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person who is normal about twilight sparkle

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Magic isn’t real. Twilight Sparkle abandoned that fantasy in her childhood, along with nonsense like pony princesses and myths of a monster in the moon. The only thing worth believing in is that which can be proved—scientifically, of course.

But then a series of un-scientific phenomena starts happening at Canterlot High. The magic-obsessed transfer student won’t leave her alone, a vivid nightmare haunts her dreams with increasing intensity, and her benevolent mentor-slash-principal is clearly hiding something big. Everywhere she turns there’s talk and sight of magic; rumours of a thousand-year old prophecy and a monster returning to seek revenge. And worst of all? Twilight finds herself almost willing to believe it.

Almost. Good thing she’s smart enough not to, right?


An EQG-adjacent retelling of the season one opener. Sciset. Now with an animated trailer. Art by me!

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 324 )

I had the old one on my read later list untill it got canceled.
Looking forward to seeing what you do with this.

ok, I came to this platform not long ago and I had found the original story and despite being canceled I read it because it looked very interesting and left me wanting more


and now they are doing it again!!!! It makes me soooo happy, and I will say that this version did hook me a little more (although I will moiss a little the differences between names and appearances, but I understand the change) and I can't wait for what happens next!!!:pinkiehappy:


I wonder what the book replied..:trixieshiftright:

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Welcome! Thanks so much for commenting; I'm glad that you liked the original enough to stick around for the new version :twilightsmile:

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You're welcome, the original story (along with this one) is a very interesting concept (and fun to read) that has left me very interested and paying attention to it (I read it until today because I wanted to wait at least two chapters but I can't stand it) and for Someone who reads more than eight stories at a time because they can't keep their attention on just one is quite an achievement.

Why is it that all sports teachers are morons and assholes?
Probably because they are too dumb and unliked to qualify for anything else.
Something like that happened at my school as well, when i still went there.
Not my class, but our parallel class which we usually shared the sporting stuff with.
And then the idiot tried to shake me into participating as well a year later.
I punched him and he ran straight for the principal to tattle on me, appearantly
forgetting that he himself was on thin ice already. I showed the bruise in the form
of his hand on my arm and he was gone the next day.

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Ah, I'm sorry that happened! Glad it worked out for you at least. But yeah, it seems like it's a universal experience that gym teachers are... less than stellar, let's say :twilightsheepish:

Thanks for dropping a comment!

aaaah, gym teachers, how not to hate them? last year he put the whole class running in reverse wearing face masks relentlessly, it was not a pretty class.

Leaving aside that gym teachers are universal idiots, the chapter was incredible, I really thought that Twilight was going to faint, also she seems quite interested in sunset...:ajsmug:

i wonder why the book seems to meet twilight and where i found the sunset book :trixieshiftright:

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Ahh your teacher sounds awful :fluttershysad: Hope you don't have to take that class very long. And I'm glad you liked the chapter! It was a fun one to write ^^

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well, after every fourth year we denounced him (for that and other things) the director called him into his office and all the representatives lost respect for him, I think we won't see him for a while.

and yes, i guess it was fun writing this chapter

Woah this chapter is awesome, Twilight having sick nightmares for awhile is super intriguing and I wonder what it means for the future. Excited for the next chapter!

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im glad you liked it! thanks so much for commenting, i hope you look forward to what's coming next :twilightsmile:

Interesting. Read the initial version of this a while back and, while I remember enjoying it, I also remember the pacing being far too fast - there was barely time to get accustomed to how things were before getting shoved face-first into the ninth circle of crazy.

This seems a bit more of a slow burn, focusing on the buildup and, in my opinion, all the better for it. Hoping it continues like this for a bit - focusing on the development of characters and bonds while keeping enough mystery that the payoff has impact. Definitely going to be watching this one.

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omg thanks for sticking with me so long haha, im definitely much happier with how the rewrite has turned out and i hope that you enjoy it as well!

Jeez Luna, calm the heck down she's your family too!

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haha, i wonder… :raritywink:

thanks for commenting!

This was a good start. I liked the mental asides. Let's see where this goes.

Sometimes it's so hard to say the right thing. Also, love the artwork.

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Thank you! The drawings are the fun part of chapters haha, I’m glad you like them ^^

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wow, thanks for such a detailed reaction! I hope you’re enjoying the story ^^

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ah, the “on her person” is actually correct! it’s not the most common phrase ill admit though haha. and yeah, no spike - hard to justify a talking dog when twilight’s so anti-magic xd

thanks again for the comment!

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wow, thanks for another great comment! to address a few things, i believe it’s alright to have a lowercase after a trailing ellipse in this case, since the sentence without it would be “And guilt?” :twilightsmile: As for the mask part, it’s more of a metaphorical expression. Sunset can clearly tell that Celestia’s hiding something and putting up an icy “mask” over her emotions, if that makes sense. but it’s good to know if that wasn’t coming across clearly!

again, thanks so much for commenting, and i hope you’re enjoying the story ^^

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THAT WAS SO COOL!!!
THE WAY YOU NIGHTMARE TOYED WITH THEM
THE REASONS THE MAIN 5 STAYED BACK
SUNSET USING A CURTAIN ROD TO PLAY WHACK A MOLE WITH NIGHTMARE
AND YOU ALSO BROUGHT UP THE ETYMOLOGY OF THEIR NAMES
ITS SO FREAKING FANTASTIC
I ABSOLUTELY LOVE YOUR WRITING AND ART

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ahhh im so happy you liked it! thank you very much, it really made my evening to see such an enthusiastic comment :twilightsmile:

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whoops, thanks for catching that typo!

and yea, with this chapter, things start to kick off - glad to have you comment again, really appreciate it :twilightsmile:

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Holy hell! I was not expecting that to escalate so quickly. Stabbed through the chest. Yeesh, we are mean to Sunny sometimes.

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she’s such a fun character, it’s hard not to be a liiiittle mean :twilightsheepish:

thanks for commenting!

Your art is phenomenal, and the quality of your writing certainly matches. I'm absolutely enthralled by this story and am very eager to see where it goes from here!

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your comment is so nice omg, thank you so much!! i'm working very hard on this project, so please look forward to the rest of the story ^^

Good stuff! I like how AJ's element is first. It's a nice parallel to the first two eps of the series itself. Very excited to see how they all get through this.

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