Trying out writing fiction. This should be fun.
This story is a sequel to Eldritch Surprises
After Twilight found out Pinkie's secret, she decided the next best pony to tell was Applejack. After all, who best to keep her cool under intense stress and surprise than the most down-to-earth earth pony in town? She decides to just come out with it as bluntly as possible, Applejack appreciates bluntness right?
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Yo... Good job, still would've loved to have rainbow be annoying and get a barn to the face courtesy of Twilight but this is also good, and yeah we want more, and even maybe more than just pinkie being an alien
Once again, the lore fits into the show pretty nicely, all of the characters act like they should, Pinkie is dummy THICC, everything is just great. Good job word-smith.
If you want to continue, I would first reccommend adding in more chapters into one story, compacting it. Secondly, there are easy two ways you could progress the story (Both can technically be done at once, or not at all. These are suggestions of a fan, not orders from your mother):
1. Continue having PP show her true self to her friends, whether with support or alone, growing in confidence all the while.
2. You could explore how her body works and what she is, perhaps through some classical friendship problems and town antics, or perhaps through Twilight doing some harmless experiments.
Mmhmm.
At least, it seem mortal wasn't died by expose to her real form. Seeing or listen to her voice wasn't cause them physical harm or drive their mind to madness. Unlike some Lovecraft entity or bible accurate angels or those chaos gods in Warhammer.
YO, this is pretty great! Hope you continue!
Well, that was interesting. I'd love to see more from this version of Pinkie. It seems there is a lot we could learn about what she can do.
One thing, I wish she'd just made a tentacle pop out, or an extra eye appear rather than used a saw to steadily chop off a limb. She is clearly capable of partial transformations, which may be less traumatic. Then again, suppose that's what happens when an alien doesn't fully understand ponies and really doesn't want to show off any of her true self.
Please make a third story!