I would like to first say that I binged through the entire story so my critic is just all over the place and in general. The overall concept and how u did it especially explaining on both ur character and the story was well done, some might call it cringe but that's the execution not the potential for it could, and experience tend to curve it after a while.

The only thing that can't be ignored is ur spelling and structure. ur spelling could be easily fixed by placing the text in Microsoft Word or google docs, and lastly ur structuring for paragraphs I feel that some went too long, especially with ur last chapter describing the 6 ponies.

Overall it's fine and tbf u dont have to take my critics, it's ur story and I think it is good as it is currently.

Pretty sweet this is continuing.

But bummed that Spike missed out on first contact though

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I appreciate your criticism bc I’m always looking for ways to improve so thank you

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Oh, don’t worry I have something planned for spike

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Ok then.

How is it going?