An impromptu trip to Manehattan leaves Fluttershy torn between life back in Ponyville and a little filly who caught her eye. Can she really stand up to the challenge of raising a foal? Especially one as damaged as Scootaloo?
Warning: The timeline is a little bit screwy from the actual show. Some events happen a little bit out of order. Please ignore.
All art was done by me. The first two headers were made by me writing in my notebook. The third header was from a still from the actual show, and the rest were done by tracing exports from SFM I made.
Inspired by the beautiful story Unseen, Unheard by the amazing Nocturnal Reverie.
HUGE thanks to Discombobulated Soul for making me finally finish this story.
Chapters (10)
Dapper
This was a lovely.
A story about Fluttershy and Scootaloo? Count me in!
This is such a nice story. The relationship you made between Rarity and Sweetie Belle is pulling at my heart. I love it.
a lovely first chapter!
eh we all have hard lives, hell when I was young (as a baby) I had to relearn how to walk and talk again, plus the absurd amounts of brain surgeries, I've had
Looking good so far. I'd be glad to see more!
I’m invested
Huh. Why the use of Dusk Shine and Spines instead of Twilight?
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just to fuck with people.
genuinely.
that's it. that's the whole reason. I just felt like it.
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Lmao, I respect that answer immensely.
I was wondering if it was a trans fic one way or another as well so was making -eyes- as a nonbinary person.
I'll comment on my thoughts on the fic when it's done but so far it has captured my heart immensely haha.
Any reason you made Twilight into Dusk?
Meanwhile, the timeline from the actual show is a lot screwy all by itself. (Citation)
Seriously, anyone who cared about this can be safely ignored.
Well that's a bit sad if not also sweet.
I feel like this story is going to give me a d'aaaaw overload and I don't mind it.
This had me in stitches for some reason.
so Scootaloo finally found her voice, yay!
We Need the other dimensional story now
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was thinking about it, but people have already done it and done it a thousand times better than i ever could.
This is just plain sweet as heck so far.
Also, the dig at Flint's not-at-all clean water had hit home for me.
Scootaloo is getting a sweet friend in Sweetie Belle!
SO SWEET! NO PUN INTENDED!
Oh... no...
Let's not forget: in many a universe, Scootaloo is a daredevil!
Oh, Rainbow...
Also, Dusk... are you gonna do what I think you're gonna do?
I applaud Sweetie for trying to better understand Scootaloo.
And thus, the makings of a trio's formation were created!
great story!
This story is good and i know it’s set in a alternate universe which means some things didn’t happen like scootaloo being there when nightmare moon appear
quite great, but man the last bit was a bit emotional, but it's still great
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Look what you made me do lmao (not posted yet)
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cant wait to read it
I am disappointed that this story isn't a Simpsons crossover?
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i'm disappointed it's not a steven universe crossover
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I’m disappointed this isn’t a My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic crossover.
Such a lovely story. Sure, the dialogue can be a bit clunky sometimes, but the descriptions and mood are REALLY good. I didn't even notice too many typos or errors either, maybe a few times where you used the wrong word (tired, probably). My favourite was when at a very emotional moment Sweetie gave a hug to Sweetie.
One thing I would probably have left a bit more vague was the description of what exactly happened to Scootaloo's brother, but it still worked. As Alternate Universes go, you kept this really close to canon with the mood and characters apart from some maybe unnecessary cursing. That's a big thing for me; keeping the feel of the show while telling stories that are divergent from it.
I'm happy I read this story and your other stories as well. Something in your writing really hits home for me, which I can't say for a lot of other fics I've read. I don't really know what it is, but a big part is that you keep stories down to earth and relatable, and you balance even the saddest things with optimism. You've quickly become one of my favourite new writers.
Small typo
Typo
Did you mean ‘tome’? Though the mental image of dusk carrying a gravestone around and reading it is pretty funny.
Interesting AU.
This was such a well done chapter, like, holy shit. The feels being portrayed here in such a short and concise scene was off the charts.
One of the cutest Scoots' stories I've read in a while. So underappreciated.
The first day jitters described in this chapter were so well done.
That ending. I love it.
Your writing teeters on the brink of having too much description over dialogue, but it's not overly so and very much enhances the overall mood of each scene with vivid detail.
you accidentally put sweetie two times in there but otherwise the story is good so far
i was mostly skimming at first but then kinda became super invested in the story, fluttershy and scootaloo were always my favorite characters so it makes me so happy to read them together