After Granny Smith's funeral, life starts to pile up on Applejack. When she finally realises her relationship with Rainbow Dash isn't as strong as she thought, Pinkie Pie steps in as Ponyville's resident love doctor. But can she treat these two patients when their infectious love has spread to her?
When she realises too late that she's more invested than just a third-party observer, can she still trust herself to do what's right, or will she take this carriage by the reigns and ride it 'till the rooter calls for morning?
Written for Bicylette's ApplePie Contest.
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Congrats on the cover image for making me sad and hungry simultaniously.
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Thanks. It's a temporary image though until I find time to draw one. Just needed something so it would look complete before submitting.
There better be another chapter coming
😂 like Pinkie, I find this whole story very fun to read. Maybe we can have a "choose your own ending" type of story, yes? no?
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Thanks for sharing this story with us. The sad theme really nailed in the concept of realistic relationship problems.
The way you wrote the three characters involved makes me wish there's more to read.
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Thank you. Aside from mystery, romance and shipping is the genre I have the least experience with. I'm much more of a sci-fi/fantasy adventure junkie. So I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
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You wrote well though!!!
Of course I enjoyed reading it 💙💙💙
aww, life was a lot less complicated in Season 1!
this was a nice touch, and reminds me of me
gotta admit im a bit surprised the Babs we see in the canon grew up to be into Rarity levels of makeup
aww, yeah, with the rest of her family having those they are "closer to" now than to her. another sad change that can come with adulthood
oof, and Rainbow Dash was prominent in her absence in the scene before. this is a moment that is sadly true to Rainbow Dash's flaws, coming together to result in something that would hurt any romantic partner
oof, and that does bridge the gap between the AppleDash of canon and the future ApplePie. there's something refreshingly classic about this i am digging, it feels like an homage to shipfics past that got past the inconvenient canon ship by revealing that it's covering up deeper unresolved conflicts that come to a head
aww, and a very fitting lesson for the older Pinkie to have learned
hehe, always good to have a Pinkie Pie alliteration
ah, i see this fic is going for a realistic interpretation of Pinkie's object-summoning canon powers
that brings to mind the joke that their elements should have been switched, haha
aww, that is such good advice! more like Pinkie Therapist
hehe, love this
references!
hehe, i like this bit
oof, that's a long walk!
ah nice, Pinkie's powers of subconsciously knowing everything that's happening in the plot
well that makes me glad that pony diabetes isn't real probably
yeah i gotta say i am on Applejack's side here in the indignation
aww, Pinkie's mane is straightened out now!
yeah, i would, too. not the time, Mudbriar!
well this came out of left field, and was very weird!
hehe, that is indeed what she did
i do enjoy this running gag! i am a sucker for the wacky character narrating in a way everyone in the story can hear thing
yeah, that is a lot!
aww, it is nice that Granny Smith's voice is still alive in Applejack's head :)
yes, love the worldbuilding that explains away any pony food that looks non-vegetarian
oof, now that is a good Applejack snap, could totally see it
classic! really takes the air out of the scene
this really seems like an abrupt ending! i'm guessing it was because you ran out of time to write? very understandable if so, the 12kw this ran to was already quite a lot!
there were a lot of great parts to this, with Pinkie being Pinkie and all the little gags about how she interacts with others being very clever and fun. and the relationship conflict between Applejack and Rainbow Dash was a great one. the thoughtlessness and lack of organization on Rainbow Dash's part causing her to miss Granny Smith's funeral is a solid inciting incident, and their mutual resentment over these little things they let fester due to not communicating about them was very on-point.
but the silly Pinkie antics and just how immature all three mares are for their age clashes with the grounded, serious conversations with Maud and Big Mac, because the latter point to there being a genuine and healthy connection between Pinkie and Applejack that develops, as well as character growth for Pinkie, neither of which happens. if it was always meant to be a series of disasters, then i think the story would have been stronger without their sections. still, it was an enjoyable ride, and disaster ApplePie tastes just as good. thanks for it!
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Hey! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I actually had more than enough time to extend the story but chose not to for editing's sake, and because at my core, I'm not a shipping/romance writer, and writing endings for something you suck at is hard. But I'm glad you enjoyed the ride anyhow.