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TheApostate


I tend to more focalize on worldbuilding rather than proper storytelling, though I try to weave something adequate. Écrire c'est mon Violon d'Ingres.

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The Queen of All Changelings wants her people's salvation. She wants them to thrive and prosper.

She saw herself as the only creature able to bring them such a future, and the singular individual to take any step outside constant hunger.

On this journey, Chrysalis would meet and surround herself with Changelings and a Pony.

A company that will lead her to a renewed focus...

WARNING: BARBARIC LANGUAGE WITHIN!

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 13 )

Okay, the story is good so far, but, claws? Why claws on Chrysalis? Or changelings in general?

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Because insectes... and I was more comfortable writing with claws in mind than whatever they have in the show. Hooves? Chitinous hooves?

So, just convenience on my part. And thank you for the comment!

Keep up with the good work!

Enjoying the cloak and dagger of this story. Keep up the good work.

While I share the view that Chrysalis looks good in the role of the agent of change, this one seems to be far more lucid than canonical one. Almost completely different character
Good read though, I enjoyed :twilightsmile:

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I am happy you enjoyed it! I enjoyed righting about the Changelings too!

About her: I focused more on the "subtly evil" character. She is driven by her ultimate goal, which made her seen as "evil".
Her madness (as I see it) comes from her failures, her curse, and the loss of the few she trusted.
I intent to explore briefly her childhood in a one-chapter story. So, maybe, it will give more depth to her character.

Also.... Carl is still not happy.

Not quite sure what is going in here.

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Chrysalis plunges into the abyss of madness

Jog

Even if this story is quite unusual and confusing i do find myself hoping for more.

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That is my power! Also, I wonder what you mean by confusing? I know I rushed many parts, but is it detrimental to the story's flow?

Jog

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I suppose it is more difficult than usual to actually piece together a story here since not a lot is explained and the story goes through plot points at break neck speed. I suppose it has it's charm and is certainly unique in a sense. I did enjoy it up to now after all.

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For the former, it is intentional. I think it worked partially seeing by the comments and people's likes.
For the latter, I knew I could expand more but as I noted in "Lord Inspector"; one day I was bored as hell, decided to write something, was listening to Only War's "History of the Old World" while aslo before having had watched French sketches and shorts. Then, gradually it happened.
Who knows? Maybe we will truly know one day why Carl is not happy.

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