Heated Words
What can everyone do? Praise and blame. This is… virtue, this is… madness.
-Friedrich Nietzsche
Tender Heart Memorial Hospital had seen plenty of emergencies in its 227 years of service to the ponies of Canterlot. It had seen one wing converted into an armed fortress during the Diamond Dog Revolt. It had been filled to the brim after the Specter of the Ballet Incident that had seen 37 unicorn crushed under a fallen chandelier. During the War of the Maples hundreds from both sides of the family feud had passed through their doors, seeking aid. Always the doctors and nurses of Tender Heart had worked to provide a place of safety and peace for those troubled souls that waited to find out the fate of their loved ones.
But today, on this day, the staff was at their wits end.
This was not what they had expected when they had come to work that morning. The royal wedding had been the topic of conversation in the break room and all the nurses had whispered about what the bride would wear, who would attend, and all the normal juicy gossip that ponies talk about when they weren’t lucky enough to attend such an important event.
The doctors and the administration staff had been prepping for a somewhat normal day. Since Tender Heart was the closest hospital to the castle, they were prepared to get a few more visitors than normal; mostly those that drank a bit too much or strained something partying to hard. The worst any of them had been expecting was that they would have to deal with an elitist snob that looked down on their hospital and demanded to be treated like the Creator herself. But they had dealt with plenty of ponies like that (Prince Blueblood had given them all a headache after the last Gala, complaining of being infected with ‘poor pony syndrome’) and knew how to stem off most of their complaints.
There was an old proverb, equated to the great philosopher Deep Thoughts: Those that no longer fear trouble should be the most afraid.
The entrance doors of the hospital didn’t so much slam open as them were torn from their hinges and sent flying into the street. Several nurses gasped, all thoughts of recrimination ripped through their minds at the sight of Princess Celestia galloping in, her royal guard barely able to keep up.
“I need a doctor, now!” she barked. None of them had ever heard Celestia sound so gruff and it took them a moment to process what she had said. Celestia lowered her wings, which she had risen to shield the battered form of a lavender mare that lay upon her back. “Hurry! We have injured!”
For any other pony the sight of their princess storming into a room with an unconscious unicorn slung over her back would have made them scratching their heads at best and beginning to question their sanity at worst. But these mares and stallions were not normal ponies; they were the nurses and doctors of Tender Heart Hospital and it didn’t matter how startling the situation was, they were ready to provide help.
“Area secure, Princess!” one of the guards called out as Celestia used her magic to gently place the unicorn upon a gurney. “Permission to bring in Captain Armor and the civilians.”
“Granted,” Celestia said firmly. There was a flutter of activity around the door and then several unicorn guards trotted in, supporting a thrashing pony with their magic. It only took the nurses seconds to realize that the trembling figure was that of Shining Armor…the stallion that was supposed to be getting married that day.
Shining cried out suddenly, trying to strike an unseen foe. Several of his guards held him down as the nightmare took its toll on him. Two doctors rushed over and helped restrain the white unicorn, getting him on a gurney and pulling him alongside the first patient.
“By the sun, that’s Lady Sparkle,” one of the nurses cried out, recognition finally dawning upon her.
Those who knew her in Ponyville would have been shocked by the utter reverence the nurses showed the injured unicorn. It was to be expected, though; when Twilight was a major celebrity in Canterlot, which was part of the reason she had locked herself in the library, focusing on her studies and avoiding the spotlight. She was Princess Celestia’s personal student, something that had not happened in nearly 700 years. That honor had earned her admirers and enemies, which was why she had moved to the castle at such a young age: her family had received death threats from those that felt they deserved the honor more than little Twilight.
Then there was the fact that she was also the first pony to actually pass the dreaded Dragon Egg Test. One of the greatest secrets of Celestia’s School for Gifted Unicorns was that the entrance exam was impossible to pass. For 428 years the same little dragon egg had been pulled into the classroom and unicorn fillies and colts had attempted to ‘hatch’ the egg. It was only when they failed that the instructors had informed them of the truth: the student had already been accepted into the school and the Dragon Egg Test was designed to make the pony fail. By seeing how the filly or colt responded to failure the professors could determine how to best help the student. Those that reacted with tears had their confidence built up while those who thrashed about in rage were taught humility.
But Twilight Sparkle…Twilight had done the impossible: she hadn’t hatched the egg as much as willed the baby dragon into existence. She had created life where there had been none…something only a few unicorns in all of Equestrian history had managed to do.
Her name had been known throughout the city within hours.
As she grew her status among the ponies of Canterlot had only grown. Whispers of ‘The Slayer of Discord’ and ‘Destroyer of Nightmares’ could be heard whenever she returned to the city and there were more than a few ponies that wondered if Twilight wasn’t being groomed to be the next leader of Equestria.
But Twilight never let such things go to her head. Unlike so many in Canterlot who’d gotten a taste of power and prestige, Twilight had refused to put on airs or allow others to treat her as anything other than normal. Even after she had become one of the Bearers and been knighted by Celestia for her efforts to protect the kingdom, Twilight had refused to let others address her by her title. She had always been happy to be a quiet librarian and study magic.
And now she looked to be knocking upon death’s door.
“Move!” Doctor Quick Stitch snapped gruffy, storming through the crowd of nurses that had gathered around the Princess. Stitch took a single look at the patients before glaring at the sun princess. “What happened to them? Keep it short and concise. Neither of them have the time for poetic waxing.”
Celestia nodded, her relief that the doctor wasn’t treating her differently than any other patient beating back her annoyance at the callous way he addressed her. “Captain Armor is the victim of a changeling attack. The…the creature fed on him for nearly a week and left him drained of much of his life force. He was also hit by a blast of dark magic that drove him into a stain glass window.”
Stitch nodded, stomping his hoof to get the attention of two orderlies. “Get him into room 17 and start him on blood transfusion; then get a magical transference to build up his reserves.”
“His parents are coming, they can donate-“
Stitch cut her off. “The mare, what of her?”
“Changeling attack. She…she forced the parasite to consume her negative emotions.” Celestia took a shuddering breath, forcing herself to remain calm in front of her subjects. “She also used several dark magic spells I can attest she never attempted before today, as well as a soul shield.”
Stitch sniffed slightly. “She’s also heavily intoxicated.” He grabbed a hold of the gurney and began to drag it into the back. “I need her in the operating theater at once. I’ll need to directly infuse her with white magic to clear the corruption out of her system.”
Celestia began to chase after them, only to be stopped by several nurses. “Please, I-“
“I’m sorry, Princess…only medical staff past this point.”
The sun goddess felt rage flood her veins but all at once her strength failed her and she stumbled back, finally laying down in the middle of the waiting room, paying no heed as her guards encircled her and made sure she was safe. The world seemed to fade away and Celestia felt as if she were in a land of white, where no sound or light or distraction could possibly get to her. And endless void that held only her…and her thoughts.
‘I’m ready to be your apprentice, Princess Celestia! I dressed up real pretty too, see!’
‘I did it, I did it! I can’t believe I moved that pencil! Did you see, did you see!?
‘I’m not tired, Princess! I’m not tired at all! Come on, one more spell!’
‘It’s ok, Princess Celestia. I’ll just study until you are done meeting with the court.’
‘Are…are you sure you can’t…ok?’
‘I really wanted to talk to you tonight…’
‘Are…are you going to banish me? Or lock me in a dungeon?’
‘Princess, please listen…Cadence…’
‘But Celestia refuses to believe that a member of her family could be evil because everypony knows Celestia is such a good judge of character.’
‘I hate you! I hate you!’
“Princess! Princess Celestia!”
The ruler of Equestria shook her head, the world zooming back into focus and she realized that at some point Twilight’s friends had joined her on the floor, waiting for news the doctors might have.
“Yes Applejack? Is Twilight-”
The farm pony shook her head. “No word. We…we just got worried about you.”
“You were…uh…staring off into space,” Fluttershy said softly, staring at her hooves. “It was…making us worry.”
Celestia vainly attempted to smile but even without seeing her face she knew it was a poor attempt. “I am sorry I just…had a lot on my mind.”
“We all do,” Pinkie Pie said, for once morose and withdrawn. Her poofy mane and tail hung limp and she was hiding her eyes behind it…in that moment all her friends realized that she and Fluttershy could have passed as sisters.
“I just wish they’d tell us something!” Rainbow Dash complained. “I want to know that Twilight is ok!”
“Perhaps it is better they haven’t come to us,” Rarity reasoned. “If they had come too quickly that would mean…mean…”
She couldn’t finish the thought and the rest of her friends were grateful for that. Saying the words would make the threat real and none of them could stand for that. The mere thought that Twilight might…not be with them…was worse than the torture Discord had inflicted on them. The idea that their last time with the mare had been filled with sadness and heartbreak…none of them would survive such a blow.
They all turned as the doors opened, holding their breath as they waited to see what news would be brought to them about Twilight and Shining Armor. But it was not a nurse that stood there but two unicorns: Twilight Velvet and Night Light. At some point during Celestia’s fade out the two had been brought in by the doctor, to be told about their children’s condition. Each looked as if they had aged 10 years in the span of a few hours. Velvet’s mane hung over her face but every so often she would shift and they could see her eyes were bloodshot and puffy from the tears she had shed. Night Light looked as if he supported the entire weight of Equestria upon his shoulders and his hooves would give out at any moment.
“Mr and Mrs…uh…Twilight’s parents,” Rarity said awkwardly, making a face of displeasure, “have…have you heard anything about-“
Velvet’s head snapped up and for a moment they all saw a glimmer of the madness Twilight had displayed in the throne room just an hour ago.
“You,” Velvet snapped, her horn beginning to glow indigo. “How dare you show your face here!” A bolt of magic lashed out, striking Celestia in the chest; if not for her magical shields, Celestia would have been knocked out cold.
Velvet let out a scream of rage, charging Celestia and leaping at her. The Princess quickly used her magic and managed to restrain the thrashing mare, causing her to hang just inches from her face, roaring in frustration.
“WE TRUSTED YOU!” Velvet shouted, still trying to gouge the princess’ eyes out with her hooves. “You promised to watch out for her! You promised to teach her and raise her!”
“I did!” Celestia exclaimed, her nerves frayed and her normally calm demeanor broken as she found herself once again being assaulted by one of her subjects.
“You call this protecting her?!” Velvet screamed, trying to break free from the magical enchantment that kept her hanging in the air like a puppet. “My daughter is in emergency surgery because of you! The doctors say she might never be able to use magic again!” The other element bearers gasped as Velvet’s proclamation. Hot tears fell from the mare’s eyes as she verbally accosted the princess she blamed for her family’s misfortunes. “You…you told us to trust you, that letting you take our little filly was for the best…you think THAT was for the best!? You turned her into a monster!”
Celestia stood up, her eyes narrowed as she looked upon the mare she had entrapped. She wanted to comfort her. She knew that Velvet was speaking out of pain and grief. She was a mother whose foals had been hurt. But Celestia felt the same pain and it dulled her senses and left her reacting without thought.
“It was for the best. I raised Twilight…I loved her. I taught her everything I knew and gave her the best. I mourn as you do what happened to Twilight and I will do all I can to help her…but I am not the only one to share the blame here.”
“That’s right,” Night Light said coldly, shocking all with the quiet rage that tinted his words. The stallion was well known for be the strong and silent type; he was happy to stand behind his wife, to be the stallion behind the mare. But even he had his limits and this day, which was suppose to be so wonderful for his family and had now been forever marred, had been the breaking point. “You five are just as guilty.”
“What…what do you mean?” Fluttershy stammered.
“We heard Twilight’s words at the wedding, when she attacked that monster,” Night said softly, staring daggers at the five mares. “She came to you for help and you spat on her. You turned away because you cared more about furthering your goals than our daughter. You used her.”
“We didn’t use her!” Applejack shouted, taking a step forward. “Twilight is our friend!”
“And friends always treat friends like you treated her?” Velvet snapped. “The Princess here showed me some of her friendship reports…the pain you put my daughter through…I wanted to rush down to Ponyville and whisk her back to Canterlot!” Velvet turned her glare on Celestia. “But you told us she needed to be there! You lied to us and now Twilight-“
“And what about you?” Rainbow Dash snapped, tired of being blamed for everything. She was doing that enough on her own without their help. “We never saw you two come for a visit! We didn’t even know your names until we saw them on the wedding invitation! You can blame us for our mistakes but at least we were there for Twilight, unlike you!”
“How dare you talk to us like that,” Night said, his horn beginning to glow.
Celestia quickly cast a spell to keep the unicorns from using their magic. “Enough of this! You are not thinking clearly-“
“We are thinking more clear than ever!” Velvet growled. “When Twilight is better we are taking her home. I will never let any of you infect her with your filth again!”
“Oh yeah?” Applejack challenged. “Seems all of this started because your son Shinin’ Armor couldn’t figure out his fillyfriend was a changelin’! He’s the one that cut Twilight out of his life and left her a wreck! I don’t see ya gettin’ mad at him!”
“Don’t you dare talk about my son that way, you piece of trash.” Night got in Applejack’s face, daring the mare to strike him.
“From the way you two are acting, maybe violence and hatred runs in the family,” Rarity challenged. “Twilight was fine before we came here and spent time with you…maybe she sensed your darkness and it drove her over the edge!”
“Please, stop!” Pinkie Pie shouted, trying to get everyone to calm down. The others just ignored her, continuing to shout at each other. She watched as everypony began to turn on each other: Celestia was trading words with Velvet, Night was growling at Applejack, Rarity and Rainbow Dash had somehow ended up fighting with each other. The only ponies not bickering were herself and Fluttershy, who was hiding behind a chair, sobbing while she covered her ears.
“This is all your fault!”
“It’s yours!”
“You are to blame!”
“You are!”
“ENOUGH!”
All of the ponies were thrown against a wall. It was not a magic spell that did it, but the sheer power of the Canterlot Royal Voice.
Princess Luna, goddess of the night, slowly made her way into the waiting room, flanked by her personal guard, the Shadowbolts. A nurse trembled behind the reception desk, shutting her eyes as Luna passed like an ancient plague. The five bearers felt their stomachs clench; in that moment they saw not Luna but Nightmare Moon reborn.
“Thou should be ashamed of thee selves!” Luna declared, the blast of her declaration slamming them into the wall again. “We come here bearing news and seeking to learn of the condition of Lady Sparkle and find you eight squealing like foals. Do thee believe this is what Lady Twilight needs to recover?” She looked at each of them in turn, daring them to question her. “You seek to pass blame when all here have their own share of the burden. All here failed Twilight Sparkle and petty words will not heal her wounds. You are her parents, her teacher, and her friends…and you bring dishonor to her by acting as you do!”
Luna waited, seeing if any would argue with her words. But her gaze only found sullen faces and tear-stained eyes. She let out a breath before continuing, this time without the royal voice.
“We have come to inform you that Princess Cadence has been found. She is being brought here to be treated after her ordeal in the caves. Sister, I ask that you join me.” Luna took a moment, glancing at the others. “My guards will escort you to wherever you desire to go. They will watch over you and notify you when I receive word on Lady Sparkle and Captain Armor. Till then, think hard about your actions here and what they say of you…and how they might attribute to Twilight Sparkle’s condition.”
And with that, Luna marched out of the lobby, Celestia following after her like a scolded filly.
~MC~MC~MC~
Shining Armor, captain of the royal guard, slowly blinked his eyes, trying to free himself from the effects of the pain-numbing drugs that had been injected into his system. His reflexes had been slowed to a crawl, which explained why he was unable to stop the scaly hand that had darted out to clasp his muzzle shut.
“Hello Shining Armor,” Spike said coldly. “We need to talk about Twilight.”
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First, my thanks to Akmentop for prereading the chapter.
And here we have the fall out from Twilight's defeat of Chrysalis. For those of you that have never had a loved one injured and possibly dying in a hospital...emotions run very high. It is easy to say things you never would and to react in the cruelest of ways. Pain and guilt are funny things.
I wanted to establish here a bit more about Twilight and how others see her versus her friends and family. Twilight, by all accounts, should be one of the most famous ponies in Equestria. Ignoring all the times she saved the world, the fact alone that the ruler of the country selected her as her student should be enough to get tongues waging. The idea that Twilight never puts on airs speaks to her personality...and that of her friends.
Finally, the Dragon Egg Test. I always found it odd that they would use that test for CHILDREN and yet Twilight is the only one with a dragon...and thus I decided to make it Equestria's version of the Kobayashi Maru. It was designed to be failed...but Twilight did the impossible and succeed.
Oh shit, Spike's gonna rip Shining a brand new asshole!
You update this quick as fuck , you tease! How dare you leave us with such a tantalizing cliff-hanger!
I am really loving this! And woo, Luna scolding them all. Epic.
More, now!
And to be fair, Kirk cheated in the Kobayashi whereas Twilight played entirely within the rules.
Cheers
GM
PS: Second! It's the new first! :D
I was just about to start re-reading this and saw the third chapter and my comment how DARE you leave us with cliffhanger you had better update again soon or else *pulls out nuclear powered chainsaw*
"Fear leads to anger, anger leads to hate, hate.. to suffering"
1318431 Well that depends on whether or not you view the Sonic Rainboom as cheating since Twilight actually gave up just before the Rainboom hit and caused her magic to go all blasitic.
1318492 Eh...the Rainboom didn't magically grant her power, it just unlocked that which lay beneath. I suppose you could argue that the Rainboom functioned as a code, much like in the Kobayashi.
But in the Kobayashi, Kirk brought in the data whereas Twilight only brought herself and her hidden potential. The Rainboom effect was really more a coincidence.
Can we see Spike castrate Shining? Those claws have got to do something!
1318504 I don't know if it will come to that and Spike ditched Twilight as well so he's just as guilty.
1318534 Yes, but as I see it, Spike is the only one willing to take action to try and correct his mistake.
Plus...you know...Spike being angry is just awesome. :D
Did we really see much of Spike in the Royal Wedding episodes? I can't really recall him making much of an appearance.
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Spike had a VERY small role in the episode, other than a few jokes. As such, that is why, of all of them, he will have the best chance of talking to Twilight without ending up with a mouth for a magic.
As for people calling for Shining's death...well, even as much as I hate his character, that isn't the route I am going to go and even the worst characters deserve some rounding out, so expect to get Shiny's perspective next chapter.
1318580 Well to be fair, Shining did fuck up so I want to see at least some physical damage.
Keep in mind, he did abandon Twilight for the hot piece of ass and didn't even talk to Twilight except as an after-thought.
"Oh Twi, by the way. I'm porking your old baby-sitter. Also, that nursery rhyme has a whole new different meaning now."
/scumbag-Shining
So much dispute...I can sense it.
There is no doubt the situation is horrid when the least moral of the sisters has to scold the most sensible for being inept at stopping an argument.
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Oh trust me...I know. If there were a club from Shining Armor Haters, i would be the President.
But as the Joker said...guns are too quick. I'd rather deal with emotions and heartbreak than violence.
Besides...I'm a redemptionist at heart.
Oh Spike
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Darth Link made the greatest comment in his story, that Luna, has she been there, would have believed Twilight (or she hoped she would) because Twilight had saved her and showed her kindness.
If I could, I would have listed Luna as a main character...
Hmm. Whatever happemd to chrysalis and her army? i mean they were thoroghly neutralized for the moment, but somepony might want to do something about the unconscious invasion force surrounding the city... Although if they effectively have the queen hostage they can probably declare terms.
Do go on^^
BEST DARK-fic EVER
- Celestia showing a more err.. "humane" (if that's applicable)
- rest of the Twi's friends being train-wrecks
- Twi's parents in even more emotional/physical catastrophe
- All out yelling and screaming and Der magiks!
- and BAM! NightMare Luna!
Erh Meh Gerd!!
AAANND!
's time to be a man
(here's to hoping you made spike's body age a bit ,maybe juvenile spike type, and turned him into a vengeful dragon)
MOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAR
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we now continue to your daily fan-fictions *ksshhhhhh-static*
I haven't read the story, but from the describtion I think this picture would serve as a great cover art
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http://everfree-sea.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d5fh2x7 Here's a link for the original so you can ask the creator for permission if you want to use it :)
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And that would be a good thing to remember....
1318642 Awwww......I wanted Spike to tear Shining Armor's head off and shit, talk about a dangrous and cruel way to talk to royalty....this is going to be more epicthen anything I read all week....the Shadowbolts! BUCK YES! Talk about awesome villians. Please...let the darkness and a unicorn and dragon walking along a dark path continue....this is going to get GOOOODDDD!!!!!
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Do take into mind that he WAS under the influence of Chrysalis, so he may have only been allowed a modicum of free will.
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Is any of this getting to you?
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Yes, that is something I am considering too...however, notice I mentioned that negative emotions are a poison to Changelings...
And he was under her control for maybe a week or two...there is a long history of Shining and Twilight not always being the best of friends that I am going to explore.
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That makes sense.
But if you were reacting to my statement; "the least moral", I stand by that.
Luna is my favorite of the two, but she is not as sensible and moral as Celestia. This is because:
1) despite being over a millennia old, she is still, technically a child.
2) Her stay at the moon may have slightly broken her mind.
3) She is not as experienced as Celestia.
4) and she can be a bit rash.
These things is the qualities which makes Celestia superior to Luna in terms of diplomacy.
What I meant with that comment was this: when CELESTIA has to be called out on by LUNA, then that means that the situation is pretty bleak.
This is brilliant. I'm hoping Twilight hasn't lost her magical abilities because I'd still like to see her thrash her 'friends' a little before this fic is done, but other than that, I'm just strapped in and hoping for a kick ass ride.
Truthfully, this is one of the few 'dark' fics I've ever really enjoyed. The many secret origins of Scootaloo is cute and all, but this... damn! Keep it up!
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Nope, I followed your logic perfectly. I was merely pointing out that when it came to dealing with feelings of abandonment and darkness, Luna is the expert. She understands just how twisted your emotions can become.
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Very well then.
1318993
Oh, okay then.
That makes sense indeed.
Alrigh! New chapter! I'm actually glad that Twilight isn't fine after pulling that stunt. Throwing around those kinds of spells must take a heavy toll on the body. Most fics she just recovers in an hour or she doesn't feel strained at all.
I loved the shouting match between the various ponies. Just shows how easily somepony can try to shift the blame around. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!
This is a great story will Twilight follow in Discord's and Nightmare Moons hoofsteps and become the next great threat to equestria?
Hmmmm... if things weren't serious before, they're getting serious now...
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It also leads to passion, and drive, and therefore to accomplishment... if you are taught to channel it rather than fear and suppress it. The pretentious little cult-leading muppet ignored that.
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That's why I prefer the teachings of the gray jedi:
There is no Dark Side, nor a Light Side
There is Only the Force
I will do what I must to keep the balance
The balance is what keeps me together
There is no good without evil, but evil must not be allowed to flourish
There is passion, Yet peace
Serenity, Yet emotion
Chaos, yet order
I am the wielder of the flame, the protector of balance
I am the holder of the torch, lighting the way
I am the keeper of the flame, soldier of balance
I am a guardian of balance
I am a Gray Jedi
There is a reason this story is called FAITH and DOUBT.
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No, i didn't. It's Equestria...of course they would have puns.
Everypony is to blame, this does mean Twilight as well. She never took care of the emotions that were there, just held them back. Repression is just a temporay fix, wether you like it or not you have to deal with the problem eventully.
Oh and Shining Armor is about to get bashed by the one and only Spike.
*popcorn appears* Drama, Drama everywhere.
(Also Princess Luna and the Royal Canterlot Voice for the win.)
I think it's "thyselves", but honestly that's just me being a picky grammar nazi.
Anyways, I never thought I'd catch myself reading an evil Twilight story, and yet...I love this to death! Her 'reasoning' for her descent into this flurry of hate is just exquisitely written, and just how Twilight devastates everyone present at the wedding (excluding Shining Armor, the unconcious git).
I want to make sure of something though. Back in chapter 2, Twilight hurled Shiny "into" a stained class window, but not through it?
I think I remember that stained-glass windows had metal interlocking the glass to create the patterns? I'm thinking that would stop the stallion from going through it. I'm not sure, I'm just making sure that's what you were intending.
1318618 Well I think Shining Armor gets off the hook just a little because he was being brainwashed, of course brainwashed or not I don't know if he ever should have snapped so harshly at Twilight, stripping her of best mare was fine but telling her not to come to the wedding THAT was where he crossed the line.
wow that was a wonderful filler chapter. o and curse you for the cliffhager and whatnot so yeah this how i am right now
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4.bp.blogspot.com/_EXTi2ta_MxM/TTWoSSc79BI/AAAAAAAABPs/X8J5n1OEJdE/s1600/disappointment-demotivational-poster-1256691519.jpg I like rereading but I want a bit more please
well i'm dissappointed in rarity and AJ especally i can only imagine granny smith and BIG mac are gonna have some words for her when she gets home. spike's reaction i am personaly looking forward too, lets see some dragon rage! i can only imagine cadence well have more words for him when she feels up to it. this should be good.
Great chapter, as usual.
Cadence, yeah... left behind, forgotten-except by Twilight, but even she just tossed the fact of the Princess's real location out there as a barb. What does one make of a love scorned?
Painful to read because it's how it would happen, with everypony right/wrong.
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Correct. Shiny struck the window but did not go flying out. Also, I wouldn't call Twilight 'evil' here. Notice I never use the word evil. I would call her dark, tainted, without restraint and driven by ego.
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I won't ruin the ending but I will say I am a redemptionist at heart. I will also say that I believe that, when done right, a happy ending after a load of dark is the best ending...but when done wrong, it sucks.
That said, I know the ending of this story and it has some major twists that no one will (or has yet) seen coming.
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You are right, I apologize for my slip of the tongue (or finger).
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No problem.
The fact that Twilight isn't 'evil' is VERY VERY important. I can not stress that enough.
Awesome chapter, but I have one or two small problems...
Luna should say "ashamed of thy selves" instead of "thee selves." And after the three periods (...) there should be a space.
Anyway, you need to make the next chapter right damn now.
I really want to like this, but it's hard to when it seems to exist solely to tear down all that opposed Twilight. I dunno, I just feel like you're making it too personal. Stories shouldn't bear grudges.
I suppose I'll finish it simply because I started, but too much more of the "you made Twilight into a monster because you doubted her in an instance just like many of her other overreactions!" stuff and I'm not sure I can stand it.
Welp, that just updated my head-canon...
I thought this scene was well-written, with its high tension and stress. It felt pretty real.
1319349 i am not familiar with this reference. is this in the expanded universe?
can't wait for the next installment...
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Yes.
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I will only say that there is more to this than meets the eye and seeing it only has that would be a mistake.
And that's why you don't skip the Bachelor Party.
I think you're getting your archaic grammar wrong. Here's a reference http://alt-usage-english.org/pronoun_paradigms.html
(Gah, I'm such a medieval nerd that this line just sounds wrong.)