Now that My Little Pony: Legends of old and new is over, you might be thinking “Well how did the mane 6 meet Midnight?” Or “What happened before all this? How did it start?” Well prepare to have your questions answered.
This is the story of how the mane 6 and many of their allies overcame their greatest threat and became stronger than ever. This is the story.. of how Midnight changed their lives forever. For better and worse..
This story contains my ships and once again, If I don’t get their personalities right and if I make any grammar errors, PLEASE let me know. Now enjoy
Chapters (37)
Friendship is magic
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That, it is
I cannot wait to see how this plays out, and what the evil trio has in mind ;)
Although just an advice, but maybe make a new paragraph for every time a character speaks? Because its really hard to keep track on what they are saying because sentences like this is really difficult to read and go along with what they are saying. Something like:
“Now, all of you, fire your magic at the skull at the top of my throne.” The voice says and they all use their magic on the same skull that they saw outside this place and it slowly starts to glow until it releases magic of it’s own which slowly forms into a shadow of who they assume was talking to them.
It was an alicorn.. but evil and scary looking. Purple eyes, black and purple mane, sharp teeth, huge wings, long horn and ancient looking armor.
“I’m guessing this isn’t what you were expecting?” She asks and they all look at each other before shaking their heads and she chuckles.
“I am Midnight Starkiller. The first natural-born alicorn of Equestria.” She says and Cozy Glow realizes something and points it out.
This would be a lot easier to read in my opinion, but how you write this story is up to you, and its ok to make mistakes in writing. Take it from me, I make a lot of mistakes... (Heck, I might make some grammar mistakes just by making this comment)
But I am still looking forward for what's ahead :D
-Catpaw616
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Thanks, glad you like it and thanks for sharing your opinion, I’ll try to work on making it easier to read
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No problem, and if you need any help with writing, you can look at the writing guide.
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So how is it now? Is that better?
So which story should I start reading first? This one or My Little Pony: Legends of Old and New?
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Whichever one you want, My Little Pony: Legends of old and new is finished, so I’d start there but this is supposed to be the prequel
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And I’ll be honest, I should’ve done this one first
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A lot better. Sorry if I had not responded
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It’s fine
How many slice of life elements does this story have?
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No idea whatsoever, I’m just making them up as I go
Great story onto the next one
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Thanks and indeed