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When Twilight Sparkle mysteriously commits suicide, a few ponies who knew of her were left to uncover everything that could lead up to her sudden death.

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Polak23

Polak23 #1 · Sep 18th, 2022 · 1 · · 1 ·

It’s good? I just don’t know how to rate it. The idea have potential, but the same time… well…
Ok not gonna judge by that, good chapter, well written and idea has potential

Overall chapter is 7,5/10
^{DISCLAIMER: I don’t want you to fell bad because of my rating, I want to help you improve this story :)}

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For something like that I want to give you some advice, since many users just won’t se this line, since it can blend with text. Instead maybe you something like this:

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Sunnysunny77

Sunnysunny77 #2 · Sep 18th, 2022 · 2 · · 1 ·

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Ah, no worries. If I didn't get the idea out right, it is because I am unexperienced writing stuff like this. This is sort of like a writing practice.
And yes, I will use that. I'm used to using "-" for cuts and stuff.

Polak23

Polak23 #3 · Oct 3rd, 2022 · · · 2 ·

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Yea I kinda forgot I had this story in watching… BUT I’M BACK.

Well, this chapter is good, also additional points for writing a song, which is hard… ( I already know something about this.

Also a very creative use of hearts? I don’t think that hearts fit this… kind of story.

I rate this chapter 8/10

I hope this story won’t be abandoned…

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Sunnysunny77 #4 · Oct 8th, 2022 · · · 2 ·

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Hello! Sorry for the late response. It will not, don't worry. I just have a bit of a hyper fixation on Dont Hug Me, I'm Scared at the moment, so it may be hard to. And I will consider maybe using something like "☆☆☆☆☆☆" instead.

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