I was just completely jaded one day, bored of 9th grade, (obviously) and I finished my homework early one night, (9:45PM) so I decided to write a non-gore story. Yes. Non-gore. That means actually using 'emotion.' I tried to incorporate a few Elements of Comedy in there, but I don't know if it flew too well... I fear it might be too techy...
Anyways, on with the important stuff. PS. Rated (T) for language. MAYBE some sexual themes might arise in the near future, but I'll cross that bridge when I come to it.
You: Dammit, Swiss! Get on with the important stuff already! I don't need no bucking warnings or insights to the well-being of this story's future! I'm American!
Me: Fine, fine... Here it is.
You're a janitor who used to be an engineer, but you've long-since been fired. One day on your way to work, you meet a nice pony on the train. She turns your miserable life around 180 degrees. Your bro-friends get a bit pissed, as this 'Fluttershy' begins gnawing into your friendship. Some other events also happen, but I haven't got all this sorted out yet. I'm still trying to develop the story and I'd like some suggestions. Thanks everypony out there!
Great story. Can't wait for more!
1280233 Thanks!
s-e-q-u-e-l PLEASE
where my sequel???
1280306 yeah, thanks also. I'm in the process of writing one, but it just doesn't have the same vibes as this chapter. I've been rewriting the first 20 sentences over and over, but the story doesn't flow as smoothly as this one. It's really irking, so I'm starting another project combining European mythology with MLP. Fear not, though, a sequel will be out soon. Another thing I'm concerned about is the dry humor in the story. It also irks me. I'm afraid no one understands what 'geil' means in German, (And I also think I misspelled it.) it's a double-whammy because I don't want to let you guys down with an imperfect story, yet I want to entertain a light level everyday-life comedy throughout it. I'm probably just overthinking this as usual and rambling on and on without making much sense. Sorry, but I just had to put my concerns out on the line.
i>>1280419 it's okay dude also don't rush please! if you need any help just pm me :D (making a story my self and it's going pretty good :D)
Me Gusta
1280448 yeah, I know, I stress myself out over the smallest details sometime. I'm working on 2 raps at the moment, too (Hitpony and Nightmare Realm) and I've got all these survivalist campouts, so I have almost no freetime anymore. It'll probably be a few days before chapter 2.
1280763 like i said don't rush. and like i said if you need any help just pm me :D
Well, I'll be waiting for more. I'm really liking it so far, I wish more stories had a setting like this.