Hello, I am Count_Pony001. I like to write and draw. I am also a Christan. May God bless you today.
Rainbow dash was bullied because of her unintentional mistakes she made, she had enough of it and quit then decided to join the Equestrian Air Force to make a living and to find better comrades. She joined and even though it was rough, she made it in.
Note: I don't own mlp or the cover art they belong to their rightful owners. the cover art is from someone else i just drew a hat on Rainbow dash to fit the story.
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Kill yourself, this story is shit and so are you.
11202792
Hey, be nice!
Hi!
Welcome to fimfiction. I'm new here as well.
So this story has a lot of potential and tbh its a great idea. There are a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes here and I think that once you develop your writing more, you could make an amazing rewritten version of this story.
She dashed to Canterlot. Then she saw a stallion who is red with a green mane, Rainbow Dash zoomed next to him and said "Are you the one who trains recruits of the Equestrian Air force?" The stallion said "Yes, my name is Staff Sergeant Trainer Hooves" Rainbow Dash said "Can I join the Equestrian Air force?" He replied, "Yes."
(I hope you don't get offended if I edit this a bit. I mean no harm.)
She dashed to the train station as fast as possible and booked a ticket to Canterlot, which to her luck, was coming in a few minutes. After a long train ride she finally reached the magnificent city and started searching for the military base that was written on the advertisement.
As she neared the huge structure, she was stopped by some guards at the gate. "HALT!" One of them shouted. Before they had a chance to say anything else, Dash quickly explained why she was here to avoid getting in trouble.
I'll write the rest when I have the time. Don't be discouraged if you get any bad comments, and use them as constructive criticism. And yes, you should definitely write a second chapter.
Hope this brightens up your day!
Have a good day/night wherever you are.
11202792
Sorry you didn't like the story.
Okay, now wtf is this with you guys sending literal death threats over a story? Does a piece of literal fanfiction about a pastel flying horse anger you that much? Smh.
Hi friend, I’m sorry about the hate you’ve been getting. Don’t listen to them, your idea is good but theres lot of room to improve. The idea is good, but the grammar is hard to read. I have some tips, if you’d like them. Something that would help is editing after writing the story- annoying process but works wonders!
We all start from somewhere, don’t listen to the hate you’re getting. I say keep going, you can only improve for the better!
Okay the idea has some potential. The grammar needs a bit of work and there is more than a few spelling mistakes, but with some rewrites it could work. and I agree with crystaltunes don’t listen to the hate posts it’s best to listen to the constructive and thoughtful posts.
11203554
Thanks, friend.
11203641
thanks, friend.
11203035
I marvel at your ability to handle such a ridiculous person and statement with such a professional and mature attitude. Your response is beyond exemplary and I'm glad to see an alicorn OC in your picture because you are leading the way with good behavior.
11210655
Thanks.
11202792
That's funny coming from you