Alexandre Viator had just gotten home when he got a call from his mentor to help to assemble.
What started as a simple favor turned into a an adventure both familiar and different.
Now Alex has to deal with anthro ponies as well as an awkward lavender librarian as they and her friends and assistant go on adventures and learn about friendship ... and more
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OK, I'll give this one a shot.
Let's see where you're going to take us.
Monk
Is this a squeal?
No. An AU where Alex arrives just before Nightmare Moon's return and Luna's purification.
I never understood why people assume that the princesses do everything. Weddings, funerals, brain surgery, I seriously doubt they really would. This really is a strangely common belief in fimfiction. Of course, being that Twilight is minor nobility, it can be passed off in this instance. Cadence would most likely be asked to preside over the wedding of a minor noble. But really the idea that the princesses run around doing things for the average joe, always felt silly to me.
I do warn the Author to try to keep in mind what the character shouldn't know. You have him telling the girls the steps to take in setting up the herd, when he really shouldn't know that. He is an outsider after all. But don't worry, it's a mistake we all make. I have to rewrite a section of my next chapter because since it takes place pre episode one, Celestia wouldn't recognize Butterscotch as Fluttershy, since at the time, Celestia hadn't met Flutters yet. So my entire second half has to be rewritten. Sometimes its a pain to keep all this stuff straight.
This is a fun story and Im looking forward to more.
Monk
It should be noted that Twilight is still a unicorn at this point in the story.
Also he had the in formation a thestral his age would have magically given to him. Which includes the steps of forming a herd.
Oh, my god.
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I prefer the anime version. It looks like an animal.
Alex was extrapolating what he knew to the new reality he was in. And taking a wild guess.
A few misspellings and grammar errors, but still able to be read. Consider me intrigued by this story so far.
Oh what in the fuck, why? Are you trying to get banned, because that shit is how you get banned. Yeah had I ain't sticking with this story, fuck that. I could forgive the atrocious grammar somewhat, but this made me lose all semblance of continuing.
NSFW images are not permitted anywhere on Fimfiction. No exceptions. You absolutely cannot have a full-nude picture in the middle of your story.
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Please keep reading.
But if you still leave...
Your loss
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You the fact that one of the co-aythors removed it, shows the co-authors care about their readers. If it let a sour taste in your mouth then drink some sweet cider (non alcoholic) to wash the bad taste out and read on.
So far a great story, you may want to go back through though as there are some obviously missing words and some other things that could be fixed.
Got a bit lost with the fast paced nature and no real background on some of the crossover, had to give up on reading this. :(