An attempt at a rhyming Hitchcord story. From Discord's point of view.
Written for the M/M Shipping Contest 2022
Inspired by the illustrated cover.
Artwork by Eqq Scremble
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Cute. I want more of this
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Thank you for liking, much fun it was writing! ;)
Is there a fic where these two actually get shipped? If so how does one find it
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There wasn't much when I searched with the same tags. One of the reasons I wrote it.
But I wouldn't be surprised if one will be written during the shipping contest.
rude. I was enjoying the poetry then that last couplet
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Thanks for the feedback!
Tried to show that there was some awareness, and Discord being happy that he went with it.
But I see that this might have backfired and people would have preferred consistency.
Tried to be funny, guess I'm a dummy :o
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no I approve it was exactly the discordian thing to do it just threw me for a loop well done
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Oh, thank you for the follow-up then. I was unsure about that part myself, so you hit a trigger :D
Cheers
DAMMIT DISCORD! QUIT KICKING THE 4TH WALL!
Now go be gay, both of ya
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Yes
Maybe I don't know enough about rhyming and poetry and meter and etc, but the fact that there's no structure to it here made it difficult to read at points. I kept jumping back to look for what rhymed with the final word of a paragraph, sometimes finding no rhymes, sometimes finding the rhyme was in the middle of the previous sentence instead of the end, or the words don't rhyme super well (missing, resisting; forever, better; come, home?). I fear a rhyming story should flow better than this.
I think this is a cool attempt, though, and a great idea for a ship--given that Discord is immortal there's no (narrative) reason why he can't be "nursed back" to his former self by Hitch with a good amount of chaos. I liked the little details in there that Fluttershy isn't around because "she wanted it so" -- I love loaded sentences like that.
Thanks for writing!
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Thanks for your feedback :)
I'll keep it in mind should I ever try to write something similiar again.
Fascinating fic! I like the creativity on display here. The rhyming scheme seemed inconsistent at times, which I think distracts from the overall impact, but there were times where it was very effective. Nice work!
ah, the wonderful fruits of a rhyming scheme!
with any other character i would assume a typo here but this is definitely fitting for Discord
do love the “butter-yellow” here, evoking the upcoming “Fluttershy” in both color and rhyme
he does know himself too well!
so true
oof, love how much implication is buried in these lines. this could have been an entire story by itself, and yet these two sentences hold all of the impact that thousands of words could. really impressed by this
yessssss
damn does this FlutterCord reprise work amazingly well
ehehe, and of course Discord ends it on a meta note, and also brings up further questions about what it even means for a rhyming in the narration to be diegetic.
just fantastic work on this one. really loved it!
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Thanks for your review and for organizing the event!
Cheers