Two Mares Met

Long before an orange pegasus on a scooter, two mares met and kept meeting.

This is their story.

Written for Bean's Writing Group with the prompt "Someone is missing" and bonus "No dialogue."

Also written as an entry for the LoftyHoliday Contest.

A thank you to Thesmokinguy for proofreading before publishing and Mockingbirb for catching a late typo.

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Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #1 · Jul 30th, 2022 · · 6 ·

Wait, who is Snap Shutter?

Wildcard25

Wildcard25 #2 · Jul 30th, 2022 · · ·

A very sweet idea of how these two met

FanOfMostEverything

FanOfMostEverything #3 · Jul 30th, 2022 · · ·

Delightful collection of moments. How these two met is definitely a story in its own right. Thank you for a wonderfully sweet read. Best of luck in the judging.

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Scootaloo's father. Did you watch Season 9? (Sincere question there, not trying to be harsh.)

TheLegendaryBillCipher

TheLegendaryBillCipher #4 · Jul 30th, 2022 · · ·

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Thanks, you too!

TwiDasherboop

TwiDasherboop #5 · Jul 30th, 2022 · · ·

I never seen a Lofty x Holiday fic. It was great.

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #6 · Aug 22nd, 2022 · · ·

Lofty was the mare’s name, and lofty were her goals. A seamstress by both trade and hobby, she sought inspiration in nature. She’d grown tired of life among the clouds – they were monochromatic and wholly boring, while the Outback was rugged, it was full of living, breathing life, even if most of it was dangerous. And it was beautiful.
And beauty was inspiring. Lofty said so in a matter-of-fact tone.
Holiday just nodded along. She had a hard time focusing on what Lofty was saying, but had no trouble focusing on her.

aww, i love this! not so much meet-cute as meet-extreme-and-romantic-circumstances, but i love the latter. there is definitely something to be said about how pegasi cities, being made of clouds, have an artificiality and separation from nature that must not agree with all those who grow up in them. and augh, totally see Lofty having once been a romantic and naïve young artist seeking inspiration and in over her head

She reached into her saddlebags and produced a sky blue scarf with fringed ends. It was no vest , but Lofty thought it complimented Holiday’s coat.

ah, so the origin of the scarf! together with Lofty’s sweater being a symbol of just how out of place she was in the dangerous Outback, love how the signature piece of clothing of each of these ponies are given meaning in this story, as any proper backstory-filling fanfic does

Snap nudged his sister with a smile. With a casual wave of his hoof, he let it slip about a new partner he was to be working with. As much an animal lover as he was, and cute to boot.
And she just so happened to be stationed in Equestria.
Holiday squealed and hugged her brother like a boa constrictor.

aww, there is a nice symmetry there in having Mane Goodall be the reason that Holiday and Snap are in Equestria long enough to be with Lofty and have Scootaloo, respectively.

Her name was Mane Allgood. She was a skinny but determined Pegasus, whose passion in life was the wilds and all the creatures within. It hadn’t taken long for Holiday to see in her what Snap saw in her.
In all honesty, she reminded Holiday of Lofty, in a way.

ehehe, yeah, that duality! only just realized that the two Aushaylian siblings just so happen to be married to Equestrian pegasi

And Lofty’s wing slipped into the pocket of her gown, her feathers brushing against a golden band as they had over the past few weeks now.

so true

Earth ponies liked the land in all senses. The touch of dirt, the greenery and brilliant colors, the scents of fresh loam, the rustles of blades of grass, and the taste of the Earth’s bounties.
But everything here was too smooth, too bland, too sterile, and too quiet for Holiday’s tastes.

and i imagine too closed-in and claustrophobic for pegasi! Equestrian hospitals do seem to be patterned off of those of modern Western society, and yeah, they are not pleasant places to be in

And so Holiday and Lofty stepped through the hospital room’s door to meet Mane and Snap, the former coddling a little bundle of orange and purple.
And two mares met their niece.

augh baby Scootaloo, so cute!

this is exactly the kind of story i had been thinking about and hoping for when i started this contest! there’s just so much left untold about Scootaloo’s parents and aunts in the one episode of canon that we see them, and this was a wonderfully sweet way to fill in those details. thank you so much for it!

TheLegendaryBillCipher

TheLegendaryBillCipher #7 · Aug 23rd, 2022 · · ·

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You're welcome! Glad you liked it.

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