Centuries have passed since The Elements of Harmony were united.
Centuries have passed since Twilight Sparkle breathed.
Centuries have passed since Starlight Glimmer finished building The Gungeon.
Centuries have passed since Spike the Dragon stopped working as a peacekeeper for Equestria.
With Ponykind on the brink of war, with all three tribes at each others throat and with the disappearance of Magic from Ponykind, It seems Spike has no more reason to help them.
But he still has a chance to save Equestria, one last time.
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Oops, he just put a regular black bullet, this can’t be good
Ok I'm sorry but what. Sure her friend's trust onto her would be broken, but banishment? To me, that's seems a bit of a stretch to me. Unless Twilight lost her mind as years went by, so she couldn't think sensibly. But this has never been stated here so idk. Maybe a prequel would help explore this a bit more because this seems a bit iffy.
W-what? Like, immediately? They were friends for I'd estimate at least a decade if it was on her fortieth birthday, it feels a bit much that she'd just instantly banish her for this, especially if Starlight explained her entire tale of seeing a vision in which Equestria's future was at stake.
I mean, Starlight magically brainwashed her friends to literally do her bidding and didn't have a genuinely good reason for that bit, and still Twilight forgave her. It doesn't seem like this anomaly she created is an immediate danger to the world. And even if it was, I feel like Twilight would've had Starlight stick around to help fix the mess she made rather than immediately banish her, then proceed to struggle with the issue by herself.
That aside, the premise is interesting and has promise, but its setup feels a little rushed; such a complex storyline I would imagine should take a bit more than just 1k words to establish its foundation. Also, the tense seems to switch back and forth a bit; not sure if the story is meant to be told in past or present.
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I'm not really planning on writing more than this.
I just wanted to make a quick lottle Enter The Gungeon crossover since those don't exist.
The ending is also open to interpretation, so you can use your imagination to figure what point in time Spike went to Change.
And the part with Starlight? I haven't actually watched MLP since S4 came out. I wouldn't consider myself an MLP fan, even.
I just like writing Fanfiction.
I know nothing about Starlight's character except she's some kind of pony socialist. I just used how she has experience with Changing The Timeline, nothing really deeper than that.
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Ah I suppose that makes sense. Also, apologies for misunderstanding, I didn't note that the story was Completed!
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No problem.
I might write a continuation down the line and flesh this world out more, but I currently have no plans to do so.
Thanks for the constructive critisicm though, Nice to get criticism that isn't "This sucks, write about Naruto Multiverse Harem Super Saiyan Shadow the Hedgehog with Gamer system"
It's a nice change of pace :)
Hahaha good old Gungeon, i do hope for a continuation of this, would be interesting to see the "current" spike shot back in time to deal with the event that went wrong while everyone is trying to figure out where cool future spike came from and the fallout of him being there. A good one shot as is though.
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Thanks :)
Might do a continuation down the road but for now this will stay as a One-shot.
Just wanted to write a Enter The Gungeon story, even if it was short :)
Okay. I just read it. And I loved it. Enter the gungeo. Were always awesome. I hope to read a sequel in the future XD