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Derailed Plans

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Eons ago, the Crystal Empire's capital held a festival on the longest night of the year. It fell out of fashion long before even Sombra's reign. Shining Armour and Cadence found out about it and are trying to bring the Crystal Empire a winter holiday of its own.
If only life didn't have a habit of throwing a wrench in one's plans.

Written for Conglomerate for Jinglemas.

Proofread by ReviewFilly and some fine anons on /fimfic/.

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Conglomerate

Conglomerate #1 · Dec 31st, 2022 · 1 · ·

Excellent work, though I have to ask, what would you change in the rewrite you said this needed in your author's note?

Etyco Filly

Etyco Filly #2 · Dec 31st, 2022 · · ·

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Thank you, I'm really glad you enjoyed it ^^

I'm not exactly sure what I'd change, to be honest. I know I'd want to either push a more dramatic angle, or a comedic one.
I'd need to get rid of that infodump at the beginning and replace it with a few scenes that show the information in a more interesting way.
Speech scene is mostly fine on its own, but if I wanted to make this fic more of a comedy, I'd definitely need to adapt it.

Cyeion

Cyeion #3 · 2 weeks ago · 1 · ·

Very interesting to see such thing in your writing style. Especially since it didn’t seem much like a comedy throughout, its more like a telling of how the festival came to be by shining and cadance. without much weighting