Chapter 1
Mr. Cake was sweeping around Sugar Cube Corner while staring out of the window with the pegasi flying about in the evening sky. He enjoyed watching the sky to find comfort in his daily work.
Mrs. Cake was selling some cookies to Twilight at the front counter.
"Thanks for making me a fresh batch of cookies Mrs. Cake! You're always so generous." Twilight gushed.
"Oh its no problem at all dearie, anything for one of my best customers." Mrs. Cake said with a sweet smile as she slid the container of cookies to Twilight over the counter.
"Bye, Mrs. Cake." Twilight said as she levitated the container on her back.
"Come again soon Twilight."
A crash came from behind Twilight and she turned around.
Mr. Cake was standing next to the table that had crashed into the ground. He tensed up and slowly turned around to see Twilight and Mrs. Cake staring at him.
"Are you alright, Mr. Cake?"
"I-I'm fine, Twilight... you should be on your way while I clean this mess." He said stammeringly.
Twilight trotted to the front door and looked back at him. "Do you need some help?"
A small bead of sweat formed at his temple. "N-no you should just leave, its almost closing time."
"Okay, Good bye, Mr. Cake." Twilight cheerfully as she left the bakery.
Mr. Cake locked the front door as she left and hung up the closed sign in the window and then began to pick up the broken table.
"How did that happen?"
Mr. Cake jumped at the voice of his wife's voice behind him. He nervously turned around to face her. "I w-was sweeping and I knocked one of the loose legs out from under the t-table..."
Mrs. Cake's smile faded and replied. "Alright, I'll go put away the leftover's from today."
Mr. Cake let out a sigh of relief as she trotted away. He picked up the broken leg and threw it in a trashcan and lifted the table and set it against the wall. He trotted over to the coat rack and hung his hat and apron on a hanger.
Mr. Cake turned around and almost ran into Pinkie Pie. His heart raised at the sight of the pink mare that he saw daily at the bakery.
"Oh sorry, Pinkie."
"What happened to the display table?" Pinkie asked biting her bottom lip while looking at the table propped against the wall.
"I broke it by accident.." Mr. Cake said while looking down.
"I'll help you fix it tomorrow if you need help." she said sweetly with a smile.
His face was blank. "Okay, thank you Pinkie."
"Good night, Mr. Cake." Pinkie left him and trotted up the stairs to her room, leaving a faint scent of sweet candy behind her.
"Good night, Pinkie." He said as he watched her trot up the stairs with his heart sinking.
Mr. Cake slowly walked to his room with his head drooped down low in depression. He entered the room where his wife was waiting for him, tapping her hoof.
"Did you finish cleaning up that mess you made?" Mrs. Cake asked quietly with a tinge of annoyance in her voice.
"Y-yes dear.." He said in defeat.
Mrs. Cake started glaring at him intensely while throwing her hooves in the air. "I can't believe you fucked up again! Can you not even do the simplest things right?! You're a weak stallion with no brains at all!"
"It was an accident!" Mr. Cake snapped back.
"Yeah, an accident." She turned to face an invisible pony. "Hey guess what! It was an accident!
"It WAS an accident dear..."
"I'm sure it was DEAR, I swear its always an accident with you." She said as she rolled her eyes.
"I make one little mistake and you always yell at me for it..."
"One? What about that fire you almost started on the stove last week?"
"The circuit shorted and sparked in the stove." He said now glaring at his wife.
"And what about your inability to give me a child? That THING down their is about as weak as plywood!" She said pointing down and cringing.
It was his turn to yell. "There's nothing wrong with me! You're the one whose sterile!"
"Yeah, blame everything else besides yourself." She sighed but then continued her glare. "You're a failure as a husband and I have no idea why I'm still here!"
Mr. Cake stomped. "Probably because you don't want anypony in Ponyville knowing that your actually a raging bitch!" He snapped.
"A raging bitch?!" She clenched her teeth in anger. She reached over and gave Mr. Cake's face a quick jab with her hoof and hitting him dead center in the muzzle.
Mr. Cake sprawled backwards covering his muzzle and fighting the urge to strike his wife back.
Mrs. Cake continued to glare at him. "See? You never were stallion enough for me, you don't have any backbone at all." She waved her hoof at him. "Go sleep on the couch tonight, I'm tired of looking at your face." She turned to walk to her bed feeling triumphant.
He clenched his teeth and through his hooves and teeth he muttered "Bitch." before he left the room. He walked into the living room and laid down on the couch still holding his muzzle, checking to see if it was bleeding. He sat up after checking his muzzle and put his head between his hooves in deep depression.
Mr. Cake jumped as a hoof touched his shoulder. He turned his head and saw a concerned pink mare.
"Mr. Cake? Are you alright? I heard some yelling." Pinkie asked sincerely.
"Y-yes.. Pinkie I'm fine."
Pinkie turned on the lamp next to the couch and gasped at him. "Your nose is swollen!" She trotted around the couch to get in front of him. She grabbed his head lightly with both hooves and pulled him closer. "Let me have a look."
When Pinkie touched his face Mr. Cake felt ripples of relief go through his body and his heart felt alive again at the kind gesture. He stared into her eyes that were looking down at his muzzle.
"It doesn't look so bad... One second I'll be right back." Pinkie trotted off into the kitchen.
She returned moments later with a small baggy filled with ice. She gently poked at the swollen muzzle with the ice a few times before she slowly set the whole bag on his muzzle. "This should make the swelling go down." She smiled at him while holding the bag up.
"P-Pinkie.." Mr. Cake was lost for words from being treated like a pony, most ponies talked to his wife and he usually held his tongue. "T-thank you so much."
Pinkie Pie's smile widened. "I'm glad to help." Her smile faded as a question popped up in her head. "How did this happen, Carrot Cake?"
He was surprised that she called him by his full name, everyone that spoke to him just called him Mr. Cake. He rubbed the back of his neck as Pinkie held the icepack with questioning eyes. "Uhh... When I was cleaning the table I stepped on a piece of wood and it launched up and hit me in the face.."
Pinkie Pie raised her eye brow. "But I watched you clean it up, I never saw a piece of wood hit you..."
"It.. it happened really fast Pinkie, it's fine though." He tried to muster a small smile.
"No, it's not fine, you're hurt." Pinkie grabbed his hoof and brought it up to the hoof she was using to hold the icepack.
Mr. Cake felt his heart flutter from the touch of their hooves.
"Hold this, I'll be right back." Pinkie removed her hoof and trotted back into the kitchen.
He held up the ice pack and watched her trot off.
She came back quickly with a glass of milk and she handed it to him. "Here, milk always makes me feel better."
He grabbed the glass and stared into Pinkie's eyes and he loved how they shone in the dim light. "Thank you so much, Pinkie."
Pinkie gently smiled. "You're not sleeping on the couch tonight are you?"
"Yes, I am."
"Why?" Pinkie's head turned with the question.
"Cup Cake has a cold, and I didn't want to catch it."
Pinkie looked at the couch but then smiled at him. "Okie dokie lokie. Good night Carrot Cake." She walked off towards her stairs.
Pinkie stopped at the top of the stairs and looked down with her hoof edging towards them, fighting the urge to go back. No, hes with Cup Cake.. I-I can't.... She continued to her room with a heavy heart.
He drank the glass of milk and didn't bother to put up the glass and just set it down on the floor next to the couch. He laid down on the couch again, this time feeling comfort and he drifted off to sleep.
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THIS....Intrigues me. I shall track you sir. Like a boss.
d'aww it's almost romantic if it wasn't so twisted
I was already prepared to give you 5 stars for the simple fact that it involved Pinkie and both the Cakes and was not a clop.
The sad part is, I could totally see this happening in real life. The world we live in today
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Hmm. I always thought of Pinkie as the Cake's sort of 'Adopted daughter'. Interesting to see something new.
Great work, but to see the curse words shcoked me a little bit. Seems a bit out of caracter for... Well, the entire MLP universe. Only issue i had with it.
I've detected no spelling or grammer issues, but i didn't really pay attention. Leave it to someone who not as tired as i am right now.
Tracking, but reluctantly. Seems like a good concept, but not one that intest me too much. Hope to be proven wrong.
-The Librarian
Cupcake is just to out of character and that's destroys completly any sense of immersion, I can't relate with the story
Anything really nasty that Mrs. Cake says yo can blame on me. I came up with the idea for her to be written this way as well as a lot of the nasty things she says as well as other aspects of the story. I like how my outline came to life and how winter threw in a couple of surprises. I'm proud to be part of this team. Kudos for making this happen.
How it Began: The story behind this was Winter threw the idea out there of shipping Pinky with Mr. Cake, but didn't wanted to make it a clop or ruin Pinky Pie's character. My solution is we make Mrs. Cake the villain and we make the affair an act of heroism.
Oh and trust me Mrs. Cake only gets worse from here. My inspiration for her nastiness comes from me working retail.
Peace Out.
87921 really? would you care to describe her character for me? She has about 15 words said in total all 2 seasons.
Hehe. That is all. Winter you rock. Why was it spaced so differently?
Spousal abuse isn't just male-on-female. Some women do pick on their men. A pretty dark topic, but certainly more interesting than all the war stories people produce.
One thing to note is that canon has already established that the Cakes have a kid. The episode after next has Pinkie babysitting for them.
87902 Shes an apprentice, they lived with their teachers - Read description - and I hate the word concept. Alot. It's a story not a 'concept'
87941 Yeah, I know about that episode and I choose to ignore it. Pretend you didn't read that part because I don't plan on changing it
87941
We make it Alternate Universe, if we add the kid make him adopted. Most likely there will be no kid. In our story Mr. and Mrs. Cake are about 30 years old and Pinky is about 21-23 years old. We keep our fanon and besides if everyone stuck with what's canon some of the best fics wouldn't exist. Bing Bang Boom we're done.
Peace Out.
87935 Maybe she said only a handful of word in two seasons, but none of those words were spoken by a bitter bitch, i wish i could expess my idea better, but i´m from Argentina, english it´s my second lenguage, what I'm trying to say it´s that action defined a character and nothing in the character actions suggest anything like what you wrote and also you gave no good reason to justify the change in her personality.
So... Not clop but borderline trolling on those that like Mr and Mrs. Cake? Plus adultery. Fine for fantasy clopping but inappropriate on so many levels for this.
88108
I wonder how you managed to pass any english class, In PUBLIC shes sweet and all, but privately shes a bitch. It's called fiction. I would learn that term if your going to use this site.
88115 say it with me people fan- FICTION.
And I said this wasn't a clop.. if someone does somehow manage to do such a thing to this its their business.
88124
Not quite my point. I'm just saying that when it comes to general sexuality, adultery can be kinky and soforth. But seems, as said, inappropriate in this situation. I mean, why not also have Rarity's mom break her dad's legs? It makes just as much good nonsense.
There are a couple grammar/spelling errors, simple things like your/you're and some puctuation errors when attributing dialogue. Formatting seems a bit odd and spaced out, but that may be just because I'm reading on a Kindle so take it with a grain of salt. Overall, an intriging start though.
I have to say this intrigued me. I can't wait to see more! good job!
88151 it would be hard to make a plot from that, but seeing as this indeed has a plot I see now harm in it whatsoever.
87940 fixed it
Yay! More love to Carrot Cake! I read clopfic "Cakepie" and it was awesome, I get that you've got inspiration from that. Mrs Cake is a bitch and I hope she'll get hers. Pinkie + Mr Cake for the win! GO PINKIE!
Nice work. Made me happy.
i dont care what the parasprites say, I see nothing wrong with the characterization. ( i hate how putting 'i' in all caps doesnt really show much emphasis... a major flaw in the english language, if you ask me). the adultery, ehh im not a fan. but its fiction. and nothing makes me smile like a good fiction. keep it up!
O BOI! HERE WE GO!
88323 I haven't read that. I don't read clopfics the only clop I ever read was one I thought was just a grimdark and halfway through reading it i was like
is this a clop?
Then I stopped reading it lol.
88380 In the English language 'i' is capitalized to show first person view
88703
I suggest reading it. Relationships between Carrot and Cup written nicely and very much like you wrote here. Pinkie, Cake, Carrot, characters, feelings, pretty much the same idea just with clop. It may give you inspiration.
88716 My friend told me about that - He said mrs. cake is a bitch, then pink and carrot clop then end- doesnt sound too good to me.
88745
Well, to be frank, your fic can be described like "mrs cake is a bitch then pink and carrot top shipping then end' - so, give it a shot ^_^ At least you can use dialogues between Carrot and Pinkie. Oh, also read fanfic "Getting Back Together" - about Carrot\Pinkie\Cup love.
88758 Well from reading the first chapter you could say that, and I guess I'll give those fics a read. Right now im occupied trying to kill a tank with a defibrillator lol
88758 Just read cakepie... I read all of ch.1 it was kinda disturbing and very hollowly written.. but it was funny at one point I couldn't help but laugh out and on ch.2 I just stopped halfway it was boring and it was about to get really weird. Is that second one the same? if so I prob wont read it.
88704 i know, but i always wanna put emphasis on it, like for instance, 'well, IIII think that blah blah blah.."
hehe
ive only spoken english for 18/18 of my years so i know its supposed to be capitalized
89038 Considering they are always talking in first person its actually required, I could of course not capitalize them but then the grammar nazi's would be after me
89054 yeah understandably so. my original comment, though, was typed in frustration of being unable to emphasize the 'I'. it seems that my point has been self-made, as you didnt catch that i was trying to. that proves that u cant emphasize 'i'. and it makes me a little sad inside.
lol
88242
Yay! Better and not annoying anymore!!!!!!!!!!!
90253 You remind me of a friend of mine, very confusing and weird.
But yeah, when its in first person its going to stay the same.
90723 huzzah! mine identity hast been compromised!
91304 Prithee you jest?
From beyond thy cloud of innocence I look below at the hollow crust of amazement?
91358 Yea, verily. 'Tis nary the time of day from whence he cometh, arriving on the eastern seaboard. Alas, perchance he shall be early?
94173 :p yep your just like my friend, loads of fun.
I have a fic called Love is Chaotic- its a discopie and half of it is written in Shakespearean
And yae, early shall the time be as I announce the presence!
This calls for a battle to the death between the douche bag version of Cup Cake and Prince Blueblood!!!
This an old story 0_o.....but Imma read it anyways!
2040145
There = related to location Ex: The bathroom is down there, third door on the left.
Their = related to possession by multiple people Ex: The people in accounting are animals. Their bathroom is dirtier than most pig farms.
The they're(they are)/there/their mistake is pretty common
This story has been in my favorites list for several years unread.
It made it n there since the "read later" list hadn't been added to the site yet and the favorites list was all we had.
Time to see if the story earns its place on my favorites list.