. That was quite out of character. :applejackunsure:

Also, how did the remainder of the Mane 6 get into the building? It seems as though you're simply plopping them down on the chessboard with no explaination of why Saxon wants them to do this, why he chose them, how he knew that they were her friends, or how he got them all there.

Again, I am only trying to help. :twilightsmile:

.... Okay. You have earned a like and a fave from me.

Ok, I for one am surprised Discord isn't involved in this somehow.

I enjoyed the concept and am looking forward to more. I don't think i've read any other stories with chess as the central theme. :D I loves me some hot chess in the morning.

How much do you want to bet that Discord uses his chaos powers to cheat in some way?

Ok, this just got chaotic. Let's see the EoH in the last few chapters to end Discord once and for all.

Present tense... interesting choice. I don't think it works too well here, though.

Mildly surprised, yes.

"The six virtues of friendship, trust, honesty, laughter, generosity, loyalty, kindness and magic." I think you mean seven, either that or remove trust, because of the EoH. Other than that, epic. Love the twist with her daughter at the end. What a tweest!:twistnerd:

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Thanks for the comment darthvader45. I am going to get this story edited by a proofreader and then submit it to EqD. I hope it get's admitted. It would be really cool :twilightsmile:

P.S. I fixed that mistake you found. Thanks

1940653 No problem, always willing to help. I can tell you this, if I go to Equestria, I am gonna tell Twilight about your story, and she'll definitely want to read it.

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