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Chrysalis dreamed of a day when her children wouldn't need to steal love to survive, but that day would never come while she drew breath. She dared to hope once, but she knew the price of freedom, and she paid it. In the end, the fall wasn't what killed her.
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I'm pretty sure that last bit can be considered treason...
Anyway, this seems interesting. I'm going to fav it and I hope to see some more soon
Nice. :3 Tracking.
SPIKE! YOU TRAITOR!!!
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I plan to update on a weekly basis. There will be seven chapters in all.
You have piqued my interest, please carry on
I've made some revisions that should make it clearer who's saying and doing what.
Really hoping this is a Spilight and a changling story? Shit...count me in
I shall be watching and waiting my dear friend and why do I got a feeling that Spike is going to be arrested?
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Spike and Twilight, eh? Interesting. Yes, I think I can work with that.
1380037 Would really mean a lot to me and the fans my friend, thank you very much, after your story is finish I shall then write a story of your favorite pairing in your own honor brother
If you want.
Edit: I just noticed that would not the letter go right to the Princess? And I wonder What Luna would think about this, to be honest.....maybe it's high time these soft bred ponies were given a little conflict, make them understand that not everything is peaceful and rainbows, you know? Hoping Spike is a bad ass if he does join the war with his claws, fangs and spiked tail.
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Hold that thought until we see how I manage to juggle all these romantic subplots. There's still the tragedy to consider.
I'm trying to keep the conflict interpersonal rather than physical, but the sequel to the next story I'm going to write will be about Rainbow Dash becoming a shell-shocked veteran after her graphic experience in a covert war against Zebrica.
As for the letter, you'll see what happens with that in the next chapter. It should be up in a day or two.
1380569 Fair enough and I can agree with that.
Ahhhh....very great idea, I like it.
Damn, that sounds like a great idea, have her fight in the war and even face her own demons and dark element: Disloyalty (Element of Betrayal and dark half of Rainbow Dash, also a memeber of the Dark Elements or the Elements of Disharmony) very, very nice...mind adding Derpy Hooves with her? Maybe even Scootaloo when you do write it?
Really, huh...this should be fun
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Derpy is the main character of the first story, so she may make a cameo appearance.
1381990 Awesome
Can't wait for more of this and whenever that story is created....this is goig to be goooodddd
Shit, was not expecting Spike to be kinapped, at the very least Twilight should have got kidnapped as well so they could have bond but that would have made things SO MUCH WORSE! Damn, Shining got his ass kicked...and I loving how seriously dark this story is becoming it really fits the mood of the story, along with the swearing, very well done....I wonder what what will happen next? What about the Mane Six and the Royal Princesses? Damn...this is making me wait on the edge of my bucking seat!
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Yeah, I think I have to change the rating from 'Everyone' to 'Teen.' Rest assured, things are going to get much worse before they get better.
1388193 I can completely agree with Teen rating, hoping that Spike can cuss as well though and I would not have it any other way
This is going to be really, really good, just remember that it's five lines to a paragraph then you seprate, your begining of the chapter starts out a lot longer then I would have thought and it's still very well made.
Hoping if you ever have the chance you can look at my own stories, see if they are to your liking maybe bro.
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I have no qualms about swearing; I didn't even know what you were talking about at first. It's the inevitable gore, implied or otherwise, that concerns me.
Paragraphs, like commas, are the bane of my existence. I'll figure them out someday.
I've got some time before I start working on Chapter III, so it couldn't hurt to take a look.
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I hear you my friend, sometimes you wonder if yoiu should crack it up a rating or not huh? And very nice, can't wait to read chapter three and thank you.
Hmm.....wish you luck on that jourany, be sure to bring Twilgiht and Spiketo help you figure all that out though, maybe even Luna for kicks
At first I was like
Then I
Great, fun twists and turns...
Let's see, Celestia needs an assassin so she decides to send a bulky white unicorn who specializes in defensive spells, one of which is a big showy protective barrier that seems to be the first line of defense of Canterlot and was stated to be a spell only Shinning Armor could cast, also he is the Captain of the royal guard, and lastly the husband of a Princess. It may be convenient plot-wise, but sending Twilight's BBBBFF seems like a poor choice, specially considering that he was recently brainwashed by a changeling. I mean without counting that it is a good way to get the plot moving it makes no sense at all, discounting Celestia herself and maybe Cadence, any other character would be a better logical choice.
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I'll admit, it doesn't make much sense when you put it that way. The way I figure it, Shining's history makes him mentally fit to kill in cold blood, whereas Celestia is no more likely to instigate an assassination of her own accord than she is to hand him over as a sacrificial lamb.
Yes... Let my children choose... They'll probably start a war, but...dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Queen_Chrysalis.png
Careful, Spike. Sometimes the right thing isn't the best option... Its nice to see a little good come from his brash decision, though.
Loving it so far. Please, friend, continue.
Damn, that changling is a bastardand I'm seriously hoping that Spike does not fall in love with that female changling, I'm not one for when a main falls for an OC whatsoever...plus, I like the two changlings just as they are.....this is going to get crazy, wonder where the Mane Six are....wonder whats going to happen to Celstria or Luna for that matter....damn, this is going to get twisted...Spike as evil? Count me in!
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Let's not get ahead of ourselves here. There's still five more chapters to go.
1433214 Y.....you make a very valid point.....damn logic!!!!!
Just joking bro, carry on with yuor amazing story.
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png I'm thinking of ways to torture and kill Cassius without getting affected by any outside forces.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy_invert.png
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All in good time.
1480301 Muahahahaha, Ahahahaha! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/discord.png
I swear I read this chapter before....think you re-posted the last chapter bro. And the female changlings seems a little to kind and good for my taste, she might as well be a hero would not fit well for me or the Mane Six...and yet, we have no clue what she has gone thorugh, how she has lived or what she has done....maybe she's looking to redeem herself? Hmmmm....at any case, she seems a bit to happy for being a creature born of darkness and suffering.
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I don't know if anyone actually reads my blog posts, but the latest one explained the situation. I had to move everything down to make way for the introduction. That's the new addition. The other chapters have seen heavy revision, but they're not new, per se. I apologize if you were mislead. Chapter IV will be out soon.
If anyone's too happy, it's Cassius--justified by the copious amount of absinthe he drinks. As for Aurelia, the implication is that she's trying to follow in Chrysalis's hoofsteps. I'm deliberately leaving a lot of questions unanswered. Half the story is sorting out the characters' motives, so I hope to provide some closure by the end.
I like it!
Although the Spike-Aurie romance seems to have escalated really quickly.
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You'd be right if their love was romantic. I see it as puppy love, a coping mechanism that will evolve as time goes on.
So much love for this! Please, continue.
Shit, I'll admit, this was really hard to read, felt like a wall of text even though I know for a fact you did not intend for it to be that way....so the female does not trust him....good, maybe he'll learn that one's enemy can not truely be a friend, and Peewee!!!!! My favorite pet EVER!
Damn Spike, you might as well go after her, but be with somepony like Twilight when you do, you need somepony's help...but Twilight will be PISSED...or sad...wonder what she will think of him having a crushon a changling?...Will she be happy or jelous?
I like jelous better. And damn Shininig that was cold but understandable.....this is going crazy, still the leader should have been killed but I know that noneof them really had the heart to do it...I think, this is getting crazy, I have to read more
This is quite good
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I'm glad I'm not the only one who felt this chapter dragged. Equestria Daily's editors think I overdo the dialogue, but if I had to write this much prose every time, I'd have run off to join the circus long ago.
Cassius makes another appearance in Chapter VI. That's all I'm going to say about that.
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Thank you. Seeing people enjoying my story makes the arduous hell of writing it worthwhile. Here's to three more chapters!
1613615 What? They are crazy motherbucker, I don't see any of that shit at all, crazy bastards!
Some people have some very annoying problems, all I can say is.....KILL IT, KILL IT WITH FIRE!!!!!!
1613615 three more chapters?
not bad not bad
i love the idea of spike and aurora
Damn, this has to be the longest chapter you made, it was very well written to. I spotted the small Spilight when Twilight kissed Spike, I'm assuming on the lips and makes me wonder where Spike's heart will trail next.
That being said, the fact that Spike's enemy Garble even appeared and was the dragon was something that suprised the buck out of me I was seriously impressed and Peewee!!!
My favorite out of the eight pets the ponies (and one dragon) have. I'm very suprised you created the knowledge about the dargon/pony laws as you did it was a very welcomed changed, I loved it.
And I'm a little confused on how a dragon's fire can be worse then lava, in which Spike belly flopped into....is that possible?
For a second I was hoping the Changlings and the dragons would work togther to destory Equestria but then I understood that many dragons have nothing against the pony kingdom and that ony one (or as the MLP villian shirt I have on now states, three) dragons have a problem with Spike and three ponies, hardly a reason at all to go to war....would make for an impressive story though or history lesson.
Wonder what will happen to Spike now and YOU GO TWILIGHT!
Sure, screaming at a Goddess and one's former mentor is not a good thing to do if they vaule their life but Celestia deserved it...still, I understand a bit why she did it.
Twilight is a mortal unicorn, smart as she is she'll never know what it's like to live such a long amount of years and have to deal with an entire kingdom.
Sometimes the best choices are never the right ones...sometimes one has to be the villian, even at the cost of their own life in order for the sake of many, many more lives....it can't be easy being a Goddess of Equestria.
Shit......makes me wonder who the Pegsus was though...poor girl. Wonder how Luna will take the news and lies that her sister as kept from her...oh well, even a Goddess can be stained with sin.
I'm not a fan of Shining Armor but I would be lying if I did not hold a small bit of respect for him now....impressive.
Ha, Peewee's father did very well, I'm proud of him...bet he wanted to do that for so long...one enemy down....ten or eleven more to go.
Can't wait for the next chapter
Peewee's father has delivered sweet revenge.
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I'm glad. As much as I hate revising, the first draft was a disaster.
The first draft said exactly how they kissed, but I decided it was best left open to interpretation.
I imagine dragon fire averts biological complications by being magical, which explains how wild magic could alter Spike's.
Depending on how much you read into Celestia's behavior, you may be surprised by what her interaction with Luna reveals. We've reached a turning point in the story where I stop raising new questions and start answering old ones.
1646409 HAAAAAAAAUUUUUZZZZZZZ, then shoud be very, very bad ass to see and I agree with you on the fire, very good job. Hmmm....valid point, shit is now going to get real
dayuuuuuuuuum, THE FEELS, albeit not much but still, the feels.
Got to admit, I'm disappointed that Spike chose the changling over his best friend
But hey it's your story so I won't judge....on another note. I love that idea of Celestia and the changling queen, very impressive and rare to see that pairing, ha....Luna getting drunk, that's funny.The least Spike could have done though is take Peewee along, poor guy. Thought they would be very loyal to one another since they can live for a very long time....onto the next one and fianlly, the bastard is dead
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I'm very happy with Celestia/Chrysalis.
The situation with Pewee isn't as bad as it looks. There's still one more chapter, after all.
1710131 I can completely agree with this pairing
Ah.....good point, I'll be waiting then.
Twilight and Celestia, hold on one sec: images.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw1237_Twilight_Sparkle_nope_nope_nope.gif I may be disappointed about Spike with a changling when I was hoping this would be a Spilight, but I really dislike this pairing....but that's my option, to each their own really. Other then this, great chapter, I'm assuming this is the last, or no?
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I'll send you a message by way of explanation.