For centuries, the pegasi of Zephyr Heights could not fly. That didn’t stop some from trying.
CONTENT WARNING: This is a work of fiction. I do not condone suicide. If you are suicidal, or have serious concerns about your mental health, I advise you not to read this story.
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well that "indefinite hiatus" didn't last long
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Second paragraph: that is some bucking serious worldbuilding right there. I would applaud, but I don't want to interrupt and risk breaking the spell.
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Motherbucking bucking buck here's my well-earned upvote.
btw I don't know what you were doing with that 1001 word length, but I assume you knew what you were doing and why, whether you might have simply missed an event deadline and said, 'what the heck,' or if it's deeply symbolic.
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Not sure what this means.
I figured Bicylette already had their hooves full with the shiitake-ton of submissions, and my last-minute story would just add to the mountain. Also because when I'm depressed I can barely finish a story to the Fimfiction minimum of 1000 words.
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I was just imagining if I was watching someone tell this as a story. I would be afraid to applaud and risk interrupting or 'breaking the spell.'
I'm HOPING the contest's exact 1000 word length rule was intentionally chosen to make wrangling a large number of entries somewhat easier.
As for what I meant, I was imagining that perhaps the 1001 word length, by barely missing the 1000 word target for the "A Thousand Words Contest," was symbolic of somepony wanting to do something but coming up a little short (or just a little too heavy to fly) partway through.
Woah.
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Yet Zipp was the only pony we ever saw studying aerodynamics. I had always thought it odd that the pegasi managed to invent smart phones, but not even the most primitive of heavier-than-air flight technology.
Can’t imagine how long it would take to cut through steel netting with a pen knife. Hell of an amount of determination required either way.
It takes a lot for me to even glance inside a story with this many red tags, because grimdark, tragedy, and sad times and I are not friends in writing. But, as others here have said you have some really interesting world building here that should be applauded.
I don't like dark themes for the sake of dark themes, and this isn't that—it's perfectly realistic (to real life, anyway) that intelligent creatures born with non-functional wings would encounter depression and other hurdles with mental health, self-esteem, etc. I myself have lightly depicted this with Zipp in my own writing. So, well done!
Hm that seems to be counterintuitive... Getting a solid whack on the floor from dresser height is surely healthier than trying it from the tenth floor... AND it is a firmly teaching moment. ^^;;
This story makes sense. That’s really the best way I can put it.
It’s just so immensely captivating, I want more, but at the same time, don’t really see more as necessary. I heard someone say while describing The Beatles Rock Band, “If my only complaint with your game is that I want more of it, then you’ve done a pretty good job.”
That’s how I’d describe this story, it’s so interesting, so well-put together, and the worldbuilding is done so succinctly that that’s my only complaint. The rest of the story is really good, and I greatly enjoyed every bit of it.
Good job on this one.
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Fucking hell that was amazing. Gave chills down my spine.
Howdy, hi!
This was absolutely sublime. Love how you build up on the core premise of deadly curiosity. Beautiful prose to sell on a fantastic concept. Loved this story to pieces. Thanks!
This is a good story.
On a positive note: Those nets will have to be removed as flight hazards now!... actually, I MIGHT MAYBE write a sequel to this if you don't mind?
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Very thin wires that have to balance mechanical strength with the right reflectivity or whatever to be hard to see, so it might be easier than one might think...
Just the intuition of a guy with a Mechanical Engineering degree... don't actually know if that is correct...
An oddball ghost happened across your fic and read it. Have a review!