you all may know me from FB as John Killebrew, hope you enjoy the stories.
Many legends are forgotten as time goes on, but one name is still mentioned and symbolic for honor and victory.
Her name is Glory. A bold name for a bold pony who became a symbol of her time.
Prompt story for Equestria Amino Writing League
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Thankyou for a good read.
The story was an inspiring reminder of life, done with very few words.
G1 stories that fit into the G4 universe are rare.
For that, I give you an Applejack
Just tell me... which generation is that apple pony emoticon from again??
/sillyponyhumour
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I'm glad you liked it.
It was part of a writing prompt for Equestria amino, it did so well, I thought I'd put it here to see how other writers and readers would feel about it.
Thank you for the feedback.
As for that pony... Hmmm... No idea. She sure looks familiar though, lol!
This story is certainly well-written, at least from a mechanical perspective. I get what you're trying to do with this story, that is, telling an in-universe legend about a figure from olden pony times. I would say you certainly matched the basic plot of that kind of story, but I feel like this needed to be beefed up a bit, depending on where you were trying to go with it. If you were trying to make it some kind of morality tale, which is the impression I got, then this story would have benefited from having greater characterization for Glory, which would make her more sympathetic to the audience. The stories of the Pillars of Equestria we see in the show are good examples of this kind of story. You don't need to write a whole biography, of course, just throw in a few memorable details that make your legendary figure feel truly unique.
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I'm not going to lie, I could have done a lot more with this to turn it from some story one would read around a campfire to little foals into an epic tale, maybe throw a few other gen 1 ponies in there who interacted with Glory in the movie, but my target idea was to keep it simple and just write a campfire-style legend. Not a lot of detail, little (if any) actual speaking parts, and mostly, brief.
But I do know what you're saying and I appreciate the feedback. Constructive criticism is always appreciated and needed for one's growth and I appreciate other's perspectives on my work, no matter how small.