You seem to have javascript disabled, or your browser is failing to execute it properly. Much of Fimfiction's functionality requires javascript so we suggest you turn it on!

The Marvelous Mare-Do-Well

The world is in chaos and heroes are few and far between. In the city of Baltimare, a young mare is on the run from herself and her life but finds herself in the perfect position to help those in need. Will her gifts bring peace to the besieged city, or doom it?

Chapters (1)

Comments ( 3 )

Viewing 1 - 50 of 3
- Newest First
- Oldest First

Wing

Wing #1 · Nov 13th, 2022 · 1 · ·

I dig it! :D

RaritySimper44

RaritySimper44 #2 · Nov 13th, 2022 · · 3 ·

Could have used pinkies clone instead. Miased opportunity

ramdom_player201

ramdom_player201 #3 · Nov 14th, 2022 · · ·

I enjoyed it.

One continuity error however:

, Fluttershy calmed it down, and then Princess Twilight teleported the beast away with only a thought.

Teleported away.

The sun was now dipping below the horizon, painting the campus in orange and letting long shadows fall across the open area between buildings. There were some important looking ponies gathered around the belltower where the Hydra had fallen and still was, its necks and every mouth tied up with one very long piece of rope. Applejack’s work if Flurry had ever seen it.

'Away' doesn't seem very far.

Other than that, it's a good story so far.
I've always liked alicorn stories.