Queen Ending
Forever a Changeling
by Scootaloo-009, a.k.a. Mechsrule1
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Epilogue
“Rainbow Dash, how are you?” Twilight asked, seeing her friend come into the library.
“Good, good,” Rainbow Dash replied idly. “I’m just stopping by to tell you I had to move.”
“Really? To where?”
“Just the ground. I’m living in a tree by the forest right now.”
“How come? You loved living in the sky.”
“Yeah but this body produces too much changeling goo, you know. My house got too heavy with the stuff so I’m grounded.”
“I wonder why it’s such a difference. You never had an issue before.”
“Well, this body is a queen body,” Rainbow Dash reminded her.
“Does it really make that much of a difference?”
“It just means I absorb more emotions than I can digest so I have to puke up the rest as goo or I’ll get fat. Trust me, I tried not puking but I gave up after just a day when I couldn’t fit through my door.”
“I’m sorry. I could teach you a water summoning spell so you could dissolve it. Or... you could use rain water.”
“I... I kind of feel comfortable this way. It’s weird.”
“Well if you like it,” Twilight said, returning to her work of reshelving books.
“I do need to work on a way to waterproof it somehow so it doesn’t just melt away when it rains.”
“You could try adding a canopy. Or tie down some clouds.”
“That’s a good idea. You should stop by some time. See you.”
Rainbow Dash left the library and headed back home across town. She could have flown but felt like walking today. She couldn’t wait for her friends to visit. She had some great things to share with them
. I’m surprised that they believed what I said, and even more surprised that Recarn didn’t said something. Maybe she wanted this to happen. Recarn wouldn’t have risked her back up body just trying to become a full queen again. She took care of that way ahead of time.
It’s a shame she had to die, but it’s for the hive. What one member wants is irrelevant to the hive as a whole, even the queen. This way they think we’re done. Now the hive can grow without royal involvement. By the time anypony catches on, we’ll be too numerous to stop.
As she neared the edge of town she took a shortcut through an alley behind Sugarcube corner. Suddenly she heard a shuffling noise coming from the dumpster. Perplexed, she went over to it and opened the lid. The orange figure inside jumped in shock.
“Scoots?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“I- I-” Scootaloo tried diving behind a trash bag to avoid being seen but it didn’t work.
“Hey, it’s okay,” Rainbow Dash said sweetly. “I did my fair share too.”
“They always have good stuff here,” Scootaloo said sheepishly. “I found a whole chocolate cake last night.”
“But get out of there,” Rainbow Dash said sternly. Scootaloo quickly hopped out and began walking off. “You can come with me to my house for lunch.”
Scootaloo’s face lit up. “Really?”
“Sure. I’ve moved recently so you can come by anytime now. Come on.”
Scootaloo smiled broadly and quickly followed Rainbow Dash as she left town and made her way to her home.
It was situated on the edge of the Everfree Forest. Scootaloo thought it was a blue tree but as they got closer, she saw it was just covered in blue goop. The house was much larger than the tree could hide so it stuck out everywhere, nearly enveloping some nearby trees as well.
“I’ve done some... redecorating,” Rainbow Dash said as they got closer. “It’s still a work in progress though.”
“Ooo,” Scootaloo said. She was nervous being so close to the Everfree forest, but felt safer knowing Rainbow Dash was nearby.
There was an opening in the base of the tree, made quite smooth by the goo. Scootaloo trotted inside to find the interior was much the same as the cloud home had been. The blue goop looked like melted sugar but wasn’t nearly as sticky. There were some strange lumps and webs of the stuff too, but Scootaloo was just too excited to care.
“Have a seat and I’ll go get us something,” Rainbow Dash said, stretching a wing towards the cloud couch. Scootaloo bounded over and leaped onto it. She sat there, smiling broadly, gazing at everything with wonder.
“Your house is so cool!”
“Fit for a changeling,” Rainbow Dash said, dropping her disguise. “Wait right there, I’ll be right back.”
Rainbow Dash went into the kitchen but ignored the cupboards and shelves. Instead she went to the far wall. She thrust her hooves into the wall and peeled the goo apart like it was a curtain until there was a gap big enough for her to walk through. Only a changeling from her hive would be able to do that. She had to keep this secret for now.
Rainbow Dash entered the small chamber. It would become bigger in time. The floor had three blue ovals on it. Eggs. She smiled when she saw them. It made her happier to feel the next one forming inside her already. Being so close to so many emotional ponies really sped up the process.
. She trotted over to one of the two cocoons on the wall. Only one was currently occupied. She opened it with her hooves and a small nymph fell out and onto the floor. It’s blank white eyes stared vacantly. The only hint it was alive at all came from the subtle breathing.
“Come on,” Rainbow Dash cooed, picking it up gently. “You were supposed to be for one of my friends when you got bigger but... I think Scoots needs this more.” She exited the chamber and put the nymph on the floor. She then carefully closed the opening back up and smoothed the wall so nopony would be able to distinguish it from the wall around it. She couldn’t afford to let anypony know about it. Not yet, anyway.
It wasn’t evil, what she was doing. If anything she was saving the poor filly from a life of starvation and ridicule. This life would be better than any she would have had. Recarn’s mistake had been sticking to dying foals. It made more sense to convert as many as possible. If it was normal, nopony would fight against it.
And she had made a promise to Scootaloo.
Rainbow Dash returned to the living room to find Scootaloo had left the couch. She was sitting on the floor, petting Tank. However she was facing away from the kitchen, so it was okay. She wouldn’t see it coming. Fighting it would only be a waste of time for both of them. Scootaloo wouldn’t be able to outrun her, but it would be unpleasant nonetheless.
“Tank is so cool,” Scootaloo said, hearing Rainbow Dash return, but she didn’t turn around. “I wish we could have pets at the orphanage. I guess it’s for the best. They don’t have enough money to feed us, how could they feed any pets?”
“Don’t worry Scoots,” Rainbow Dash said, standing over the filly, holding the nymph with one hoof. “You won’t have to be hungry any more. I promise.”
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“What do you think?” Rainbow Dash asked, putting down her brick of excitement to show she was listening.
“You want my opinion? You’re the Queen, you can do what you want,” Scootaloo replied, looking up from the hunk of joy she had been nibbling on.
“I value your opinion on this, since it does affect you the most. And my hive is going to be different.”
“Well... Sweetie Belle would be the better choice to convert first. Apple Bloom would be really upset if she couldn’t get her cutie mark.”
“I still got mine,” Rainbow Dash said.
Scootaloo looked surprised. “Oh. Huh. In that case, Apple Bloom should be first.”
“I’d have thought her earth pony pride would be an issue.”
“She doesn’t have as much as Applejack,” Scootaloo replied. “I’ve caught her staring at my wings a few times, and she was the only one of us who wanted to try hang gliding more than once. I’m pretty sure she wishes she was a pegasus.”
“Apple Bloom it is then. It will take a couple days, I don’t have any more nymphs, just some eggs.”
“You can teach me to fly and use magic in the meantime!”
Rainbow Dash shook her head. “That would be a bad idea. You might use it accidentally and expose us.”
“Okay... How come you want to convert my friends? Shouldn’t you do yours first?”
“I figure they’ll need to be older to warm up to the idea,” Rainbow Dash answered. “I was originally going to wait until somepony came around when your body was the right size for them, but then I saw you. I decided you would make a much better hive member.”
Scootaloo smiled broadly.
“Woah! It’s getting late. You should get back to the orphanage before anypony gets suspicious.”
“Aww... I really have to go back?” Scootaloo whined.
“For a little while. I’ll work on getting things formalized so you can live here all the time, but we can’t do it right away.”
“Okay...”
“Hey, before you leave, don’t forget to disguise yourself.”
“Oops. I almost forgot.” Scootaloo scrunched up her face in concentration. “Visualize, focus, then-” Scootaloo burst into blue flames. In a flash, her black body was replaced with its normal orange coated, purple maned form. “How do I look?”
“Perfect. Now run along.”
“Bye, Queen Dash,” Scootaloo said, galloping out the door.
“Queen Dash...” Rainbow Dash repeated, half chuckling. “I like it.”
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So the two ending choices here is having dash be a nice adoptive sister to Scootaloo, or a soon-to-be tyrant who likely plans to take over equestria...
yea i kinda prefer the first choice IF you wanted to make a sequel.
damn this is like bioshock the endings are like night and day
I dunno. I prefer a third option, where Dash sets up a service to give terminally ill/no other way to save 'em ponies with a chance to be converted, instead of going full megalomania. Though a lot of the other quirks are fun.
This sets it up for a really interesting sequel. Still like the other one more. This one sort of feels like Sarah Kerrigan. I'm not sure why but Dash being corrupted sort of makes me feel really sad. It's almost like a fallen angel
1976635 I second this motion
First ending was sweet, if you do continue to the story, it gets my vote.
Unless, as stated
, then I'm all for the Queen Dash path.
1976659
As do I
I didn't really get the inner monologue about Recarn. What didn't she say? What did she take care of ahead of time? What was that about not risking her backup body?
The interesting thing here is that Queen Ovi would probably kill or expose Queen Rainbow Dash if she figured out what was going on. The other thing would be just how much influence she has over her drones. I mean she managed to resist Recarn. Twilight or Applejack might be strong willed enough not to go along with the plans. Although I could see a horror sequence where Applejack awoke to find out Big Mac, Granny Smith, and Apple Bloom were all changelings...
make a sequel for both endings, this is a VERY good story and I don't want it to end. Also, for this chapter's sequel, make it revolve around getting dash "back" for max feels, both good and bad.
Dash is loyal to her friends and in that sense the first ending makes the most sense however if the second ending were different in that Rainbow was actually there as a queen willing to change those that sought it or wished to live a better life then that would be better. though I wanna see what you do with the Queen of the hive that holds the Bordeaux or house for unrequited love.
1976770
That's the second time a line has failed to transfer. Weird.
1976738 She's saying Queen Recarn already fertilized the body before Dash even took it. That way it was already ready for her to get started when she transferred.
I like the first ending better. The second one I just don't see happening, her being the Element of Loyalty and what not
I really prefer this ending, although I wonder what Dash meant by 'too numerous to stop'. Stop from doing what, exactly? What is she planning..?
I like!
... Well **ck. I love THIS ending too! I don't know which one to vote for a canon ending! This one seems like it would give more options to explore, but the first one could be more D'aww inducing... Okay, I take back my comment on the previous ending. I wanna see THIS one continue. XD
This is the ending i like :3
1976635
I triple this motion.
Both endings are good, but as others said their night and day. You need more grey.
I say She should still adhere to her element and be loyal to Equestia, but being in the body of a queen and its different hormones can not be simply written off as a non-issue.
I mean, granted this is all high fantasy where you have pink clouds raining chocolate milk, but still. Just a smidgin of believability should tell you that a queen's biology will not denied, but she can still temper it to serve ponykind rather than just going supervillain. I mean, you already have two good hives in the story, why can't Dash make a third?
And there's the downer ending. Damn. Can't say I didn't see it coming: A lot of other "X is/becomes a changeling" have an ending like this.
If there is a sequel, I would support the "Pony Ending" as canon. I enjoyed this story because it WASN'T like most of the "X is/becomes a changeling" where the pony that is/becomes a changeling loses their goddamn mind and effectively turns on their friends, family, and neighbors, transforming and brainwashing them into becoming their happy little slaves. I mean, ugh, you can't get much more of a downer ending than that. Also, it is so overdone by this point that the shock/horror aspect is pretty much nullified.
I felt that the "Pony Ending" fit the rest of the story much better. It wasn't completely grimderp, it was lighter and more hopeful (but not excessively so), much like the rest of the story. It kept true to what I felt was the overall message of the story (Dash is still herself, even though she is a changeling), as well as the events of the story (Rainbow Dash's personality, especially her loyalty to her friends has been shown to be stronger than her changeling instincts). Finally, I felt that it was a much more fresh and original ending than the "Queen Ending", since as I have already pointed out virtually every other "X is a changeling" fic uses some variant of "Queen Ending". Overall, I felt that the "Pony Ending" was a much better ending to this story, and I am glad that you yourself have indicated that you agree.
In other news, the Recarn execution happened anyway even in this ending. Still don't understand that, but eh. I guess I am getting kinda numb to everyone portraying Celestia as significantly more ruthless than she is in the show.
Finally, I am going to have to support Richardson's third option. It is hard to believe that Celestia cannot see the potentially benefit to her citizens such a situation provides. However, some of her dialogue in the previous (not other ending) chapter indicates that she seems to think preventing her ponies from dying is somehow a bad thing, so I suppose it makes sense that she is blind to such an option.
1977045
So she remains loyal to her newfound hive, AND Equestria. Don't deny her queenly instincts and body, but instead of using her power to conquer, use it to save those that cannot be saved. Become a ruler of those with a second chance at life, the formerly terminally ill, the broken beyond repair, all those that nothing else can heal. While they provide service in recompense for their salvation, have it neither be burdensome nor treasonous to the crowns.
And the hilarity of Dash trying to live her life while running a hive of the second-chancers would be hilarious.
"PINKIE! Could you try to be a little less... you know, ultra-super-unstoppable happy around me. I feed on joy, you know, you're making me fat and I can't get rid of it fast enough!" *Sloshes her gut*
"Whoops, sorry. I thought you were in Canterlot overseeing that public works project." *Calms down*
1976633 Couldn't agree more.
1976635 You... have a decent idea.
And honestly? Still like the Pony Ending. This is rather epic though, in a dark kinda way.
Hmmm... Dash is definitely being seduced by the Dark side on this ending. I don't know how long she'd be able to keep using the Element of Loyalty with this one, and I certainly don't think that the full Elements of Harmony would be active for too long if she actually goes through with her plan to hit all her friends with nymphs. (Unless she plans on putting all of them in queen nymphs, then it might still give them access to the power of the Elements.) In a lot of ways, this feels a lot like what happened when Wanderer D gave us Twilight in The Changeling Queen. I'd like to think that her friends would be able to pull her out of this particular spiral of events, but it would be a really interesting trial to write about. If she could pull herself out of this mindset, I think that she'd do better working with Celestia as an emergency pony medical service. It would give her Hive safety, and a sure growth curve. Likely, she'd even still have a decent shot at getting her friends into the Hive, just with a longer wait time involved.
(Actually, with this version, I suspect that Dash doesn't have all that much time left before Twilight gets into a research mode and starts looking into the actual capabilities of a Queen-form changeling. I know I wouldn't want to get in the way of a research-obscessed Twilight Sparkle.
)
In any case, I'll say this one also gets a seal and a moustache.
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Pony ending is best ending.
Both endings allow for a sequel actually. You could even have her be a full blown queen in both of them. Say you went with ending one. If Rainbow Dash were to eventually get married to a pony who turned out to be a changeling she would become a queen. Either way this is a good story. Since you don't seem to plan on making a sequel but said someone else could, if that happens could you post a link?
1976803
From you, not some other writer. I will make anypony else who tries to write a sequel to this ending go to sleep, mkay? 
I want a sequel for this ending
i would personally like this option for a sequel idk why, possibly cause i just read a story about scoots getting adopted and such while i do love that idea alot i find a lack of tyranny stories ^^ could be fun ^^.
1976635
Quadrupled.
I would love to see how a sane Dash deals with the new issues of being a queen.
1977076
Exactly
Pony ending if you want a upbeat sequel, this one if you want a dark sequel... or no sequel, it's up to you really
Definitly liking the pony ending more. Queen ending feels too much like http://www.fimfiction.net/story/35442/the-changeling-queen while also being a complete shift in tone and theme of the story (and kinda coming out of almost nowhere)
1976635 Quintupled.
OOOH! I know! Make three sequels, and put them in one story, and alternate between chapters! Brilliant, I say, brilliant!
Seriously, though, I know you expressed your reasons for not planning a sequel, and I respect that. But if you change your mind, go with what you want, not what commenters say.
1977717 That was one idea I had, but I really don't have the time. I'm finishing up my degree, I have two other stories, a tumblr, among other things to do.
Great story, but the ending in general felt a bit rushed. And both ending chapters were a little weird... either way, Scoots was ok with dying. Kinda strange.
1977733 No one has the time. Sometimes I wish the world had a pause button, but then I realize that I wouldn't be able to do anything while I'm frozen.
1977810 My thoughts as well.
I like how you explored two options with the story's conclusion. I prefer the Pony ending, but the Queen ending does have more potential for a continuation. However, before that happens, I recommend you go back and refine what you've already written. The story its self and the concept is very good, but the grammar and sentence structure you use leave something to be desired. Try fleshing out the story a bit more with descriptive imagery and be sure to catch and correct those little details. There are groups on this site dedicated to proofreading and feedback, so you should be able to find lots of help.
Again, good story. I enjoyed it. All it needs is a little polishing.
My Rainbow Dash doesn't want to have foals. Not a lie.
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This ending was as OOC for Dash as executing Recarn was for Celestia. I mean, if Recarn had been executed for sorta-killing one of the Element Holders, that would be one thing. However, apparently in this fic, it is a vile sin to give the terminally ill a chance to live out their lives in full in a new meat sac. My vote, Pony Ending RD on the run from Celestia, because she discovers she isn't a "Proto"-Queen after all, and if the Princess finds out, she'd be marked for death.
...yes, I want to punch Celestia in the face, why do you ask?
I mean, I agree that Recarn had to die, but my reasons are that her sins must be paid for. Celestia's reasons means that RD and any other hidden proto-Queen who becomes a Queen in full will be hunted down regardless of how benign they might be.
Yeah, ponies use the term 'foals' to mean children in general the same way they ponify everything else. Therefor that distinction is invalid and thus you lied to us in the comments about the foals thing.
Uncool man, uncool.
I vote pony ending. On sequel talk ( even though it isn't going to happen as far as I know ) Dash being revealed to be egg laying capable and having turned Scoots and having to go on the run from Celestia while trying to clear her name and possibly running into ponies she decides to convert for selfless reasons along the way sounds like a nice story to me. Maybe throw a Celestia looks at all changlings questioningly because of Dash's actions and having to prove her entire race capable of peaceful co-existance while dealing with Chrysalis and- maybe I'm going a little far here XD
Loved the story, forever favorited and liked.
I liked both endings, but I think the best option for a sequel would be the queen ending. The only direction the pony ending could go is something along the line of new-life for ponies involved in tragic accidents or such, because I can't imagine Celestia being tolerant of Dash breaking her promise for any other reason. Getting Celestia as well as the other ponies to accept this would have to be the conflict in the plot. I mean it could work for a kind lighthearted story, but there's no real conflict unless you go along the lines of PeepPony's suggestion. The queen ending I believe has more room for something interesting, but I'm torn on seeing the conclusion to it being someone needing to stop a corrupted Dash from taking over Equestria, before she converts all her friends and such. That's a bit grim.
Scootalove/acceptance story, or grimdark tyrant-dash? I think with enough effort, you could meet in the middle of both endings, and make a story about Dash's struggle to fight against the instincts displayed in the queen ending. Given only those two options though, I'd say second ending.
More like this end. I love DashScoot adopt, too, but one-of-m6-is-a-changeling-queen I love much more. Great story.
I want a sequel based off the Queen Ending.
And i want the author to link it when he can.
1979413
I fell Celestia will be disappointed, but RainbowDash have a point in one think, if ponies will become changelings in big numbers, it will be something ponies will be unable to take action again, I mean, what would Celestia do, kill or imprison 6 element bearers making Equestria defenceless, banish half of Equestria population for doing nothing wrong, start a house war, it is not like banishing Chrysalis Changeling's what were outsiders, it would be like striking again her own subject's.
1979043
Well, Celestia would have hard time to strike again her own subjects, she may be disappointed in RainbowDash, but striking again her will start house war and take out elements of harmony, imprisoning others from mane 6 would be cruel since they did nothing wrong, and striking again her own subject's what were turned into changeling's is not something Celestia and Luna would do lightly, I think her best option would be trying to make peace and ask RainbowDash to cease her action, after all there must be balance between changelings and ponies they feed on, RainbowDash can not turn more then half of Equestria into changeling's because there would be no love and emotions to feed on.
As for alliance, I am sure Chrysalis would be unable to take any action again Equestria since RainbowDash Hive will sniff them out and beat the crap out of them.
The only question is, will ponies accept changeling's into they society or will they start house war themselves, acting like ponies turn into changeling's are no better then zombies, and how will Shinning Armor interact with his sister, he had very hard time to get use to RainbowDash being on his side, after Twilight will be turned into changeling, he will want to kill RainbowDash for sure, and how he will coexist with Twilight as changeling with his chalenging-fobia
1979021
Now so? Rainbow Dash doesn't want to have her own foal but is open to raising one.
Sequel!
Ok, this is the ending that I call Canon, in my mind.
If you were ever to do a sequel, (Which you said you wouldn't) You should use THIS ending. Or make a non canon sequel... I guess.
I would have to say that I would consider a third option: "Queen" Dash, but she goes on much like Recarn did, only using it to save dying foals. I always thought that had a decent ring to it, giving the very young a second chance that all too many don't get. Maybe do it in secret, since she lied to Celestia, but otherwise her hive keeps going on, lives are saved—sorta—and maybe a few ponies are let in on the secret to help keep it.
Dunno, just an option I'd sooner consider than "Dash goes conquistador". Otherwise, I'd prefer the "pony" ending.
1979043 I agree with you
If anypony makes a sequel tell meeeeee