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The Ancestor


Rus | Man is the warmest place to hide.

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This story is a sequel to Be Not Afraid


When magic returned to the land of Equestria, something else came with it.

Join S̷u̶n̷n̵y̸ and her friends as they go on a journey to discover that some things better lay forgotten.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 51 )

Scary cover...

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Thank you, I was aiming for that while making it.

Heh... Another story in the GrimDark. A whole new world. Maybe I should visit it sometime.

Ah and so it begins! I was looking forward to this story. And I gotta say, the first section is very well-written! Well done, it had just enough detail to sound creepy without turning into ridiculous and the subtle humor actually helps the mood. If the rest of the story brings this level, we're in for something awesome.

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Thank you for your kind words, hopefully I won't disappoint!

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You've just ran into a shoddily written bot account. They usually appear in pairs, one linking to a scam, the other "thanking" it. Best you can do is to report and delete it.

I'm still more of a fan of my way of killing, but you do you, Shepherd.

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The alternates are spreading to the comment section...

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It seems so...

Better say your prayers, hopefully that'll make'em leave.

On a second thought...

But they're not always so nice. Sometimes they tell me mean, horrible things like-

YOU NEED TO KILL YOURSELF! NOW!

Now that I think about it, you remind me of my other self. Manipulative. Good at attacking weakness. It's funny, honestly. You and I are not that different, are we?

The addition of audio really adds something

Dang, that was intense.

I suppose you deserve a round of applause for this trick. Well done, Shepherd.

"He wrote that somewhere in the Prismatic Mountains there is an entrance, once that may lead to the location of Old Equestria's most valuable memoirs. The Journal of Friendship. " Sunny said, looking at everypony at tge same time.

"Yeah, what's it about?" Zipp continued, catching onto Izzy's plan. She was eelieved to see a coy smile make its way to Sunny's face.

seriously?

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I take it you didn't like the first chapter?

Comment posted by MatTheBook deleted Sep 19th, 2022

So Pony satan is killing and replacing the G5 cast to promote his power?

Hitch: Press X to doubt.

Hmmmm, this guy might be a little tougher to fool Shepherd. You'll have to up your game.

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"He wrote that somewhere in the Prismatic Mountains there is an entrance, once that may lead to the location of Old Equestria's most valuable memoirs. The Journal of Friendship. " Sunny said, looking at everypony at tge same time.

"Yeah, what's it about?" Zipp continued, catching onto Izzy's plan. She was eelieved to see a coy smile make its way to Sunny's face.

https://youtu.be/ztVMib1T4T4

Tsese were the last words Hitch heard before the world turned into a blur of sounds, smells and colors.

Tsese?

So Luna and Celestia are still alive? What about the other two?

Hm. Either a game played by two sides to break the toughest or else an actual pony. Who knows what the Shepherd will do next?

And so the fic starts to live up to its name.

And so they multiply... Hm.

Oh my. The first victim outside of the group.

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When will the next chapter be out?

My first g5 fic so hoping it's good!

Interesting start and I like that you're giving Izzy some intellect.

That Sunny part seemed strange, about notifying the others of the slipperiness of the bridge.

Though I suppose it could just be par for the course I don't know the g5 ponies too well lol.

Liked this one too.

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That Sunny part seemed strange, about notifying the others of the slipperiness of the bridge.

She said it intentionally to make the rest of the group more worried/fearful of the road ahead.

So this is based on The Mandela Catalogue correct?

I put on some creepy ambient music and read and yeah did the job. Very atmospheric. That bathroom scene made me very uncomfortable. Great job!

Really interested now. Reading on.

Lol that noose made me jump.

Scary ambient music on while reading makes this fic terrifying.

Great work.

Dude... you are a madman. This is horrendously excellent.

Oh NO IZZY!

Well she's technically not dead yet so I'll take that as a win.

What an uncomfortable chapter. Reading on.

I love this story so far, please do continue.

Ugh bringing Luna in. (I'll just set that aside and see where this goes)

So, Sprout is a liar. "I trust you." Except not really, huh?

It's funny following Hitch is a lot less scary than following Pipp or Izzy. Probably cause I don't care about Hitch to be honest, lol.

Good job here paralleling the original story.

Guess it's time to play the waiting game.

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