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Eltirions


I mainly write Equestria At War fics, but other things too. If you have story ideas or requests, just send me a message.

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Hippogriffia's isolationism has had both good and bad effects for the nation. One ardent reporter with no real opinion on this isolationism heads out to interview a recently-immigrated baker after she's made a name for herself. This is what follows.

Important: this takes place in the Equestria At War universe. Equestria At War is a mod for the grand strategy game Hearts of Iron IV, be sure to check out their Discord and Reddit if you're not familiar with it. They also have a group on this site: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/212917/equestria-at-war

This fic is a present for SuddenlyZoey!

Cover art: https://derpibooru.org/images/2918701 (cropped)

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A cozy little fic. Great work as always, Elt.

Honestly hoping for a fic involving Posada someday. Or maybe have Twilight and her friends discover how Chiropterra was messing with Equestria. Both could be fun. Anyways, good story.

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Posada's not really up my alley unfortunately. As for the second idea, sounds interesting but I've already got quite enough on my plate. But then again, who knows what the future holds? In any case, glad you enjoyed it.

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Posada is a traumatized, but ultimately good soul. This does lead to some wacky ideas about nukes.
She's quite a dork and somewhat scatterbrained, she's also got a crush on Skystar, though Skystar is oblivious to it and thinks it's just a close friendship. Think the nuke tech visions and her death event if you do warcrimes bring her out the most.

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Useful explanation, but it doesn't change my disinterest into interest for her. :twilightsheepish:

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What, me being too much of a sweat on HIP put you off her?

Short and sweet, as befits a good slice of life.

This was a fic that was as charming as it was cozy! I'm reminded of the type of story this is while I'm reading it, that being 'slice of life'. To that, I can say that this is one particularly sweet slice of a rather pleasant life!

When I was reading through this, I got the sense that this is only a glimpse into just a day in the life of two ponies, and that's not to state the obvious or diminish its value by speaking to how common it is. Rather to say that you represented the lives of these ponies in a way that felt very real and true to life rather than a glamourized and distorted picture of life. You wrote in moments of silence, pauses in conversation, 'uhms' and 'ohs', things that usually are snipped out to improve brevity, but I think including them bolsters the quality and realism of conversation.

Now, I'm quite partial to Equestria at War (I have hundreds of hours playing it), so fleshing out the countries each character came from, their accents, a passing look into what life is like in Hippogriffia, Seaquestria, and Les Méridiennes immerses me that much more! As for the conversation itself, it felt very casual but also very pointed (as I'd hope an interviewer would be). What I love most about this fic though is Sweetwheat. Sweetwheat is above everything, a rather unique individual in an even more unique circumstance. She moved all the way across an ocean to run this dream bakery of hers, which speaks to her skill as a baker and the generosity of her investor, speaks in an accent not native to either country she lives in now or came from, and works in a rather tucked away part of the city. More than that, Coral Ridge as a representative of the crown, would take great interest in her unique case. To him, how Sweetwheat is doing, in her personal life and in her business, is not one of the millions of anecdotes, but a look into how Hippogriffia treats ponies and immigrants like herself! This makes her very interesting, but building off of what I've said before, a unique case in a world of such cases.

What I'm trying to say is that the world you write is one that I'd want to know more about, and if you can make an interview between a foreign baker and a state reporter this intriguing, then I know that at any level of this world, I can encounter a similarly interesting and well-written story!

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