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I'm just a sad lonely brony.

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Secret Lore has always dreamed of being able to fly, and ever since he saw Twilights magic explosion at her entrance exam, as a teenager he has dreamed of doing magic as well. But he is just an earthpony and earthponies are supposed to use their hooves, not their “thinking thing” as his father used to say.
Yet Secret has only one dream, to study alicorn in all its form, and to unlock its secrets.

And alicorn as we all know is a substance of crystallized magic first, the name of a unicorns horn that is made of that substance second, and the name of a unicorn with wings third (just so there is no confusion).

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The story has a fine plot line and definitely deserves more than just my thumbs up, but there were a good amount of grammatical errors in the writing and the end just did not finish it for me. If you write more of this I would be happy to edit it the best I can.

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If you would like be free to send me a proffread version of the story to my email (you can see it on my user page)

Also what do you think was missing from the ending?

The ending just makes me to curious about what happens to Secret Lore after he is "released" to his fathers custody. I will try to proofread it though. BE prepared to laugh at my attempt.

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Well I thought I had made it obvious that his father needed somepony to carry bricks and that Secret hated that. In fact he hates all manual labour, he is a scholar. And the idea was that this was a worse fate then merely being locked up.

If you don't want to write a sequel, don't let me pressure you into it, but his cutie mark is researching alicorns, yet he never got past thinking and one failed attempt. That doesn't seem cutie mark worthy, that seems like it was just a small thing to fill time one day.

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No his cutiemark is researching alicorn.
Alicorn is a word of many meanings. It can mean a winged unicorn, but it primarily refers to the HORN of a unicorn and the SUBSTANCE it is made of. link
Basically alicorn is crystallised magic, and he has used his entire life studying it. He just thought, (and I really thought that I had already written this quite explicitly in the story), that the only way to move his research forward was to examine the most magically pure beings in equestria, the winged unicorn princesses that also occasionally are called "alicorn".

His dream of unlocking its secrets is to make every pony an alicorn so there won't be any more discrimination and inequality. Of course no pony understands.

Sorry, I did not know about the alicorn bit, and I apologize for that, but cutie marks have been shown in the show to be something that the pony does his/her entire life, but if he is forced to work with stone the entire day, then he wont have time to research alicorn or anything else because he will be too tired, or not have enough time.

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Exactly that's what makes it such a cruel an unusual punishment. But didn't I already made that clear in the story, with him having gone to the Everfree Forest and all these other places.

But anyway, I did this story must of all to get it off my back. If you haven't guessed it yet, this is actually a self insert character story. My name actually means "Secret Lore" if you translate it to English.

Wait. Is his cutie mark Led Zeppelin's drummer John Bonham's special symbol? That's kinda cool.

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If that is so, it is merely a coincidence, Secret have no music sense and wish he could dance half as good as Twilight

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I am glad you like my story, not many people do, and I think that if this rocker do have such a tattoo it is because he subscribe to the same ideals that Secret Lore do. But trust me Secret do not rock.

Anyway, I am working on making Princess Rainbow finished and I have for a while but I was struck by inspiration the other day and is now working on a story called "Ataxia" It is about :twilightblush: receiving a strange pink letter from :trollestia: by mistake. She can't open it, despite her best effort, but it is addressed to somepony called "Ataxia"

And you know what is really strange, despite the fact that Twilight knows that there is no pony in Ponyville called Ataxia? It is that the Encyclopaedia Equestria has this strenge entrence that mentions an Ataxia:

" Lords of Chaos
Once before the peaceful reign of the Royal pony sisters, the land that is today known as Equestria was ruled by three terrible gods of old known as draconequus. Discord lord of Disharmony and his twin daughters, Ataxia lady of Mischief and *Blank* lady of Misery.

1533350 That sounds epic. I look forward to it.

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Oh and the address on the scroll leads them (:moustache: and :twilightoops:) to a really creepy house, it looks like it was made by an evil witch with the purpose of luring small foals in it so she could stuff them in the oven and gobble them up, a full scale gingerbread house. Just look at it, doesn't it just screen "evil".

Twilight informs Spike that there is no such thing as witches, and then treatens to turn him into a newt if he keeps pestering her about it:pinkiehappy:

hey look i upvoted your story just because of the oc

also derp :derpyderp1:

nice job scootoloo

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