I may be slow at writing stories, but I aim for quality over quantity. I always look forward to your comments and ideas.
In this story, you’ll laugh. You’ll cry. You’ll ponder. You’ll ask why as Spike and company try to figure out the secrets of his origins. However, it is the love between Spike and Rarity that will provide the key to finding his parents. Spike X Rarity (Of course). Contains Romance, Drama, Mystery, and Humor.
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Not bad for your first fiction.
For someone who hasn't seen MLP that much, this perfectly captures the characters, their personalities, and the overall feel of the show. Great first chapter, can't wait to read the rest!
This is honestly really good.
This was real awesome to wake up to. I finished chapter 2 before bed and woke up to find chapter three. This definitely deepens the mystery and the fact that Rarity and Spike haven't told any Pony about the events IN the cabin.
Um, it's spelled Pinkie Pie, not Pinky Pie.
It's really not surprising that Ash could be related to Pinkie, given the demeanor of Pinkie's immediate family. Applejack should've known this, since she's met Pinkie's family personally on several occasions.
Also, Ponyville's records are kept at city hall, not with Celestia. In fact, Pinkie has helped organize them, and even knows the filing system. When the girls went on a scavanger hunt for Cadance's pregnancy reveal, Pinkie found Applejack's file and baby picture with ease, and that file would've been around as old as Shire's.
Other than that, the story has a good plot and your grammar is very good. Kudos to you for being grammatically correct!
stalker alert
How rude, a down vote on Hillbe
compensating? Poor thing needs a cupcake
It voted Potato and it's mad
and it hates
So much for friendship
Cutie Mark Crusaders on the... ... Oh it's that one , No helping stupid
Now back to our favorite story
cake more cake
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Doh!
The funny thing is that I spelled it "Pinkie Pie" when I first wrote the story. Then I think I saw someone else write it as Pinky instead and made the change. Should have looked it up.
I hope this won't ruin the story if I keep it as Pinky. The story is all written out (all 100+ pages) and is published here and on fanfiction.net. The changes would be a pain. But I will see what I can do about the change. Can I keep it as Pinky for now?
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It's your story, so of course you can do what you want. However, since 99% of stories here and also the show itself specifically refer to her as Pinkie Pie, it will be abit jarring.
If, by chance, you wrote the story out in Microsoft Word, there is a "replacement" feature that will automatically replace every single instance of the word "Pinky" with "Pinkie" throughout the whole story without you having to go through and find them all.
Just for future reference, "Pinkie" refers to the color pink, like Pinkie's coat color. "Pinky" refers to the outside finger on a human hand...which ponies do not have.
Aww, that was sweet! It's nice to see a mature, relatively drama-less representation of how a date between Rarity and Spike would go.
U have been consistent with ur uploads and that is something I'm quite impressed about.
I feel like I’m looking at a cross between a crypytogram and a code word puzzle.
Runt is getting worse each day... And I don't have medicine to help... He is worried he might accidently burn down the cabin...Even if he loves me(hates me, likes me?) Even if he helped me too... I wont fear about my personal safety
Is Runts wounds getting worse and Grey Laid an egg?
Love this story, the mystery and dynamics were well done
. Waiting for more.
Sweetie PIE????
I'M RELATED TO EVERYPONY!!!!!!
It's Sweetie Belle
Top 1/3 of the story here...
Wonderful chapter.
I am happy that spike found his parents, but also sad at the same time. I definitely would love to see a sequel of the life’s of spike and rarity’s relationship, if that’s what your referring.
I've enjoyed this all the way through. Thanks a lot for breaking my heart
It's a nice ending to a nice story. However, it still feels abit open-ended? Like, why was Grey Shire a recluse? Was it her own nature, or something else? What of Grey Shire's parents and family? How will Rarity and Spike's relationship progress?
Maybe a sequel, if you felt like it?
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To answer your question about Grey Shire, she is kind of like Fluttershy, so being shy is part of her nature. However, she will do what's right when the situation calls for it. As for her parents, I never gave them much thought. I just pictured them as farmers on the outskirts of a town, nothing more. I suppose she could have had sibblings, but I never thought that far.
I have started one idea, but it's along the idea of Spike and Rarity planning their marriage (kind of like "Father of the Bride"). However, I know this has been done several times, and I am open to other ideas. I like the idea of looking into Grey Shire's family more, but I need some suggestions.
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Maybe Spike and the others get curious and try to find Shire (and thus Spike's) extended family? How will the family take to the news of Shire's death (even though they know she's been missing/presumed dead for awhile)? How will they take to having a dragon in the family? How will Twilight comfort Spike and assure him of always having their family if things don't work out?
Those could be good starting points, if you wanted to expand on them.
This brought tears to my eyes. A great ending.
Heartwarming end to a great story. Uve done well my friend. Brought justice to the character Spike by writing a great conclusion about his parents.
Finally got around to reading this. Great story, with a bittersweet ending very well done. I'd love to see a sequel!
To any who are interested, I need some help. I am currently writing the follow up story for "Spike's Mark". However, I need some questions answered like if there was any explanation about how the Carousel Boutique was built. I also need someone who is AGAINST a Spike and Rarity romance. If interested, send me a message. You will not be required to write anything (that's all me). I just need fresh perspectives. This request will end when I post "Rarity's Choice".
Very nice. Well written with characters matching precisely what they would do.
Lovely
An exceptional and heartfelt story, bravo
By any chance, where did you find the cover art for this story?
I really hope you see this, even though you haven’t longed in since march.
I really regret not reading this fic sooner, instead of just leaving in the “read it later” list for a year. This was really nice, a multi chapter yet short and to the point fic. I haven’t had the time to read a fic like this in a while, a big shame since this type of story are always a joy.
While the ending was bitter sweet, if not mostly sad, there’s enough here for a sequel. Plus the romance was definitely something that help make the story less depressing, so I definitely want to see more.
If you come back to write it, feel free to message me if you need ideas. I definitely want to know what caused the weird things in Rarity’s boutique, also I know it was mentioned before, but it would be nice to see Spike meet his biological pony and dragon grandparents. Also I feel like Spike, or if not his grandparents, would like the recover the bodies to give them a proper burial and a headstone. Rarity of course should be at his side when all that happens, as all this situations would be great to develop their relationship, plus that relationship again would balance our the more sad factors of the story (if you decide to include them in the sequel).
As I said, I really hope you get to see this. I really hope you get around to writing a follow up. And again sorry for taking so long to read such a good story
Wow… I just read the whole thing, I must say, this story is definitely something else, it managed to do what no other story managed to do, to feel all sort of emotions, I felt in love with this story, I also read what you have so far for the sequel story just as amazing and I can’t wait to see it finished, is no secret that I adore Spike and Rarity’s relationship and so I proven by my animations, and this story not only did this a a perfect follow up after season 9, but managed to give a new perspective of Spike’s origins, just like how every character is portrayed, even after you complete “Rarity’s choice”, I do hope to see more from you, for just having two stories, I can see you’re a amazing writer!
P.S. I’m actually the one who made that pic in the cover and that you use as a avatar:3
Reading this after I read the sequel.
Let's see how this story started !
Wow, this was actually beautiful.
It could have been some cringe date of a story, but you made it something precious.
I just finished reading the sequel, and thought I had better read this one to catch up.
Well written. Your pacing and discovery throughout each chapter is better than many (or most?) fics on this site. I can tell you planned this out.
Any plans for a Story 3 ?
That might be hard, as the story seemed to end well with the sequel.