I may love rainbow dash to death but after writing 70,000 words of her I think I need a little break from the pegasus lmao

Wonder who I should write about next...

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idk AJ possibly

Ok it was worth waiting

Comrade Flux, you are accused of Anti-Soviet behaviors, including mind control, extreme-domination, and sexual enslavement.
The punishment... Loss of penis privilege. Do not attempt to run. You cannot escape the soviet union, and the KGB.
Anyways, good story, very good. Now go to horny gulag, you degenerate.

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Those 70,000 words were so amazing.... Im speechless that was fantastic

Her breaking over time in front of Flux.... Perfect I wouldn't have it any other way than to first mind control her and have her break over time wanting and lusting after a bad guy....

There's something so good about breaking Rainbow Dash.... Other characters possibly too but her especially.... Her being reduced down to a obedient slut is just always such a fantastic motive.... Wish people wrote such stories more often

The kinkiness is very well done too focusing on vivid description of smell, taste (Like musk or juices)

But I also love the fact that this story wasn't only Flux just going at it, I was happily surprised to find out there was actually a point where Rainbow was bouncing on his cock without restrain

Very good story, good length and the plot speed was pretty much perfect

Thank you for writing this story like aloooot

The clop in this stroy was well written but outside of that there's nothing to recommend about this story. The story itself isn't very original and other thans etting up the sex there is little story. I gave this an upvote but I won't be reading any possible sequel.

I loved this fic, undoubtedly one of the best I've read in a long time. By the way, Dash Milf is a hit for me, I wish there were more fics on that theme.

Will there be any butt or breast expansion in future sequels?

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I mean there is story where I can fit it in, but I'm not sure what else I could add in given the time, length, and options I had haha! Appreciate you liking it for what it is regardless though!

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Appreciate the feedback! Milf Dash is absolutely unf to me as well, always fun to see it - severely underused as well sadly. I'm not too sure about expanding into, well, expansion but it may arise someday in the future

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Aww! Thank you! I appreciate it!

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Also props to you for finding the other nsfw art piece from Lost I referenced! Was wondering if someone would manage to do it

The rest of the story popped up all at once, so I haven't read the other chapters yet, but I absolutely love this chapter.

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Breaking Rainbow Dash into a subservient wife servant feels great compared to other characters. Seeing them quit their life dream to becoming a stay at home wife turns me on a lot. I also wished more people wrote stories on this. I won't even mind if it was a gender swapped Dash; having a story is better than none.

Technically, this doesn't need to be non-canon, but oh well.

Non Canon is canon and nothing can change my mind

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It's only non-canon for sequels sake, but you are totally able to look at it as canon of course

Hell, I'm shocked so many people like the pregnancy ending, being I've NEVER written anything like it

Hope you'll like the other chapters since you said you haven't checked em out yet!

That was some real good shit mang, not bad at all for a first fic! Don't you ever stop writing now, ya hear?

Oh man was this fic worth the wait!
How does it feel being responsible for possibly making thousands of people bust a nut?

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I don't know if you've already read it or not but tailsopony's "Clean Corners" is a pretty good read if you want inspiration for Twilight.
Pretty much has the same smut as your story and it has good build up.

NO fuckin' way you just wrote of the best fics on the entire site on your first try that's actually nuuuutssssss

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Pfffft, cmon man this fic is OK at best haha

I appreciate the kind words, and I’m glad you enjoyed it!

Having finally finished I can say this is. This has a great mix of build-up and release. VERY well-paced also the feeling of a reversed "Dormammu I've come to make a deal" is honestly funny to me. I loved reading this, it did its role and gave it with gusto,

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Yay, sequel! Will it still be about Rainbow, or another character?

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Rainbow will be in it, as the series is all a tied together story

The focus character of the sequel, aka the next slave, is Pinkie Pie

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Will there be breeding? What use is a slave if you can't breed them, right?!

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Pfffft hehe. Every story in the series will have an alternate non-canon ending with a thoroughly bred mare. Just like Prismatic Pest, I can’t leave preggo stuff out

I really wish I could read the sequel to this series now. A very sexy read!

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I wonder if you will continue this

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