Lyra has another concert in Canterlot, and this time all her friends are here to see it. But when Princess Luna gets called away, thieves take advantage of her absence to break into the royal library. Their target? A certain artifact of incredible power leftover from one of the greatest spell casters of all time. And when one of their own gets taken as well, can the Elements put a stop to them before yet another ancient evil is released?
A story in the Lunaverse. Additional character tag for Raindrops... wish she had one of her own...
Chapters (8)
NEW LUNAVERSE MADAFADAS.
Also, first. And where does this fit in on the Lunaverse Timeline? I don't want to start reading it if it's past where I'm at right now.
Have homework. will read later.
Can't wait to see where this is going.
Well, this is an interesting start. And...that's all I got. Nothing much has really happened just yet, so we'll have to wait and see where this goes.
Perfect timing, guard.
But good to see Lyra and all her friends. And that dragon... in-teresting.
Nice set up. Really looking forward to learning more about that dragon. And Corona! Actually doing something!
Only problem with the chapter is that you kept spelling Ditzy with an s.
SO FAR AWAAAAY, WE WAIT FOR THE DAAAAY...
*ahem* Sorry.
Interesting, good take on Celstia for all her ego and mania, she seems to have calmed down enough to start acting relatively.... "stable"
Interest, new character, obviously an ancient ally of Celestia, so I look forward to seeing the his troy and his future, however short it might be.
Though I wonder, will Corona just be using him as a distraction while she goes to steal something, or will he be the thief...
I liked Lyras performance and interaction with her friends, I'm just assuming Luna sent, a clone of herself to say hello to Lyra or to watch the show so to not be rude.
Are Raindrops and Trixe awkward because of the "truth is a scourge/kissing thing?"
Anyway this is interesting so I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
1311991 What's that from, it sounds familiar.
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ah TY I thought it was maybe from this
This is pretty good. I think I see where the dragon's name is going. (Solrath->Sol Wrath-> sun's anger/revenge)
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WOOHOO!
TrrrrrrrrrrrrACKING!
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So far away we wait for the day!! For the lives all so wasted and gone!!! We feel the pain of a lifetime lost in a thousand days!!! Through the fire and the flames we carry on!!!! *ahem* Sorry, i had to finish what you started...
Not much to say; It's a pretty solid opening and the dragon seems interesting. I'm hoping this won't end up being 'Where There Is Smoke' with a dragon, but it isn't very far along yet, and I trust you to take it in it's own direction.
Anyway, I like all the call-backs to 'Helping... Hands?' with the backstage part. I'll be keeping an eye on this!
1312885 I liked that animation; wonderfully surreal.
I'm reasonably certain that if Trixie starts whining, these snake-creatures will start stabbing. So hopefully she won't be dumb enough to try and pull a Rarity.
Heh. And I know what used to be in that clear area...
Jeez, it's been nearly a month since the last chapter! I really need to keep better track of all my projects... I'll try and not leave this another month! I promise I'm not that cruel.
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Yes, I though you might like that little touch. Tiny references are what I live for!
....oh those stupid jerk snake things.....
and nice touch, using the Dragonshy problem, only more problematic. Probably all a distraction to get Luna out of Canterlot ultimately.
Hooray update, good chapter all round I liked Trixie not really knowing much about Canterlot and failing as a tour guide, I liked most of the chapter in general actually, though I did notice one error:
I think you meant snakes, sorry
Poor Trixie and Ditsy, hope the others get down there and save them, also cool design for Corona's latest minions.
The minions are Lamia's right? or Naga maybe
Hmmm...still not sure what to make of this one just yet. Still, good chapter, I suppose.
Snake people. Where have I seen snake people before. Betrayal at Krondor?
Not likely. 
Maybe I should get my Monster Manual.
Noooooooo Trixie!
HOLY SMOKES!
Things sure went serious in a heck of a hurry!
1456944 Well Luna thought Corona wasn't coming back nd we know how THAT turned out... she kinda learned from her mistakes I guess?
Something seemed off. Most notably with Luna and Trixie, they didn't feel quite themselves. There where a couple times it almost felt --I don't know-- more like a mane-line fic with Celestia and Twilight. Notably the idea that Trixie didn't get out much (even though she's supposed to be a major extrovert) and spent all that much time in the StarSwirl archives (she prefers to learn magic by observation).
I did like the references to stuff from the real show like the statue garden and dragon smoke. I was quite surprised to see Trixie as the one that goes missing; I knew one of them was going, but she was pretty much second to last on my list of suspects. Still, two chapters in and I'm not at all sure what to actually make of the storyline here. Stuff is happening, but there's a lot of questions hanging in the air, and not really the good kind like in a suspenseful mystery driven story, more like the 'get to the point already because I'm just getting confused/bored' kind.
I don't mean to sound quite so critical. I think there might be something really good here, I just haven't been able to find it yet.
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Honestly, I'm glad to see some negative feedback. I think my ego has swollen a bit from half a year of youtube comments being my only reviews.
But yeah, I'm a bit out of practice with my writing. When I planned out this story, most of my plans were about what happens in the caves and with Luna and Solrath. Part of the huge wait between these two chapters was me realizing that I had no idea HOW to get them where I wanted them. I will freely admit that these were rushed as a result. I haven't felt like there's been a good spot to include any exposition yet, but it's on the way. I swear this will all make sense soon! I just have to move something forward to the next chapter that I was going to wait on for a bit...
By the way, about the Star Swirl bit? I was only trying to imply that Trixie was babbling about anything in the area, and the Star Swirl wing was the closest place that was interesting enough. Again, apologies if my rusty writing didn't make that very clear.
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Actually, RainbowDoubleDash wants me to be vague about it, so take from that what you want. 
Could be, could be...
Hmm, good action. *Punches the sixth prisoner in the snout. hard* Moron...
1451580 I don't; what was in the clear area?
1451689 You've got nothing; some of my stories have been waiting over three months for a new chapter.
1452103 What he said.
1461523 Eeyup.
I guess I dunno.
On one hand, I like the dragonshy problem and the designs of the snake things, but on the other hand, the snake things and the 'cleared area' made me feel like I was missing something, and as Emeral Bookwise pointed out, Trixie feels a bit off.
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Apparently DagaYemar likes it vague, so I'll put it in white text for those who also want to keep it vague:
It was the location of the ice palace.
1490072 ...Oh.
(I need to catch up with the threads again, this is getting ridiculous.)
1453331 The only cartoon snakemen I can think of were fought by He-Man.
I promised I wouldn't make you all wait a month for another chapter, and what do I do? I make you wait a month for a new chapter...
I'm not going to promise that the next one won't be faster, since I apparently can't promise anything, but I am determined to see this trough with more professionalism. I know what I did wrong with the last chapter and I intend to fix Trixie and Luna's personalities, but I think I need to focus on finishing before clean-up...
And now to ruin everything for you by providing...a visual reference for the monsters!
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Behold the dread salamander!
...
Yeah, I know you meant this:
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I am hurt and betrayed! Only another chapter will satisfy!
Um, if that's ok with you that is...
All right new chapter, already eagerly awaiting the next one!
Dapple Cross is kind of a tool, I was desperately hoping Raindrops would either smash something or threaten him to stop being so unpleasant, but seeing secretary, who I'm thourally convinced is more than she lets on (yes i know she said that, but I suspecting it before she said it,
) slap him down was also awesome.
Anyway good writing in that scene, I felt awful for Raindrops trying to dig up the floor to save Trixie, sweet scene and bring back Regal Tomes hah, he just has no luck.
I like the plan to go get the elements and find Trixie, interesting to see the Canterlot caves being brought in.
Heh loved Trixie’s awakening and assuming she had a hangover.
Sorry this sentence is kinda confusing.
Trixies’s observation of the snakes was a little convoluted that could have been because she’s recovering form a concussion though, I still found it tricky to understand in parts.
Loved Trixie’s little “Hi” exchange with the snake.
While Trixie is now Twilight she’s not exactly weak as far as unicorn go, unless you were talking about energy “production” over power then who knows.
I loved that line, Trixie has a really amusing thought process in this fic.
Anyway this was a good solid chapter overall, very entertaining and it helped move the fic along very well, some small part of me is expecting betrayal form within to happen with the salamanders if only cos of how rude the boss is. Anyway as I said very entertaining, looking forward to the next one.
Loved the 'hi' bit. T^hat got a laugh out of me. Good chapter, moved things into the next phase well.
The whole 'Hi' bit was probably my favorite. And poor Raindrops...
Solid chapter with no complaints to be made and a whole lot of stuff I absolutely loved. I'd give specific examples, but that would pretty much just be everything. Seriously, just keep writing like this and I will be
all over the place.
Awesomeness new chapter!
wow Regal actually got a bit of character development here, good scene there.
I like the hinted crystal stuff it gives us some good mystery and something to build on later.
The description of the cave the remaining L!6 found was breathtaking also loved Raidnrops's reaction to it, she's so focussed on saving Trixie
good point about the carts how did they survive... crystal magic?
The description of the "falling crystal" scene could have been written a little better, as in many cases characters names weren't used so I wasn't sure who was talking or what was falling on who.
Wow Lyra was a badass here! also this is how I imagine her bardic spells working, so hooray!
Ooh and Raindrops get's to be badass too I love it!, though pony's likely don't use "arms" but besides that, also instead of "thing" maybe "tracks" could be a good descriptive word.
Loved Bonbons reaction to the elements defence mechanism, seems both in character and totally reasonable, still desperately want to punch that soldier in the face.
Overall good chapter!
I'm thinking that Ditzy is somewhat Clostrophobic which probably makes sense for a pegasis and that Money Peny might be one of Luna's avatars although she seems to be rather low on power.
It's fun that the salamanders are all named after serpentine monsters from the Monster Manual. But we've only met half of them? Are we going to see salamanders named Arbok or something before too long?
And I guess Lyra's Shatter spell must have struck a dis-chord.
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Yay! Someone noticed the little detail about the names! You win a cookie!
But no, you probably won't see the other salamanders. The group that came with Marilith represent half of the whole nest; the rest remained wherever they live when they aren't stealing ancient artifacts of unimaginable power. There's only one other salamander I've named and he's the one carrying Trixie. You'll hear more about him in the next chapter.
Nice action. :D Lyra rocked there, pun intended.
But oh, no, Ditzy! 
1709321 Oh joy, a cookie! I knew reading and memorizing that book would pay off one day!
I look forward to next chapter, then. I love monsters and creatures, and it's always fun to see them "out shopping" as it were.
Ditzy's gone mad?
But anyway, things are certainly heating up quick; fitting what with the story's name.
Not much to add beyond that, I don't think, so I'll just leave this here.
1708105 Yeah, and it's probably worse given how much trouble her strabismus probably gives her when it comes to navigating without running into things in such a tight space. At least when she's out in the open, she has more room to correct herself if she starts going off course.
Headbang sequence commencing in 3... 2... 1...
SO FAR AWAAAAAY WE WAIT FOR THE DAAAAY
FOR THE LIGHT SOURCE SO WASTED AND GOOOOONE
WE FEEL THE PAAAAIN OF A LIFETIME LOST IN A THOUSAND DAYS
THROUGH THE FIRE AND THE FLAMES WE CARRY OOOOOOOOOON
I must say, BonBon makes a pretty good point about how stupid it is to lock the elemental jewels in vault that only Luna can open. The inverse sort of makes sense in the maneverse, but in the Lunaverse where Corona is still an active threat and has in the past proven herself capable of banishing Luna with little effort there is a serious flaw in that strategy.
well shit, a magic stealing Serpent.....lovely.
And the scene with Ditzy and Cheerilee was so cute.
Interesting turn with the Salamander magic.
I had a bit of a hard time who was talking or when a descriptive sentence turned into a thought, still interesting scene with some nice hints of character depth.
I liked Trixie's plan, of making her enemy think what she wants them to think of her and manipulating them, it suits her.
I find myself liking Grick, he's a good subversion of the classic "dumb/friendly" muscle type of character.
I love this line.
and this line
I liked the first part, not so much for the second part, and I liked the third part.
Interesting background with queen Medusa, the hourglass and the villain stealing Trixie's magic, this is really original I like it.
Trixie's horror at the use of her own magic was fairly well done as well.
I do have to wonder why this group put up with the high priestess though, this tends to be a falling point with some villains, where they are so abusive that I can't understand why anyone works for them except out of terror. The High Preisntess hasn't gotten quite that bad yet but she's sort of veering into it a fair bit, sorry.
She is very sinister though, especially in that last scene with Trixie starting to pass out.
Excellent description of the darkness, it felt incredibly oppressive and claustrophobic.
I'm no expert on music but I know what I lie and I loved this!
it was really well done all of it! 
and now we see Rover, I've been waiting for him since I found out he'd show up in this fic
I liked his entrance.
Good ending scenes, Luna;s right everything is ominous. Overall I really liked this chapter and am looking forward to the next one.
Shouldn't the c in nice be drawn out, like the letter s always is for salamanders?
Okay, so Marilith is the bad, stupid kind of boss who punishes messengers for stuff that's in no way their fault. Got it. Also, lovely song. Just not quite a good time for it.