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Wait. You posted a new story!? Congratulations! Let me track this right now and claim the first comment of this story! Huzzah!
Also, let me guess, Prisoners of War is that other story hm?
Liked this chapter, it sets up the paths that this new arc, 'Bound by Blood', will take!
I think we can all agree that Beatrix needs to figure out how to stop her magic from distorting dimensions. I don't think she's ever visited Shadow's world??? And yet the changes still occurred. That's very, and I mean very powerful magic. No wonder why a simple subconscious wish caused Midnight's dimension to fall into its deadly state.
Hope to see a moment where a remedy is found, though what Iclyn says is very damn true. Just don't travel anymore. Take care of Aba, the daughter you corrupted dozens of worlds for. The daughter you loved so much that you literally made an entirely new timeline where she exists. The daughter who you loved so much that you got the Nice Job Breaking It, Hero! achievement by making the Burning King appear, and thus result in many soldiers' deaths and the injury of several of your friends. Your friends!
Iclyn might not be the most liked in the group, given that she's been rebuking what Beatrix and Oona constantly, but damn I can't deny that what she says is true. But then, it's not entirely Beatrix's fault. Shadow's world was changed even with Beatrix not going to it. Zeloph had a part in making Aba and starting the prophecy. Really, everyone had a fault, but most importantly the Necronomicon was the true culprit of things, it always has been, and Beatrix's simply someone who had to cope with these things, not really understanding the gravity of her actions until so much has been changed. Also the Necronomicon was where Zeloph found Aba??? And it was where Moxxi stored Zeloph? And then it was-
Yeah, screw the Necronomicon, somebody find a way to burn it cause it's been the problem always, and it will continue to be the problem (not that anybody could burn it but you get the point)!
Moxxi now knows what Bellatrix has been doing, and let me say, I was surprised by the extent of rage when Alma began to taunt her. We know that Moxxi has been holding back for so long to prevent herself from falling back into Anarchia, to the point where it became a transformation rather than a natural state. I hope that Moxxi and Bellatrix don't slip up around Alma, cause even if she's weakened she's still a great threat.
Yeah, there's a lot of ambiguous characters that still exist within this story, especially Omen. Though there's a greater than equal chance that he will turn against the team, I just hope that this has been a misunderstanding, but it's not like we've seen other stags to suspect of. And his final line at the end of Lightendark doesn't help his position.
Hope to see how things fare with Midnight and his herd planning to go back to his world. There could be some serious things going on that they need to attend. RIP to everyone who died there by the way, the death toll from such a brutal war would probably be very enormous. Of course, it wouldn't be as large as the multiple Necronomicon Wars in Beatrix's world or how Cerise's world has been decimated by eldritch and demi-gods. But still, it would be large!
Ah! Suspense at the final sentence of this chapter! I hope that Shadow and Zeloph prosper together and fend off against those who want to kill them. Also it's nice to see Shadow's real name again. I know that this story centered between the two will be very fun!
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Beatrix visited Shadow Scythe's world in The Last Sunny Days of Equestria, where they first clashed.
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Ah. Dang it! I'm reading the first story of that three-part series, so I didn't know yet. Curse my lack of knowledge!
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Erm, not sure what context you read, but Moxxi wasn't angry because she couldn't control herself. It's been well established that Moxxi can flip between imp and succubus shape whenever she feels like it.
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Drat.
Now I'm curious.
Typo here. It's "Esmeralda".
Alternate plural: "aromata".
Is she really trying to make Beatrix feel guilty? She should be grateful that more didn't die!😠
It's "guilt".
Trying to make a Vice Lord your consort?? Tell me how that could end well.🙄
That does make me wonder. Is she afraid of letting Zeloph go? If so, why?
Wait, wait, wait! Did she take on the alias "Alice" during her travels!?😮
So why is he hiding from his daughter?
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1. As am I. Always happy to have new characters to explore.
2./3./5. Great suggestions!
4. Hard to fault her given Beatrix still hasn’t gotten a grip of her anomalous prowess. Iclyn may not a nice person, but she be spitting facts.
6. Alma’s not out for needless destruction anymore so… maybe?
7. It’s a bit complicated.
8. Don’t think so, but that would be hilarious! Pretty sure it’s just a reference.
9. There’s a chapter in Bewitching Hour that explains this. But we’ll soon learn why in this story.
You know that this arc will as intense as the previous one if the second chapter has a boss rush.
I love the character interactions as always! So it seems that the vamponies want to ally themselves with Alma eh? I guess this would be the perfect distraction for them now.
This scene would be very cool to see animated with every villain appearing. Ah, and once again the Necronomicon will be one of the many troubles that they'll have to face. Like seriously, how many times did that book screw everybody over? I know it's indestructible but come on! It has to be destroyed or at least sent to a dimension/void so far away that it's as good as gone.
Maybe destroying the Necronomicon or severing Beatrix's connection to it would help remove the distortion around her as well as weaken the book a lot? That book has followed her since day one and if Beatrix is going to have her anomaly trait fixed, then the Necronomicon should be addressed as well!
Oh dear, Changelings still exist in Midnight's world, ready to strike back again! Reminds me on how the Foal Bearer became the leader of the Necronomicon Cult and soon reinitiated the Necronomicon Wars after 12 Years. Considering how strong Beatrix influenced her timeline onto Midnight's, it wouldn't be crazy to assume that the time at which the Second Changeling Invasion begins is the same amount as the time between the First and Second Cult Wars.
Not a lot is known about his world, but if this is true, does that mean that Midnight was 6 when the war ended? His mother and sister did die in a camp raid (strong parallels to the Camp Massacre in Shining Force 1)
This makes me so excited to see what more parallels will be made between Beatrix's world and Midnight's world :D
Good thing that backup came for Beatrix as well! Otherwise, things might've been already over at that moment. Oh, and Natural Selection wanting to go after Oona, that struck a lot in me *chills*
Good thing that Omen is on our side! (Right?) (I know that it's still in the air where he is, but if he's helping us now that's a good thing!)
If it's true that they were killed, I bid Stygian and Somnambula farewell.
Can't wait to see what happens next!
blitzer informed me about this, interesting
nice
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you're welcome! Was confused as to why you didn't show up but now you're here!
The spacing here is misplaced for the opening quotation.
If there's a chance that something like allowing Midnight to live a full life can happen, I'm in.🙋
Yeesh, Shadow. Was that really necessary?😒
I second this. Sure, Iclyn has her concerns about what would happen if Beatrix continues frolicking across the multiverse, but is her insistence that she simply stop any better an option?
And this is why you're no fun.😑
Is this a prison cell or a strip club?😖
You could use a comma here.
Ok, if bribing the manor with meat is that easy, then we have a big problem.
Abadonna's going to have a blast with a dad like that!😆
It's "travelled". Also, while Beatrix did make many enemies, they were only united thanks to Mortis.
Oh, shit. What did Omen make her see?
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1./7./10. Oh, nice!
2. And, y'know, stop accidentally altering innocent lives.
3. Zeloph is the one good thing going in her life, so she doesn't want anyone taking him away from her. That being said, Shadow Scythe will likely need to learn not to be so clingy.
4. Ultimately, no one knows if either option is correct.
5. I take it you never had an annoying sibling/relative that drove you up the wall
6. It shows how seriously Alma's taking her imprisonment~.
8. The Manor, probably.
9. A dad that knows everyone's greatest fear and is likely a cannibal? Yeah, totally a rad fellow!
11. 😶
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In Shadow Scythe's case, I figure she was half-joking...although if Beatrix did make a real move on Zeloph, I'm sure the results wouldn't be pleasant!
As for the manor, since it originally fused with Bellatrix on the agreement she would take care of it, between using it as a weapon and being forced to hold back all the time, it's seriously considering alternatives...
nice work
Dion knocking out Natural Selection was good for Ebony, bad for Natural.
Uh oh! Seems that Bellatrix found herself at the same situation that she was in the Manor! Trapped.
Yay! Moonlight can have a chance to get her wings back!
Yeah, just how many years Midnight had burned off? And looks like Omen is here, as an ally that everyone is sus of. His ability is cool at least. And oops! Sorry for interrupting you, Ashen and Rheneas! That fusion does seem very overpowered not gonna lie.
Things do look to be very hectic, not only with the many external threats but the small cracks/instabilities within their own group.
NO! Is that Zuri, Kali, and Tisha?! No!
Seems that everyone who I make and then gets exported here will suffer some type of terrible fate! i.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/001/881/867/6f6.jpg
Do you guys wish to receive another OC from me? I do have an open policy that any OC I make can be used if that's your wish. Not that I'll be spamming OCs just to add another, but any OC that you think could fit this series that has or will have a major role in my series is open to be used.
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That sounds like something you should have asked ahead of time. There’s a lot more characters yet to appear and we don’t wanna add too many people to follow. Part of the reason where splitting the story in two is to dedicate focus to each tale as equally!
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Well, I think Midnight, Moonlight, any references to Midnight's past life (mainly his family who's role is being dead), the Royal Zebrican Family (Sahel, Zuri, Kali, Tisha) and maybe Midnight's father Thunder Storm (if he's even included in the thought process) are enough characters, and I'm happy that they're in the story.
Like, the OC that could've been added probably already died, and if not, I don't think he would have any relation to this Midnight like he would in my story. I just added that last line as a joke, as well as a reminder that any OC I have could be used, but I think those OCs will be the only ones who'll be used right? Which is fine with me! I'm already interested with what could happen to the Zebrican Princesses!
Would they be tied in with Zeloph's story, given that they'll be experimented by Varys, or will they be tied in with Midnight's story, given that they were created by me? Or maybe in another plot, like maybe with Ebony / The Zebrican?
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A mix of Zeloph and the Zebrica plotline.
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Alright! Then I can't wait to see what will happen next!
Though unlikely, given that neither would remember their past lives (and this is assuming that Midnight's timeline simply went on a glitched loop until we got the Lightendark variant, and not that it's different AUs. I like the glitched loop theory btw), it would be a tad interesting to see the Zebrican princesses scratch their manes upon seeing Midnight, as if they remember each other. But of course, we know that they couldn't remember him unless some weird stuff happened that allows them to see some memories that weren't theirs but feels like they should.
And just for that little bout of misogyny, I'll give you a brief warning (Primes SAR-21 rifle): I may have never fired a gun in my life, but that doesn't mean I don't know how to use this!😡
It's "you".
It's "in".
Replace with "snarkily".
Did you mean "you"?
It's "journey".
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1. When will pigs learn you can’t treat women like that cx
2./3./4./5./6. Huh, a lot of errors focused this round. That’s a little sad.
7. It may already be too late.
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7) So is Bellatrix already a dead woman walking?
another interesting chapter
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Thank you!
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you're welcome
Very good chapter! So I guess the story will split now or soon? And oh dear, seems that them in Manor in trouble. Yeah, seems that Bellatrix's bet has turned into a full blown blunder.
I love the hot talk, and every moment just feels so great. I hope that they're able to let Moonlight fly again!
This story deserves more attention. Like truly. Best M Rated series I've read. A good mix of clop and story is what I like!
Wait, how does that work? Materials can't go extinct.😕
Did you mean "flushed"?
Maybe not, but the fact that you acknowledged your crimes entirely on your own is a good step forward on the road to redemption.🙂
Replace this full stop with a comma.
Getting some of that growth potion from Beatrix is still on her bucket list.🙃
Add "its way" here.
Hyphenate this phrase.
Replace with "?".
Ah, yes. The Snow Analogy: Cold & unwelcoming at first, but harmless as soon as you learn how to understand it.
Tradition, the source of about 50% of drama plots. Can't they all learn that it's just like rules? It's made to be broken!
Add "it's" here. At least Omen does it for good reasons.
Now Oona has 2 babies to deal with.🙄
Add "!" here.
I'm surprised that he was the only one to grow suspicious.😕
You pick now of all times to think of killing her!?😤
I hope they all find a way out of this mess. What can Omen do that won't result in them killing Abby!?
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1. Not extinct. Just no longer available in her world, most likely.
2./4./6./7./8.13. once again, thank you for the grammar suggestion. Though can I ask that you DM me them next time? Sorta feels like your more focused on them then you are the actual story content
3. Indeed! Just need to not be so self destructive with criticism.
5. Nonsense, she’s perfect the way she is!
9. Classic Tsundere
10. The past is very relevant to Haden once we finally do meet him.
11. Not always.
12. Plenty of milk to go around given the size of Oona’s bosom :P
14. He likely already knew something bad was going to happen. He’s a prophet, after all.
15. No, she heavily considered killing Alma. But her ego and feelings got in the way.
16. I mean, he’s a carnivorous deer. They’re not too different in a way.
17. Yeah, when Beatrix and the others find out, there will be hell to pay. But I don’t think what Bellatrix did warrants too harsh a lashing. This would be the third time a heroic character fell for a baddie
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Well, personally, it saves time for me if I don't DM you the corrections separately. I'm not doing this to be condescending, I just want to help you and others as to where grammar correction is due.😊And no, I don't focus more on grammar errors, if that's what you're worried about. There are just times where I don't have much to say about the plot, that's all.
As if we didn't have enough Greek Tragedies in life.😒
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Gotchya! 👌
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Sorry, I mistyped my last reply. I meant to say it takes less time if I post everything in the comments & not DM you the corrections.
(uses the rating) You deserve better, this is interesting!
And vorpal Blade, amusing, a friend's OC uses this as name
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I take it your friend is a fan of the Wonderland stories
But thank you!
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you're welcome and maybe, he never told me much about the background of said OC
(1) Well yeah, Varys has definitely become an even more powerful threat than before thanks to his newly acquired Demi-Human genes.
(2) I couldn't help but snicker at Shadow's description of Moxxi.
(3) Also I couldn't help but laugh as Zeloph groans about hearing their conversation about their assets
(4) PFFT!! Lol, the roasts against Midnight continue to accumulate! XD
(5) Hmm, I find their contrasting views over love, sex, and intimacy, interesting
(6) Again, interesting how the characters reacted to the charity + nuns event.
(7) Well, if you have the luck that Beatrix has, then everything sort of works out at the end. Though to be fair, not all the outcomes were desirable.
(8) Ah, Mortis's party is here to end the party.
(9) RIP all the observers. Yeah, Mortis's quest is very twisted. Violence just breeds more violence tho.
(10) While I'm glad that Quicksilver isn't completly soulless, it's sad that he's definitely under Mortis's control.
(11) Okay so basically the Master won't let them do anything until their main objective is complete? Huh. Well, it's kind of good because that means that as long as that objective isn't complete they can't, or at least shouldn't do anything (but then yet again Natural Selection did try to hunt down Oona so it's... hm). But well that also means that if everyone is defeated, well, RIP
(12) Well, it looks like Moxxi's comment about Nuns is now turned upon its head because their savior is a demi-human who belongs to that faction. And again, if Mortis simply allowed everyone to do as they wanted, well the story would've been over already... pretty much from the start? Huh.
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5. As much as I love open relationships, having a couple devoted to each other is a touching change of pace.
11. it’s heavily implied that Mortis will continue to kill even if he succeeds in killing Shadow Scythe. His underlings will never be free so long he remains active.
12. Felt like a nun based character was missing among our cast. A lot of interactions await ^^
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5. Well I like all the pairings
11. Oof, well I hope he does get stopped as soon as possible without having more observers die. Yeah, seeing Quicksilver in that state was sad.
12. Hmhmm, when the nuns first appeared with the charity I felt that there had to be a reason, and I was pleasantly surprised when our demi human was the Head Nun. Can't wait to see what will unfold!
But damn talk about great timing! I wonder how far in power have we gone to.
Yes! Somebody upvoted!
Musically or literally?😦
Really? Using Celestia's butt as a prayer?
More like she'll leave impact craters just by sitting down.
Relationships 101: Whenever someone's lying about their inner feelings, they stutter.
Surely there's a way to do this more efficiently and economically?
That last reply of yours was still unnecessarily rude. The least you could have done was decline politely!😒
The word "act" is missing here.
That is a fat lie! You're enjoying every second of this!😠
Now I want to know who this new Demi-human is.😯
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1. Yes~
2. I'm certain a religion would exist to worship Celestia's fine derriere
3. Can you tell I had a lot of fun coming up with this lewd nonsense? :p
4. It's hard to find love when most of your body is made of palpable liquid metal. Kitsune definitely got the short end of Varys' experiments.
5. Hey, when you're a pop sensation that makes likely 10k per concert, using shampoo bottles daily is second nature.
6. Unfortunately, polite is not in Ana's vocabulary.
7. Damnit.
8. Revenge is a dish best served cold, as the saying goes.
9. You will in the next chapter! She's one of the many new characters I'm excited to bring into our stories.
nicely done!
I like this chapter a lot! It gives another example of Shadow loving Zeloph by staying by his side, to everyone supporting Shadow, stating their own sins, and showing that they've all improved. Moxxi's interactions and lines are quite funny, you can feel how she wants to change the mood of the monastery from the puritan vibe. Zeloph fucking Shadow in the ass was very hot, and it showed another way of Shadow loving him. Moxxi listening in was interesting as well.
Oh, poor Zuri! At least Tisha and Kali are asleep, but I imagine that there's little hope that they'll be able to be free from Varys with only hours remaining until their transformation is complete. I really hope that Sahel (or however he's named here)'s current decisions are only the product of timelines going into Hardmode / the universe getting a massive reset. Or maybe Varys is using Sahel's words and giving them a new twisted meaning that he never intended, or given that it's a hologram, it might not even be real! It's just to give Zuri emotional damage.
Damn the Necronomicon! I would suggest that a certain Sunset (Sunny) should be invited. Having Sunny either do a mind reset like with Shadow or maybe cause those memories to resurface would be a good idea. Characters have regained their memories back (like Sunset from Force 2), so maybe there's hope that at least they can get their personalities back.
I imagine that Kali, being the more militaristic sister, would be the stronger of the trio, maybe having more armaments or just heavier weaponry due to the fact that her body can carry a bit more than her sisters. Likewise, Tisha would be more on the seductive size, she might not be as big as Zuri, being a D compared to a DD (in my lore), but given that she's younger and shorter, she's technically more curvier. Zuri can be a more balanced one.
With the Necronomicon and dark technology fusing together, there's no telling how far Varys will go with the trio.
I wonder what would happen if the sisters met Midnight. They were after all together in one loop. I doubt they'll remember each other, but perhaps there could be a need for an Awakened Hyper Stallion that can produce a ton of foals so that Varys could use them in his experiments. Realistically if Varys wanted to, he could probably find a use for every single character if he captured them all and denied others the chance to spill their blood.
It's a wishful thought, but I hope that there's a way to reverse the damage that the universe has experienced. So many worlds have lost countless lives, could it be possible to find something that can return things to the way they should be?
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No.
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Like I said, wishful thinking. I know such a thing is impossible, or at least wouldn't make sense story-wise because it'd make all the achievements and all the losses mean nothing anymore.
Still, I am happy with where the gang is right now. They've grown so much from their origins, and it makes me happy.
No offence, but this seems to be a running cliche in movies/stories, where the villain almost succeeds in killing the hero when something/someone saves them at the literal last second, however little/much that makes sense storywise.
Dying means that the pleasure is short-lived. I'd like to savour badonkers for as long as I want, thank you very much!😠
You could captialise it as "Adam 'n Make-Believe".
So her venom induces...laughter? I don't know what to feel about that.😕
Oh, please! Like you don't enjoy being nibbled.😒
The power of testimony.
I swear, Ana, your lust will be the death of you.😑
Eh, I prefer the Sister Act version of Hail Holy Queen.
Maybe, but you've only known her for 1 day. Maybe give her a little more time before you decide if she's another enemy.
Has Beatrix seriously never done that? How!?😕
But you can't make babies with that hole.
You can replace the full stop with a colon here.
What's stopping her from joining them in a threesome?
Who was that girl?
That sounds oddly dark for a band name.
There's no capitalisation here.
That's quite a dilemma. Which is worse? To give up the very powers that keep you & your loved ones alive to regain your flesh, or keeping them & forever remaining a cyborg?
I hope they can all be saved from Varys's cybernetic torture.
There's an "l" at the end.
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10. Beatrix didn't try that with Zeloph, but she's done pretty much everything with someone! (Or something!)
13. Don't think Shadow Scythe would appreciate Moxxi butting in, she's already pretty insecure, and Moxxi annoys her more than anyone.
15. Well, S.L.U.T. is an incredibly edgy band (From the cyberpunk universe, which is already edgy), basically they're an abrasive mix of Death Metal, Punk, and everything noisy/screamy mixed together. I figure everything in the future is taken to 11.
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1. Yeah, my stories tend to use that trope a lot.
2. It ‘twas a joke
3./12./16./19. Gosh darn it
4. It’s actually pretty terrifying if one thinks about it.
7. Death by SnuSnu ain’t a bad way to die either~
9. Zeloph’s just as put off by Julianne and her covenant as Ana/Moxxi, due to it resembling his time as a zealous cult leader.
10. Their sexual encounters were more about reproduction than love, so foreplay wasn’t that big an interest. Still, if ever given the chance to have sex with him, I’m sure Beatrix would try it, if only to say “I blew an angel once~!”
11./13. It’s been stated numerous times that Shadow Scythe doesn’t want babies, for personal and biological reasons. She also doesn’t want to share her newfound relationship, especially with Zell’s over abnoxious sister, whose not in the best of mindsets this story.
14. Read the Neon Demon chapter in The Bewitching Hour for context.
15. Idk, having a full lesbian band can be empowering if the image and songs are right.
17. It’s a good thing there exploring their yokai roots, so that Kit can still be powerful, but finally enjoy flesh and blood again.
18. They’re hardly the first. And they won’t be the last.
nice work