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It's only the first paragraph and we have a tense swap.
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"Tense swap"?
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Grammar.
Man, you never disappoint 😝😝😝
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Happy to be obliged
Looking forward for all the mind breaking
11521892
Switching from one tense to another within the text. Fiction is conventionally written in the past tense, but this story begins in the present (Twilight is in, not Twilight was in). But later on it switches to past (She was able).
And this is why you don't put drinks anywhere near electronics.
nice chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
This would be enjoyable if it were not for the bad grammar. You really need a editor.
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Where else is the bad grammar so I can fix it
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First person tense: “I ate the pear.”
Second person tense: “You ate the pear.”
Third person tense: “He/She ate the pear.”
Changing tenses during a scene is a cardinal sin.
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Can you show me where it is?
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When you look at the Dazzlings at the camp site, you’re staying in third person just fine, but tenses have “voices.” Past voice is most common:
“Aria shook her head angrily.” It’s already happened.
Present voice is more rare but ok:
“Aria shakes her head angrily.” She’s doing it as we watch.
What I’m seeing you do is bounce back and forth between past and present tense within the same paragraph and scene. You always want to pick one and keep it consistent.
I hope this helps!
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I guess...
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I’m sorry. I know English is a pain in the butt.
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I was born in Tennessee dude
If you can’t get yourself an editor, just throw your work into Grammarly. It’s what I do and that seems to make things a bit clearer.
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Thanks for that and can someone send me a link of it?
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https://www.grammarly.com/
When approximately we can expect next chapter author?
Will twilight sparkle be the alpha female
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Soon. But there's some that need to be done first
I can't wait to see what he does with Applejack, Rarity and Luna
There hasn't been much Flash x Dazzlings fics.
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Really? Huh.
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Or a group of that you know.
Dickwolves
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What you talking about?
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you have seriously never heard of the penny arcade dickwolves "controversy"?
now i am feeling old ._.
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Sorry
Cool i look forward to when the 3 you mention in the author's note join. I'm curious how Flash will break Rarity, Aj, and Vingette to join. Also when will i start seeing Fluttershy, Celestia and Luna showing signs of being impregnated by Flash? After all in his Alpha wolf musing he said those 3 in particular will be breeders in his pack while Rainbow and the Dazzelings will be bred too they will be the security detail of the pack mostly
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It was my partner's idea
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I didn't like it as much as you did. And I swear, this is the final time I do anything like this
This was awesome work here can't wait to see who else you add
Oh! Oh! Oh! Oh! I know what masks they should wear. They should wear dog masks. Each one represents their 'Fursona'.
EX: Flash wears a wolf mask. Adagio wears a lassie dog one. Applejack wears a golden retriever one. Rarity wears a poodle one. And Aria wears a Doberman one. You know just spit balling ideas here. You really doing have to.
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You'll have to wait and see
nice chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
You said has cock you Meant to say his
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I am pretty sure no as that means the hentai stops
great chapter mate can't wait for the next chapter
Fuck you, Flash!
Twilight decided being the alpha bitch was more important than saving anyone.
so what now?
Well this has been interesting
Glad this story is done. Fucking Flash!
great job on story will there be a sequel?
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Huh, that sounds like a good idea