• Published 24th Sep 2012
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Suddenly, a Filly! - Pomfiance



Twilight woke up and found out she's turned back into a filly.

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The Sun Tells A Story

*~~~~~*

"P-princess Celestia!?" Applejack stammered as Celestia purposely stepped into the library, prompting the others to kneel.

"There's no need to bow," Celestia said, motioning for them to stand back up as she scanned the library. "Where is Twilight?"

"She's takin' a nap upstairs." Applejack said, pointing towards the stairs, still a bit dazed from shock.

"A nap?" Celestia asked with a trace of an amused smile. "It's been so long since she's taken an actual nap. Does she still hold "The Advanced Theory of Magical Properties"?"

They all stared at her in disbelief before Pinkie recovered first, nodding. "Yup! It's sooooo cute!" she cooed, putter her hooves to her smiling face.

Celestia walked over to a table, waiting for the others to follow and gather around before sitting down.

Before Celestia could ask another question, Rainbow blurted out, "How'd you get here so fast!? And where's your guards?" she said nearly flying upwards in exclamation.

"I simply teleported." Celestia said lighting up her horn in emphasis, smiling. "As for my guards, I'm sure they'll be here shortly." Celestia looked towards the stairs again, her smile replaced by a small frown. "Now then; my guess is that this didn't just happen overnight."

Rarity shook her head. "No, I'm afraid she's been like this for nearly a month."

Celestia sighed, still staring at the stairs. "Do any of you know if she was going to inform me?"

Applejack nodded. "She said she might have told ya after she changed back."

A dejected look flashed across Celestia's face as she shook her head. "I... Thought as much."

Fluttershy took a hesitant step forward. "Um, Princess Celestia?"

Celestia turned to face Fluttershy, causing her to shrink back. "Yes Fluttershy?"

Fluttershy shuffled a hoof. "Well, um, if you don't mind me asking. Why exactly did you rush over to see Twilight?"

Celestia turned away, not meeting their curious stares. "I guess you might say for personal reasons."

"Personal? What kinda personal?" Applejack asked.

She looked back towards them, pausing a little before continuing. "Did Twilight ever tell you why she never made friends?"

They all shook their head. "At first it wasn't at all by choice."

"But what's that got to do with Twilight now, and you having a personal reason to see her?" Rainbow Dash asked.
Celestia gave them a sad smile. "It's because of what happened to her that will lead to those reasons. It started quite some time before she came here."

*~~~~~*

"Twilight Sparkle! Are you paying attention?"

Twilight looked up from her book to find herself face to face with an annoyed Mrs. Rosemary as the rest of the students around her snickered.

"O-oh um-" Twilight stuttered with a small blush on her face, but Mrs. Rosemary cut her off.

"Of course you weren't! This is the third time this week that I've had to address you directly. One more and I'll have to give you a demerit! Do I make myself clear?"

"Y-yes ma'am" Twilight said meekly.

"Good." Mrs. Rosemary said with a huff before turning back towards the board. "Now, as I was saying..."

After a few minutes of listening to material she'd read weeks ago, Twilight felt something hit the back of her head. She looked back and noticed a paper ball, and the pink filly behind her looking conspicuously nonchalant. As she turned back around, she felt another weak blow on the back of her head, followed by a soft "psst". Twilight turned around to the pink filly to see that she was levitating a paper ball to bounce off her head while the teacher wasn't looking. The filly pointed at it, and motioned for her to open it. Confused, but curious, she picked it up with her hoof and started to unravel it. Before she could finish, it was suddenly snatched away by magic. Horrified, she looked up to see Mrs. Rosemary levitating the note in front of the class.

"Passing notes now? Let's see what is so important that couldn't wait until class was over." Mrs. Rosemary cleared her throat. "'Can you help me with my magic? I can't even get a spark, and I don't want the other students picking on me anymore.'" Mrs. Rosemary looked down at her with an unsympathetic frown. "There is a time and place for such requests Twilight, and class time is not one of them. Also, I would recommend a private tutor for problems like that, not a student."

"But-" Twilight cried before Mrs. Rosemary cut her off.

"That is enough! You will see me after class with you parents. Do I make myself clear?"

With tears in her eyes, Twilight let out a feeble, "Yes Mrs. Rosemary," and stared down at the ground.

As the rest of class went by, she didn't have the drive to pay attention, hanging her head low, as tears slowly dripped down her face.

*~~~~~*

As Celestia finished, she gauged everypony’s reactions, a heavy silence filling the air. Rainbow and Applejack looked as if they were ready to knock sompony's lights out, while Pinkie, Rarity, and Fluttershy looked as they were going to burst into Twilight's room at any moment to hug her and never let go.

"How horrid!" Rarity said in disbelief. "How could such things go unpunished?"

Celestia sighed. "This was some time ago, and it certainly wasn't happening at my facility." She shook her head. "But according to her parents, it wasn't the only time it had happened either. Because of that, she wasn't able to trust anypony that wasn't family. The exception being her foalsitter and I." Celestia glanced towards Twilight's bedroom door. "That was how she was when I took her under my wing. She rarely strayed from the royal library or the classrooms, and if she did, it would be for one of my lessons. I did not think it was healthy for a growing filly, so I let her raise Spike." She looked to Spike with a smile, and he smiled back. "I hoped that she might be more receptive to conversations if she started small, and to some degree, it helped. However, there was one time that I asked her to make friends.

“She had been my student for nearly four months. I simply asked if she could try talking to some of the other classmates before coming to my lesson the next day. The next day, she was only five minutes early to my class, instead of her usual fifteen.” Celestia paused to chuckle for a moment. “Now, even on a regular day, this would have been surprising. I thought when she didn't arrive, she had been too caught up in talking with her new friends, but when I saw the state she was in." Celestia paused and frowned at the memory. "Her eyes were red and teary, and she looked as if she had been crying for quite some time. She looked up at me and said-” The scene played in Celestia’s thoughts 'I-I went out and talked with the other s-students. Does that mean I passed your test?' Celestia shivered slightly at the memory. "Needless to say, she treated it as another assignment. She herself never told me what happened that day, so I asked some students if they had seen anything. From what I gathered, she had been watching a group of students from afar for almost twenty minutes before trying to talk to them, and when she finally did muster the courage, she thought they were making fun of her. Even if it had been a misunderstanding, I've never forgotten what had happened."

"But why did she think they were making fun of her?" Fluttershy asked confused.

"They had asked her if she was lost, thinking that she was visiting another student."

"Wait wait wait,” Rainbow said, waving her hoof. “I thought you sent her here to make some friends."

Celestia sent a glance to Spike, and he looked away. “That was actually Spike’s doing. You see, I only wanted Twilight to oversee the celebration, but I never asked her to make friends. It wasn’t until later that evening during the celebration that Spike sent me the letter explaining what he said in my name.”

“But it all worked out in the end,” Rarity said nervously, glancing over to Spike. “No harm done!”

Celestia nodded. “Now, what progress have you made for possible solutions for changing Twilight back to normal?”

“But she doesn’t actually want-” Rainbow tried to say, but stopped when she heard the sound of Twilight’s door opening. They all turned to see Twilight slowly coming down the steps, sleep still clouding her eyes.

"Hello, My Faithful Student." Celestia said as Twilight stepped off the last stair.

"Hello Princess, hello girls…" Twilight said groggily. It was a few moments before her eyes widened, all traces of sleep vanishing. "P-princess Celestia?!" She stumbled back onto the staircase. "When did you get here?!"

Celestia put a hoof to her chin. "I'd say that I've been here for nearly thirty minutes."

"Thirty minutes! T-that long?" Twilight stuttered, a tad flustered.

Celestia lowered her head. "You don’t seem very happy to see me. Am I no longer welcome?" Celestia said in mock sadness, glancing up at Twilight slightly with a pout.

Twilight's face paled. She rushed forward and tightly hugged Celestia's foreleg. "O-of course you’re still welcome! Why would you ever think that?"

"I wouldn’t dream of it, My Faithful Student," Celestia said with a smile, nuzzling into her embrace. “However,” Celestia said raising her head from the affectionate hug. “I would like to know what I haven’t been informed of your recent transformation."

Twilight hesitated, glancing up at Celestia before looking away. “I-I didn’t want to you to be burdened by having to look for a spell to fix this, or having you keep me under your supervision like you used to.” She looked up a bit ashamed and met Celestia’s understanding gaze. “I remember overhearing that I cut into your schedule a lot.” She all but mumbled, looking down again.

Celestia frowned and put a hoof on Twilight’s head. “That is a reasonable concern, even if it is unnecessary.” Twilight opened her mouth to respond, confusion evident on her face, but Celestia continued. “You have never been a burden to me, nor will you ever be.” Celestia put a hoof to her chin. “An even more important question however,” Celestia said with a smirk. “How was your nap?”

“It was-” Twilight’s face suddenly morphed from blissful to distraught. She turned to Applejack with a childish glare. “You! Why did you let me take a nap? The first few times were on accident, I was just tired!”

Applejack gave a start at being addressed so suddenly, but quickly shook her head to clear it and retort. “Now wait just a minute! Yer the lump of a pony who didn’t want ta getup before noon! Ah had ta carry you here!” Applejack scolded in self-defense.

“That’s my girl,” Rainbow said with a proud smirk.

“Um, girls?”

“I wasn’t thinking straight, that’s not an excuse!” Twilight insisted, turning to Celestia. “Tia! Tell them I-” Twilight froze midsentence, the whole room going silent.

“Did… You just call Princess Celestia-”

“N-no!” Twilight cut off defensively.

“I’m pretty sure you-”

“I don’t know what you're talking about!” Twilight said frantically, before spinning around and scrambling upstairs.

They all turned to Celestia, who was looking at Twilight’s door with a faraway look. After a brief moment of silence of letting what happened sink it, Rarity coughed a bit in her hoof.

“Should we…” Rarity said before trailing away.

“I’ll go talk to her,” Celestia finally said standing up. They all nodded, though Celestia paid no mind. She climbed the stairs slowly before knocking. After she heard a soft, “come in”, she opened the door and looked around the room. She spotted Twilight curled up under her blanket. Celestia smiled at the sight, and walked over to her bedside. At the sound of approaching hooves, Twilight poked her head out to see who it was. When she saw it was her mentor, she immediately jumped up, her blanket flying up in a heap.

“P-princess!” she cried, before the blanket floated down and enveloped her again.

Celestia chuckled, lifting the blanket with her magic and folding it neatly before setting it down behind her. “Twilight. How long has it been since you’ve called me by that name?”

“I’m so sorry, I don’t know what came over me!” Twilight said fretfully. “It’s just… Being this old again, and seeing you, I-”
“Its fine, My Faithful Student,” Celestia said soothingly, taking a seat beside her bed. "I never minded when you were younger, and I don't mind now."

"I know you didn't!" Twilight said accusingly. "In fact, you would give me less work unless I did!"

"You say that if it were a bad thing," Celestia teased. "But that doesn't explain why you became so flustered just now."

"I-" Twilight heard a loud bang come from downstairs, followed by several shrieks of fright. A few seconds later, the door to the bedroom burst open, and a white stallion stepped into the room.

“Alright, where is my little sister?”

*~~~~~*

Author's Note:

Look who updated three days before they said they would! And during finals week too!

... Man my head hurts.

I... didn't like this chapter as much as I thought I would. Or at least, as much as I did when I was first writing it. I bet is shows right? But I'll go back and make things better after finals week. Because these things aren't pulling any punches. But at least they gave me hours to just sit and do nothing. Who doesn't want that right?

Until whenever I finish the next chapter, (which is whenever I set another deadline for myself), have a wonderful "insert time description here"!

Also, for the people asking whether or not it'll update faster... I did it 4 months faster than last time. I'd consider that a win.

Comments ( 84 )

DAMMIT SHINING!

Glad this has continued! :scootangel: Momma Celestia to hte rescue, or maybe aunty? I wasn't sure on the vibe I was getting, some write Tia as a mom and some don't, he :rainbowwild: MOAR! :flutterrage:

I... didn't like this chapter as much as I thought I would. Or at least, as much as I did when I was first writing it. I bet is shows right?

Don't be so hard on your self! I liked this chapter a lot, it was just shorter than I expected. *Hugs*

Heh. MAJOR emphasis on "little", Shining :rainbowwild:

This chapter was good and I like the back story you've created. Hell, I'm glad to see that you're still working on this story.

I'm a tash curious as to why Shining showed up at the end though. Did somepony send him a letter or will it be explained next chapter? Anyways, looking forward to more. Great work. Good luck with all those soul/happiness/creativity sucking tests.

Uh oh. Shinys here.

YEEEES~ Gooooood~ must have more of this delectable delicious desirable treat you offer! :rainbowderp::heart:

Is it wrong that my first thought on reading "white stallion" was "Rule 63 Celestia"? But it didn't make sense why she would be asking for Luna. I think Shining Armor is probably a better interpretation. :derpytongue2:

Great chapter! I really liked it.
Good luck for your finals.

I loved the idea that Spike improved the "make some friends" line of Celestia's letter in episode one. It's very in-character for him and makes alot of sense with my own headcanon for Twilight and Celestia's relationship growing up.

This story has more favorites than it does likes. How does that work?

I want more... Pweeese? :fluttershysad:

HAH.

Nice entrance on Shining's part...

The back story was... Lacking, though.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Pinkie calling Twilight's sleeping moment "cute." So like her. :pinkiesmile:
Oh, man... I never thought I'd see Twilight having such a troubled childhood. I can safely assume that the same thing happened to Sunset Shimmer, only at a far more tragic level. :fluttershysad: Like so:

"Tia." Funny... Usually, Luna would call her that. :rainbowhuh:
Do I hear Shining Armor coming? :raritywink:

3794382 There are people out there - and I'm usually one of them - who want to follow a story, but won't give a thumbs-up or thumbs-down until and unless it's complete.

Not bad, though it is a little rushed, especially towards the end. That last part with Shining Armor came out of nowhere and was so sudden, it was actually quite jarring. That part definitely needs to be rethought. However, I don't know how to advise you on it, as my own stories have exactly the same pacing issues. In fact, your writing style in general bears a very strong resemblance to my own. You even update your stories with the same frequency as me! :rainbowlaugh:

Why do you have such a long, erratic schedule, anyway? Is it a combination of inexcusable laziness, a touch of writer's block, and a short attention span? That's what it is for me and my stories.

Princess's entry:
1. Send letter informing friends of arrival
2. Teleport to front door
3. Knock and wait politely.

Brother's Entry:
1. Teleport directly into sister's house
2. Scare all of sister's friends with sudden arrival
3. Tear down the door to sister's room, demand to know where she is.

Conclusion: Shining Armor is smooth. :rainbowlaugh:

3794867 I bet cadence.

3794398 Yep it's official:ajsleepy:...I know it's going to be a good story if you or Jake the Army Guy are reading it:pinkiehappy:.

Really nice Twi-filly fic ya got here.

How cute.:twilightsmile:
I hope these issues get sorted out.

The idea that Twilight called Celestia "Tia" as a filly is simply beautiful.
I wish I could give this story many many upvotes for that idea alone. :heart:

I don't know why you didn't like this chapter, other then the fact that it didn't get the water works going for most people though I can tell you tried. But it was still an adorable chapter and look forward to Shining's reaction to filly Twilight as well.:pinkiehappy:

3794382 Not sure but I have seen it happen, even on one of my stories.:unsuresweetie:

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That is incredibly simple. Favoriting a story allows you to follow its progress. With this story, it has yet to be completed, thus the larger number of favorites when compared to likes is simple, many people have added it to their favorite list to follow the updates, but are waiting till the end of the story to actually give it a rating.

HEEEERE'S SHINY!

'I-I went out and talked with the other s-students. Does that mean I passed your test?'
This part was so heartbreaking, if I were Celestia I woould have hugged her so hard.:fluttercry:

Also I just found this story, I'd just like to say that Fluttershy's scrapbook would be the cutest thing ever!

i had actually forgotten about this story lol

You know, I gave up on this story a long time ago. I thought it was actually going to just sit on the site and die. But nah, I was wrong, and I'm glad that it updated. Although I'd appreciate more context to the writing, I still found it enjoyable and I'm awaiting the next chapter. :ajsmug:

im favouriting this, please dont let me down with yearly long updates :pinkiesad2:

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I have seen far more hopeless stories get updated after a while. :twilightsmile:

"A nap?" Celestia asked with a trace of an amused smile. "It's been so long since she's taken an actual nap. Does she still hold "The Advanced Theory of Magical Properties"?"

They all stared at her in disbelief before Pinkie recovered first, nodding. "Yup! It's sooooo cute!" she cooed, putter her hooves to her smiling face.

Someone draw this. I would be so happy if someone did.

3793611 lol, great timing as ever Shining
:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

wait for it....
wait for iiiiit~....






NOW!!!!! CUE THE SHENANIGANS, NOW!!!!

3794491
And people like me who favourite for the sake of keeping up with a fic, but never thumps up/down any fic.

Again, loved it!

"As for my guards, I'm sure they'll be here shortly."

Meanwhile, back in Canterlot -
"Sir, what do we do?! The Princess and the Captain just teleported to Ponyville!"
"Celestia's Beard...! Dispatch the first battalion to their location, have the second on standby, and start evacuating civilians to the west! I don't know what we're facing here, but whatever it is, we'll be ready for it!"
*Later*
:trollestia: - I would like to thank you all for participating in this training exercise. I am sure we will all rest easier with that demonstration of the Guard's readiness, which we definitely had planned months ago, and which my student was in no way responsible for. Honest.
:twilightblush:
3794810
As Captain of the Guard, Shiny would be one of the first people to be made aware of Celestia's departure. Judging from his, ah, slight overeaction, I'm guessing the girls were somewhat vague in that letter as to precisely _why_ the Princess herself needed to come attend to Twilight Sparkle.

3795912 oh hi logic


pinkie get the chainsaw:pinkiecrazy:

So is it going to be 4 months or more before the next update?:applecry:

3795912
Yep, you're right about the favorites.:pinkiehappy:
At one time FIMfiction had a "Tracking" feature. This allowed you to follow the progress of a story without having to mark it as a favorite.
For some reason FIMfiction got rid of it for that almost useless "read later" feature.:facehoof:
I'd really like to have that tracking button back, as there are many stories I like to follow that I don't consider a favorite.:applecry:

That was a cute chapter. I hope the next one comes out sooner than a year.

now i bet Luna knew about this because of the dream

and this is a good concept idea and what if twilight tries something with the CMC
:applecry::scootangel::unsuresweetie:

3815292
Seeing each chapter's update date, I don't see any who took a year. I can give you links to fics who really take more than a year if you want.

3817793

I was being sarcastic talking about his authors note that he had last chapter. And that it felt like forever between updates.

But being serious. I like this fic. It's fluffy.

I'm going to give this an honest review.
This story is a little overrated. The plot dies away around the third chapter without any notification. There is practically no conflict after the third chapter as we'll; I mean you could at least have Celestia scare Twilight after she called her Tia. Maybe that right was for Luna and Luna alone, maybe Twilight overheard Luna calling Celestia Tia?
This is a nitpick becouse with this conflict there isn't much conflict to be had. Twilight turning into a filly won't end the world; people read this for the cute scenes and while that isn't bad, it gives the story a fluffy feel.
Thank you for listening to me bitch and I will certainly follow you becouse since I am writing dark horror shit I need to breath and enjoy some cuteness overload.

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And if you think about it Twilight's past here would explain her fear of magic kindergarten in... Lesson Zero? At least I think it was lesson zero, haven't seen that episode in a while. Or a could just be reading too far into it... that's possible too.

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Maybe the twist will be about Twilight having to choose between staying little or not when Equestria may need her grown up. The story isn't finished yet.

Well, the first few chapters really didn't hook me. In fact, it got to the point where I questioned why I was even continuing to read. One thing I disliked in particular was the intermittent speech impediment that only happened when it would be especially cute.

But now things are starting to heat up and get interesting. I still don't know if I like this story, but I'm interested enough to track this so I can find out.

P.S. A month?! I didn't realize it was that long, and I'd expect her friends to put their hooves down about her keeping it secret from Celestia long before then.

When are you posting the next you got me exited and now I need to know

i check this every day
:ajsmug:

when is new chapter!?! :fluttershysad: also, how will twilight get her cutie mark back if when she first got it, it was becaus she had a sudden magic outburst during an exam because of rainbowdashs sonic rainboom the caused her to freak!?! uh oh..... dont take this as mean or personal, i was just saying

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