A Touch of Madness

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Mix-up #1 · Mar 16th, 2022 · 2 · ·

Always love a good R63 Shy Romance, this could be interesting. So far the writing isn't that bad, but it would help to hear express more of Butterscotch's thoughts and feeling through the narrator as at present it give only a plastic feeling of the character at the moment, it interesting. You might also want to try out a text to speech program, like Balabolka (yes it's totally free) which helps show what your writing sounds like to a reader.

Best of luck on your story.

GoldenDoodle

GoldenDoodle #2 · Mar 16th, 2022 · 1 · ·

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Thank you, that's the kinda feedback I need to hear. I did write this one in an hour or 2 while I was tired as a sort of writing therapy. I'll probably update this chapter tonight with some better organization and more inner monolog.

GrimmWolfDragon