You have my attention, mellonin.

I've been summoned to this fic!!

Yes yes and yes

Do it I'm right here do it kill me. Stick around. I see you. Go get to the chopper. No leave it it didn't kill you cuz you weren't armed there's no sport in it.

Love this story please keep going

I like where this is heading, however I noticed he didn't get rid of the evidence of the renegade yautja's corpse and gear to make sure their technology and the body doesn't fall into the wrong hands.

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I just fixed that for you. It's near the end of the chapter. I used the blue liquid that decomposes stuff which was used in AVP Requiem.

Wow! More!!!!

Seems interresting so far and I am currios where this takes us

Please keep going with this story it's very good

Okay. Finished first chapter here. Do have a some thoughts.

I was confused for a little while about the name of the species and the names of the individuals, but I eventually caught on. Found many run-on sentences where there could have been a period instead of a comma, but that's okay. Many fics on this site likely have similar standards so I'm not too put off by that too much. Just something to get used to. The most important thing is if the story is understandable and entertaining. Neither category succeeds to throw me off in this regard, at least not yet.

At first, I thought the character Bad Blood was out of character for his species, but then you later explained why he was out of character by being a dishonorable criminal so good on you for covering that plot hole and doing it fairly quickly. 👍Not every story needs and antagonist, but if you're going to do it, it needs to further the story and this one did it briefly but well enough. In fact, it was so brief, I'm not even sure he really needed a name unless he somehow comes back into the plot later on. perhaps his Bad Blood tittle could have served this chapter well enough.

Both of the tubes hissed and leaked air as they were removed from the mask. The creature then placed it's reptilian hands on both sides of the mask, gently curling its fingers over it.

I like this imagery. Standard fanfare for Preditor franchise as long as it is done in the right way. Based on what I can gleam from the movies, this species only removes their helmets for two reasons. One; the helmet is damaged and is therefore more a liability rather than an asset. Two; the warrior they are facing has earned the hunters respect. Revealing their face is a sign to show the pray that the hunter now regards the pray as an equal. Bascially a fellow hunter in their own right. if the helmet isn't damaged, they might put it back on after this reveal. After all, it's still useful in several ways until its not.

Another thing I thought is this chapter is very short, but again, that might be average on this website and it even seems generally encouraged, especially for first chapter. Bite size to try to tempt the hook in more easily. If it is palitiable enough, then it's on to the next chapter for the reader should they have the time and inclination.

Full disclosure: Never read the Anon-A-Miss story and didn't really want to because it felt really badly out of character for many of the characters and severely out of theme for the spirit of the show. Beyond that, just generally didn't care for dark fiction in that depressing limelight but I can set that aside for now. Seems to me this story will also set that aside very quickly too. I even think there is a chance the rest of the main cast won't even be mentioned anymore as the story shifts focus on the aliens and Sunset's participation in it.

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Thanks for reading the first chapter. Feel free to read the rest and comment at some point.

The main cast does get mentioned many chapters in.

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In the movie Predators, the humans fight an entire party of bad bloods.

The Yautja,of Hish if you prefer, are more than hunters, they're also warriors. When they hunt, they only kill worthy prey that is capable of fighting back. An honorable Predator will not claim a trophy from a mortally wounded being they themselves did not mortally wound(though they might mercy kill a person or creature that is mortally wounded from poison or a trap) and they won't claim a trophy from something they did not kill honorably(the City Hunter in Predator 2 strayed a little close to bad blood when he killed the back alley voodoo priest). There's only 1 dishonor greater than being a bad blood, revealing yourself and the secrets of the Yautja in large to a much less advanced species, usually by allowing your tech to fall to fall into their hands while you're still alive.

At least a bad blood will be killed quickly. Those who have revealed the secrets of the Yautja to a less advanced society are denied a quick death, cast out from their clan and Yaitja society as a whole, and exiled on a planet full of dangerous predatory creatures with nothing more than their combi-stick or wrist blades.