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Discord plans a picnic for himself and Fluttershy, but it begins to rain. They find shelter in a cave and Discord thinks that their day for a picnic is ruined. But Fluttershy thinks differently about the situation.
Day Four of #FluttercordWeek2023: Safe Place
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Aww, so cute! It's always fun to see Fluttershy sharing some of that friendship expertise with Discord.
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It sure is and thank you.
Aww, this is sweet! Love how Fluttershy assured him that things were fine, and that they could still enjoy their picnic together.
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Indeed she does. I'm glad you like it!
I liked the story, but some information doesn't make sense.
1- Discord can stop the rain if he wants to, I found it very strange that he didn't think about it and even didn't use any power. He keeps using his power every second in the episodes.
2- To make matters worse, they didn't know it was going to rain. It is shown in several episodes that the pegasi are the ones who choose the weather, so everyone knows what weather each day will have.
Aside from that, the story is pretty good. I know that maybe it's hard for you to take those information out without totally changing the story. So if you don't have a good idea that makes these information make sense, it's better to leave it as is:(
Sorry for disturbing you, I'm not the type of reader who talks about every problem I find in the text, but, at least for me, it was difficult to read without noticing it. But I hope you don't mind, I didn't mean to be rude, I just wanted to give constructive criticism. And as I said before, I loved your story :)
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Thanks!